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5th Avenue Sunrise Premiere Contest Winner

jampacked city streets
that jangled and banged
in the raucous jarring day
shifted
from business to boogaloo
squeezing into moonlight
party lights
gin and lime-kissed
gimlet sequined dress
strutted
in studded six-inch heels
riveting flair
provoking jive and jazzy nights
to tame this lion of New York

The bed swallowed the evening
sucked-up in slumbered
sobering snooze
exhaling the drunkard’s stench
while the warmth of whiskey
and you next to me
laid dreamy still

popped up and propped up
restless and ragged
realizing the changing view
through the dirt-stained window
a pool of placid sunrise
igniting
colorless clustered towers
bulwarks and girders
scraping the sky

out of the easterly clouds
a creeping golden palette
arose
touching every crevice
defining each silhouette
your body stirs deliberate and slow

rainbow hued eyes
slenderly slitted catching
the new-found light
opening, tenderly revealing
the landscape of your smile
disclosing
a cozy contentment

waking with hello
as I fall into your dream
and a new day

Copyright © | Year Posted 2023




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Date: 3/17/2024 6:22:00 PM
Belated congratulations on the deserving win. Apology was away from the site from a long. Wishing you a blessed future ahead;
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 3/21/2024 12:50:00 PM
Thank you so very much!
Date: 10/2/2023 3:38:00 AM
Belated congrats on potw!
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 10/2/2023 8:41:00 AM
Thank you Karen. Lonna
Date: 8/10/2023 11:54:00 AM
congrats on your potw poem.
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/12/2023 7:24:00 PM
Thank you Jay! Lonna
Date: 8/10/2023 6:46:00 AM
- Congratulations on your p.o.t.w., Lonna ... a excellet poem :) - hugs
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/12/2023 7:23:00 PM
Thank you Anne-Lise for your kind comments! Health and Happiness! Lonna
Date: 8/9/2023 10:22:00 AM
Sorry I'm late to the party, ditto to all the comments, congrats on your win Lonna, this is a great write, enjoyed!
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/12/2023 7:22:00 PM
John, thank you for your kind encouragement. Lonna
Date: 8/6/2023 11:37:00 PM
Congratulations on your POTW. Well done.
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/7/2023 4:44:00 PM
Thank you so very much Jeanette. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Date: 8/6/2023 9:43:00 PM
Lonna, love your phrasing for this night on the town followed by a gentle waking up with the one you love. Particularly admired "a creeping golden palette arose touching every crevice" and "the landscape of your smile disclosing a cozy contentment". Great to see your stunning talents on display with POTW honors... congrats!
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/7/2023 4:38:00 PM
Thank you John so much. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Date: 8/6/2023 6:09:00 PM
Lonna, the mood is romantic, dreamy and somewhat playful. You've created a beautiful scene with your words. Congratulations my dear friend, on Poem of the Week. My best to you. :) Brandy
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/7/2023 4:39:00 PM
Thank you Brandy for your kind words. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Date: 8/6/2023 1:05:00 PM
Lonna, So special … an enveloping landscape of images, emotions, place and time ! Wonderful words you paint for us ! Congratulations on POTW and your win ! So happy to have found you here on Soup . All my best , Susan :)
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/7/2023 4:39:00 PM
Thank you very much Susan. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Date: 8/6/2023 12:34:00 PM
Lovely Lonna, I enjoyed the story of a jazzy night out. Congratulations on receiving the honour of poem of the week… Belle
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/7/2023 4:40:00 PM
Thanks very much Belle. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Date: 8/6/2023 9:08:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTW, Lonna. I enjoyed the eloquent imagery throughout the romantic tale of the city life. Enjoy your special week of recognition! Bill
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/7/2023 4:40:00 PM
Much appreciation Bill. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Date: 8/6/2023 8:08:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTW win. I enjoyed your story/write. Have a blessed day/week writing away...........
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/7/2023 4:41:00 PM
Very nice of you Paula. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Date: 8/6/2023 7:04:00 AM
Wow - your transitional imagery is fabulous! Congratulations Lonna! :)
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/7/2023 4:42:00 PM
Thank you for your kind comment. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Date: 8/6/2023 6:11:00 AM
Lonna, very creative with wonderful imagery, congratulations on POTW!
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/7/2023 4:42:00 PM
Thanks so very much Tania. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Date: 8/5/2023 7:49:00 PM
Lonna, your descriptive language and vivid visual imagery are fantastic! Congrats on your 1st place win! Blessings, Kim M
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/7/2023 4:44:00 PM
Thanks Kim so very much. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Date: 8/4/2023 1:25:00 PM
Now this is great poetry. The word choice flows with true originality as one image of city slumber + lust bleeds effortlessly into the next. Congratulations on a stellar write! Brian
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/4/2023 7:39:00 PM
I truly appreciate this so encouraging comment! Health and Happiness Lonna
Date: 8/4/2023 5:36:00 AM
THIS IS SOOOOOOOOOO GOOD....I'm with JCB on the FAVE
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/4/2023 7:38:00 PM
WOW! Thank you so very much John. Your comment is so appreciated! Health and Happiness Lonna
Date: 8/3/2023 9:12:00 PM
I read this poem in one breath! I have no words to describe the magic of the metaphoric beauty in each line. Congratulations on your well-deserved trophy win with this masterpiece! A fave!!!! ^___^JCB
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/6/2023 6:19:00 PM
Dear JCB, Your comment is quite humbling! Thank you so very much for the encouragement. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Date: 8/3/2023 7:57:00 AM
Dear Lonna, the talent of your soulful pen captivates my heart's imagination and scintillates with poetic brilliance. Amazing and rich with imagery, emotion and metaphors, I fell for this piece "from business to boogaloo" and knew I was in for something very special. Congratulations for your well-deserved trophy win in Brian's contest with this exquisite poem. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/3/2023 12:34:00 PM
Dear Susan, I always so appreciate your very caring and great commentary. Thank you for always encouraging. Health and Happiness my friend! Lonna
Date: 8/3/2023 7:04:00 AM
Beautiful poem, LB ~ warmest congratulations on your well deserved trophy win
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/3/2023 12:33:00 PM
I so appreciate your wonderful comment. Health and Happiness! Lonna
Date: 8/3/2023 6:31:00 AM
Lovely poem, Lonna, congratulations:)
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/3/2023 11:29:00 PM
Thank you Joanna. Health and happiness! Lonna
Date: 8/3/2023 3:10:00 AM
Congratulations on your top win. God bless you always, Love, Gina
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/3/2023 12:32:00 PM
Thank you for the most kind comment! Health and Happiness! Lonna
Date: 8/3/2023 2:34:00 AM
Let me be amongst the first to say this is exceptional Lonna. Congratulations on winning Brian's Contest too. Cheers - Gary
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Lonna Blodgett
Date: 8/3/2023 12:32:00 PM
Gary I thank you so very much for your ongoing support and encouragement. Health and Happiness! Lonna

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