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Haiku and Senryu

Blog Posted by Thomas Martin: 4/14/2015 6:29:00 PM

A friend, who was an haiku poet, admired one of my articles in which I used 3-line poems, and in correspondenc e with him, started reading some of his haiku. It didnot take long before I became obsessed with this form.  I spent two very  intense years studying haiku and finally managed to take a chance on publication.  Well it took another 6 months or so before I finally published in Frogpond, a quality journal of the Haiku Society of America.

Here's a haiku by one of my favorite poets and also  this), Ray Masmussen:

campfiretalk
moths flutter in and out
of the shadows

Note the nature reference is just implied by the words campfire and moths.So, probably summer is implied here.

Ray Rasmussen

And here's a senryu by the same poet:

mail delivery—
today, the sound of the dog
not barking

Note the sharp observation here. The dog is not barking in the everyday delivery of mail.

Ok,here's a bad haiku, bad because it is maudlin and uses personification--a real no-no in genuine haiku or senryu because the idea is to state the elements simply and clearly without adjectives or adverbs:

Bright dawn banishes
the countless twinkling stars
kisses the shy moon

Well,this is the barest of an introduction to the simple yet complexelements of haiku and senryu.

Sources:

http://www.graceguts.com (Haiku teacher and poet, Michael Dylan Welch's great site)

http://www.hsa-haiku.org/ (American society)

http://www.thehaikufoundation.org/ (much doings in the haiku world)

 

4/17/15

For only three lines, so many rules!  Usually I do not take poetry rules very strictly.  And still do not!  But if nothing else you take away fromthis blog, challenge every adjective, adverb and general words, such as eternal or beauty or grandeur, etc.



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Date: 4/16/2015 2:08:00 PM
Thanks for sharing this info.I did years of writing bad haiku till I goy it right by mentors like Michael Dylan Welch,Deborah Guzzi,and was helped by Ruben Oh and discussed it even with kash.Thanks for this interesting blog..Its always good to know more-Charma.
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Thomas Martin
Date: 4/16/2015 3:48:00 PM
Thanks so much for your comments, Charmaine! Will read your work soon.
Date: 4/15/2015 12:53:00 AM
Oh, and hope to catch some of YOUR haiku on Soup!
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Date: 4/15/2015 12:43:00 AM
I really like the haiku about the soundless dog! The first one too about the moth! Just beautiful!
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Mark Ackerson
Date: 4/19/2015 9:44:00 PM
Andrea, the soundless dog is beautiful haiku; it's the word, "soundless" that pulls one to meditation.
Date: 4/14/2015 8:36:00 PM
Hi Thomas, Michael has been a mentor of a few of us here on soup and many, many MANY times I have sent & posted his haiku checklist. It never hurts to go at it again - there are very few poems labeled haiku on this site which are haiku.
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Mark Ackerson
Date: 4/19/2015 9:40:00 PM
I have to agree with you there, Debbie!
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Thomas Martin
Date: 4/14/2015 8:47:00 PM
Thank you, Thank you, Debbie! Appreciate yor comments. BTW, Deleted the earlier blog and posted it because was not familiar with Soup Blogs.

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