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Jeannelyn Vitasolo - all messages by user

3/28/2018 6:33:35 PM
PLEASE CRITIQUE MY WORK	BLACK HOLE This is me, black hole. And it is the reason why I'm pulling you back. BATE You, poisonous bitch. Him, a prey who would let you. But I, would slew you. WAVES This splashing of waves, it is rocking me to sleep to dream about you. BLOOMING TULIPS Tulips blooms in spring with delicate scent and grace. So chin up, show it! TULIP You were not a rose, but you're a tulip that grows; delicate and great. BLOSSOM A flower blossomed and opened its gracefulness through eternity. TOXIC Your mouth is spitting; words can burn heart that's healin'. Can't you just mend it? PUDDLE OF TEARS It's puddle of tears streaming down your eyes I see. Can we stop hurting? BUBBLES If bubbles would puff, then I'd take photos of it so that it would last. WIND Those spring flower buds, just keeps swinging and swaying like wind I can't keep. (ps. Please i want anybody to critique my work so much... I would really do appreciate it.)
3/28/2018 7:14:44 PM
PLEASE CRITIQUE MY WORK	I had a confussion about haiku and other forms... That's why I badly need an honest criticism about my work. Wether my work is a haiku or not. Does I used proper punctuations or not... Pretty please... I need your guide... Thanks a lot in advance 😍
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