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4/17/2019 3:39:37 PM
Critique would be appreciated	It's one of my first poems I'm not good at writing also. I just want to try as many things as possible and see how it'll go. The silence.. It‘s dark..Silent I close my eyes..Silence I hear him again I‘m feeling his ominous Yet such warm pressence He speaks to me.. And now he‘s silent.. I can‘t hear anything...Silence. I open my eyes..Red Red everywhere.. I close my eyes..Silence.. I can hear him with his faint voice He speaks to me, but I can‘t hear him Luminous light starts shining.. Silence..Silence again. I don‘t feel him anymore. I open my eyes..Silence.. edited by T.Peseckas on 4/17/2019 edited by T.Peseckas on 4/17/2019
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4/17/2019 3:39:37 PM

It's one of my first poems I'm not good at writing also. I just want to try as many things as possible and see how it'll go.

The silence..

It‘s dark..Silent
I close my eyes..Silence
I hear him again

I‘m feeling his ominous
Yet such warm pressence
He speaks to me..
And now he‘s silent..
I can‘t hear anything...Silence.

I open my eyes..Red
Red everywhere..
I close my eyes..Silence..

I can hear him with his faint voice
He speaks to me, but I can‘t hear him
Luminous light starts shining..

Silence..Silence again.
I don‘t feel him anymore.
I open my eyes..Silence..
edited by T.Peseckas on 4/17/2019
edited by T.Peseckas on 4/17/2019

pages: 1