Premiere Contest Winner5th Avenue Sunrise

jampacked city streets
that jangled and banged
in the raucous jarring day
shifted
from business to boogaloo
squeezing into moonlight
party lights
gin and lime-kissed
gimlet sequined dress
strutted
in studded six-inch heels
riveting flair
provoking jive and jazzy nights
to tame this lion of New York

The bed swallowed the evening
sucked-up in slumbered
sobering snooze
exhaling the drunkard’s stench
while the warmth of whiskey
and you next to me
laid dreamy still

popped up and propped up
restless and ragged
realizing the changing view
through the dirt-stained window
a pool of placid sunrise
igniting
colorless clustered towers
bulwarks and girders
scraping the sky

out of the easterly clouds
a creeping golden palette
arose
touching every crevice
defining each silhouette
your body stirs deliberate and slow

rainbow hued eyes
slenderly slitted catching
the new-found light
opening, tenderly revealing
the landscape of your smile
disclosing
a cozy contentment

waking with hello
as I fall into your dream
and a new day
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Kalita Avatar
March 17, 2024 at 6:22 PM
Belated congratulations on the deserving win. Apology was away from the site from a long. Wishing you a blessed future ahead;
Blodgett Avatar
March 21, 2024 at 12:50 PM
Thank you so very much!
Jones Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 3:38 AM
Belated congrats on potw!
Blodgett Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 8:41 AM
Thank you Karen. Lonna
Narain Avatar
August 10, 2023 at 11:54 AM
congrats on your potw poem.
Blodgett Avatar
August 12, 2023 at 7:24 PM
Thank you Jay! Lonna
Andresen Avatar
August 10, 2023 at 6:46 AM
- Congratulations on your p.o.t.w., Lonna ... a excellet poem :) - hugs
Blodgett Avatar
August 12, 2023 at 7:23 PM
Thank you Anne-Lise for your kind comments! Health and Happiness! Lonna
Hamilton Avatar
August 9, 2023 at 10:22 AM
Sorry I'm late to the party, ditto to all the comments, congrats on your win Lonna, this is a great write, enjoyed!
Blodgett Avatar
August 12, 2023 at 7:22 PM
John, thank you for your kind encouragement. Lonna
Meadows Avatar
August 6, 2023 at 11:37 PM
Congratulations on your POTW. Well done.
Blodgett Avatar
August 7, 2023 at 4:44 PM
Thank you so very much Jeanette. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Watt Avatar
August 6, 2023 at 9:43 PM
Lonna, love your phrasing for this night on the town followed by a gentle waking up with the one you love. Particularly admired "a creeping golden palette arose touching every crevice" and "the landscape of your smile disclosing a cozy contentment". Great to see your stunning talents on display with POTW honors... congrats!
Blodgett Avatar
August 7, 2023 at 4:38 PM
Thank you John so much. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Nicole Avatar
August 6, 2023 at 6:09 PM
Lonna, the mood is romantic, dreamy and somewhat playful. You've created a beautiful scene with your words. Congratulations my dear friend, on Poem of the Week. My best to you. :) Brandy
Blodgett Avatar
August 7, 2023 at 4:39 PM
Thank you Brandy for your kind words. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Lawrence Avatar
August 6, 2023 at 1:05 PM
Lonna, So special … an enveloping landscape of images, emotions, place and time ! Wonderful words you paint for us ! Congratulations on POTW and your win ! So happy to have found you here on Soup . All my best , Susan :)
Blodgett Avatar
August 7, 2023 at 4:39 PM
Thank you very much Susan. Health and Happiness! Lonna
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August 6, 2023 at 12:34 PM
Lovely Lonna, I enjoyed the story of a jazzy night out. Congratulations on receiving the honour of poem of the week… Belle
Blodgett Avatar
August 7, 2023 at 4:40 PM
Thanks very much Belle. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Baker Avatar
August 6, 2023 at 9:08 AM
Congratulations on your POTW, Lonna. I enjoyed the eloquent imagery throughout the romantic tale of the city life. Enjoy your special week of recognition! Bill
Blodgett Avatar
August 7, 2023 at 4:40 PM
Much appreciation Bill. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Goldsmith Avatar
August 6, 2023 at 8:08 AM
Congratulations on your POTW win. I enjoyed your story/write. Have a blessed day/week writing away...........
Blodgett Avatar
August 7, 2023 at 4:41 PM
Very nice of you Paula. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Fowler Avatar
August 6, 2023 at 7:04 AM
Wow - your transitional imagery is fabulous! Congratulations Lonna! :)
Blodgett Avatar
August 7, 2023 at 4:42 PM
Thank you for your kind comment. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Kitchin Avatar
August 6, 2023 at 6:11 AM
Lonna, very creative with wonderful imagery, congratulations on POTW!
Blodgett Avatar
August 7, 2023 at 4:42 PM
Thanks so very much Tania. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Merryman Avatar
August 5, 2023 at 7:49 PM
Lonna, your descriptive language and vivid visual imagery are fantastic! Congrats on your 1st place win! Blessings, Kim M
Blodgett Avatar
August 7, 2023 at 4:44 PM
Thanks Kim so very much. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Sambourne Avatar
August 4, 2023 at 1:25 PM
Now this is great poetry. The word choice flows with true originality as one image of city slumber + lust bleeds effortlessly into the next. Congratulations on a stellar write! Brian
Blodgett Avatar
August 4, 2023 at 7:39 PM
I truly appreciate this so encouraging comment! Health and Happiness Lonna
Lawless Avatar
August 4, 2023 at 5:36 AM
THIS IS SOOOOOOOOOO GOOD....I'm with JCB on the FAVE
Blodgett Avatar
August 4, 2023 at 7:38 PM
WOW! Thank you so very much John. Your comment is so appreciated! Health and Happiness Lonna
Brul Avatar
August 3, 2023 at 9:12 PM
I read this poem in one breath! I have no words to describe the magic of the metaphoric beauty in each line. Congratulations on your well-deserved trophy win with this masterpiece! A fave!!!! ^___^JCB
Blodgett Avatar
August 6, 2023 at 6:19 PM
Dear JCB, Your comment is quite humbling! Thank you so very much for the encouragement. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Ashley Avatar
August 3, 2023 at 7:57 AM
Dear Lonna, the talent of your soulful pen captivates my heart's imagination and scintillates with poetic brilliance. Amazing and rich with imagery, emotion and metaphors, I fell for this piece "from business to boogaloo" and knew I was in for something very special. Congratulations for your well-deserved trophy win in Brian's contest with this exquisite poem. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Blodgett Avatar
August 3, 2023 at 12:34 PM
Dear Susan, I always so appreciate your very caring and great commentary. Thank you for always encouraging. Health and Happiness my friend! Lonna
Seeker Avatar
August 3, 2023 at 7:04 AM
Beautiful poem, LB ~ warmest congratulations on your well deserved trophy win
Blodgett Avatar
August 3, 2023 at 12:33 PM
I so appreciate your wonderful comment. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Daniel Avatar
August 3, 2023 at 6:31 AM
Lovely poem, Lonna, congratulations:)
Blodgett Avatar
August 3, 2023 at 11:29 PM
Thank you Joanna. Health and happiness! Lonna
Mcintosh Avatar
August 3, 2023 at 3:10 AM
Congratulations on your top win. God bless you always, Love, Gina
Blodgett Avatar
August 3, 2023 at 12:32 PM
Thank you for the most kind comment! Health and Happiness! Lonna
Radice Avatar
August 3, 2023 at 2:34 AM
Let me be amongst the first to say this is exceptional Lonna. Congratulations on winning Brian's Contest too. Cheers - Gary
Blodgett Avatar
August 3, 2023 at 12:32 PM
Gary I thank you so very much for your ongoing support and encouragement. Health and Happiness! Lonna
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