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- Heaven Or Hell -

The night is moonless The soul feels uneasy Alone in a deep nothing The horror occupies my mind Hear the demon's laughter Silent scream choked in darkness The body feels heavy and will loose Breathing and pulse beats boils Sharp claws scratching my neck Long sharp nails, knife blades Knowing the smell, rotten and moist Panic takes me totally Is it the death breathing down my neck I have no choice? Where is the gate of heaven? 19.08.2013 A-L Andresen :) Copyright © All Rights Reserved (5th in the contest)

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Austin Eseke

Date: 12/9/2013 12:20:00 PM

NICE ONE.EXCELLENTOOOOOO

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 12/9/2013 12:30:00 PM

- Thanks for the visit and comments, Austin. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Crystal Tichenor

Date: 9/6/2013 8:30:00 AM

Wow! I love when I can not only read the words and see the visual, but when I can FEEL it as well. What wonderful writing. :) It took me to another place so thank you for sharing!

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 9/6/2013 11:17:00 AM

- Thanks for the visit and comments, Crystal. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 8/30/2013 3:02:00 AM

I HAVE BEEN THERE A FEW TIMES GOD BLESS A VERY BEAUTIFULLY PENNED PIECE

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/30/2013 5:21:00 AM

- Thanks for the visit and comments, Liam. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Cherl Dunn

Date: 8/28/2013 8:02:00 PM

All I can say is wow on this write. cool visual. cheri also thank you for your comments.

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/29/2013 12:46:00 AM

- Thanks for the nice visit and comments Cherl. - welcome back when you want to read more of my poems. - Always a pleasure! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Kelly Deschler

Date: 8/28/2013 1:13:00 PM

Amazing dark poetry, Anne-Lise! Very well done. And, thank you for your comments on my poem "Serenity". I appreciate it! Congratulations on your win, as well!

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/28/2013 1:14:00 PM

- Kelly, thank you for nice visit, always pleasant with feed-back on what I post. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 8/25/2013 7:30:00 PM

Wow, I dream t I wrote that one!!!! :)

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/26/2013 3:20:00 AM

- Arthur, thank you for nice visit, always pleasant with feed-back on what I post. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 8/25/2013 3:25:00 PM

Lovely and deep....Great write..Congrats on your well deserved win ,dear friend...Love Olu...

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/25/2013 3:42:00 PM

- Thanks for the congratulations, and visit Olusequn. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Danesh Morgan

Date: 8/25/2013 2:47:00 AM

Congrats on yr win. Morgan

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/25/2013 4:26:00 AM

- Thanks for the congratulations, and visit Morgan. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Chris Boskovski

Date: 8/25/2013 12:10:00 AM

Wow very haunting, yet greatly written poem Anne- Lisa great write!!! and congrats on your win!!!! very handy work you have here! Love - Christopher!! xoxo :)

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/25/2013 4:26:00 AM

- Thanks for the congratulations, and visit Christopher. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Joseph May

Date: 8/24/2013 9:00:00 AM

congrats on a great win Anne

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/24/2013 9:10:00 AM

- Thanks for the congratulations, Joseph. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/23/2013 7:16:00 PM

Good job with this one. IT's a poem of yours I do not recall seeing before. Congratulations.

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/24/2013 4:19:00 AM

- Thanks for the congratulations, Andrea. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Harry Horsman

Date: 8/23/2013 10:14:00 AM

love this, and your sheer diversity here on soup,

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/23/2013 10:27:00 AM

- Harry, thank you for nice visit, always pleasant with feed-back on what I post. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Linda Jackson

Date: 8/22/2013 7:16:00 AM

a brilliant and very well written poem. Best wishes Linda x

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/22/2013 7:17:00 AM

- Linda, thank you for nice visit, always pleasant with feed-back on what I post. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Wilma Neels

Date: 8/22/2013 5:53:00 AM

Anne Lise, intense piece so different from what you normally write. Enjoyed this one too, especially the ending :) *Hugs* xx

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/22/2013 5:58:00 AM

- Wilma, thank you for nice visit, always pleasant with feed-back on what I post. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 8/22/2013 5:32:00 AM

If it is for any contest where you have to create a scene horror it would win a high point Anne. After reading your Poem the story of Dr. Faustus came to mind when he was crying for a drop of home. You have great skills Anne and thank you for your kind words on my Poem. Love and best wishes...Ravindra

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/22/2013 5:51:00 AM

- Ravindra, thank you for sweet and nice visit, always pleasant with feed-back on what I post. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Sindiswa Mhlanga

Date: 8/21/2013 11:28:00 PM

WAUNDERFUL POEM,TRUELY PAINLESS LOVE THE LAST LINE....ANNE THNK YOU FOR THE WARM WELCM,BUT IF I MAY ASK ARE THERE PRVT CHATTIN ROOMS HERE IF THERE ARE CULD YOU PLZ TELL ME HW TO INVYT PPL OR GET THERE...CHEERS

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/22/2013 1:29:00 AM

- Thank you for nice visit, always pleasant with feed-back on what I post. - You can write mail on "My inboxes" - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/21/2013 3:07:00 PM

The hairs are rising on the back of my neck. Well done. Thanks for all your thoughtful visits, they are appreciated.

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/22/2013 1:25:00 AM

- Richard, thank you for nice visit, always pleasant with feed-back on what I post. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Laila Andresen Mjelde

Date: 8/21/2013 12:48:00 PM

Hi mom! This is so different from your other poems, have you seen alot of scary movies lately? Scary, spooky, like it. love Laila

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/21/2013 1:00:00 PM

- My daughter Laila , thank you for nice visit ! - No, scary movies !!. - oxox // mom :)

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/21/2013 7:42:00 AM

OH MY!!! Be it far from you, my dear! Chilling write...Heaven awaits you, my sweet...but not now! Not now! LOVE YOU!

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/21/2013 9:53:00 AM

- Eileen, thank you for nice visit, always pleasant with feed-back on what I post. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/21/2013 7:07:00 AM

oh my, this pierces the senses in a most solid way, anne.. i'm on vacation!.. take care and will pass by again.. :) huggs

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/21/2013 9:55:00 AM

- Have a nice holiday, Nette! - Thank you for nice visit, always pleasant with feed-back on what I post. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Karen Anglesey

Date: 8/20/2013 7:15:00 PM

I certainly felt the death vibes creeping around you...so well written that it felt spooky real :)

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/21/2013 3:07:00 AM

- Karen, thank you for nice visit, always pleasant with feed-back on what I post. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Cherl Dunn

Date: 8/20/2013 6:27:00 PM

This is something I should not have read after watching a night mare on elm street marathon yesterday. cool write

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/21/2013 3:06:00 AM

- Cherl, thank you for nice visit, always pleasant with feed-back on what I post. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 8/20/2013 4:30:00 PM

You can feel the demon breathing down your back in this poem. Yes, find me heaven's gate and be quick. Awesome. love phyl

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/21/2013 3:06:00 AM

- Phyllis, thank you for nice visit, always pleasant with feed-back on what I post. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Ken Carroll

Date: 8/20/2013 3:41:00 PM

Hi Anne, Nicely written...A sense of urgency was felt while reading it.. Ken..

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/21/2013 3:04:00 AM

- Kenneth, thank you for nice visit, always pleasant with feed-back on what I post. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Kash Poet

Date: 8/20/2013 2:01:00 PM

A scary write here.Was it a nightmare?Beautifully expressed feelings.

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/20/2013 2:04:00 PM

... no nightmares, just fantasy :) - Kash, thank you for nice visit, always pleasant with feed-back on what I post. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)