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6/20/2016 7:51:42 AM
My first Villanelle Poem... Help!	I wrote this poem last year and would like to write another. Any tips to make the next better would be of great help. I'm alone as I lay missing you, Weary is my heart while burning in pain, For my love shall remain here for you. When dawn breaks my broken heart heals anew, Nightfall draws closer while my heart cries in vain, I'm alone as I lay missing you. My soul feels helpless but remains for you true, Your memory compels me while my happiness wanes, For my love shall remain here for you. Perhaps the devil is collecting his due, Hopelessly forcing my feelings in chains, I'm alone as I lay missing you. Whilst my feeling for your touch in lieu, Sorrow hath covered my heart causing stains, For my love shall remain here for you. If only these moments subsided to few, The sensation of bereavement refrained, I'm alone as I lay missing you, For my love shall remain here for you. edited by Alone Star on 6/20/2016
6/20/2016 7:57:24 AM
Honest Critique please.	I really enjoyed it.
6/20/2016 8:05:26 AM
Sharpness of Her Pen - by - Bob Atkinson	Good work Bob.
6/20/2016 8:06:06 AM
My first Villanelle Poem... Help!	Be brutal I don't care lol
6/20/2016 8:14:57 AM
My First Published Novel	Congrats!
6/20/2016 12:43:32 PM
My first Villanelle Poem... Help!	Gee thx... Lol
6/20/2016 10:27:13 PM
My first Villanelle Poem... Help!	Thank you that's exactly what I was looking for. I will work on it. Thanks again.
6/23/2016 5:45:01 AM
My first Villanelle Poem... Help!	Thank you Lisa
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