Zephyr

Zephyr Stirs warm fall air Some leaves spiral downward Some cling tenaciously to tree Until

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Frank Polgar

Date: 11/3/2012 3:44:00 PM

I also like the mystery at the end of the poem. I feel like I'm being led into winter. Very nice cinquain Sara.

Robert Pettit

Date: 11/2/2012 10:48:00 PM

There were not very many autumn leaves clinging to the trees after Sandy's strong winds blew through my area a few days ago. This is a nice example of a cinquain poem.

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/26/2012 1:06:00 AM

the very last resistence, awesome poem....

Ilene Bauer

Date: 10/25/2012 7:52:00 AM

nice one! i love the last word - it adds some mystery.

Russell Sivey

Date: 10/25/2012 7:29:00 AM

This is quite the awesome write my friend! I really enjoyed reading this fabulous and intensely tremendous poem this morning! I do have one small adjustment you might want to make to your poem...the fourth line is supposed to be 8 syllables instead of the 6 like you have now! Just a minor thing, I'm sure you can fix that easily! Anyway, this piece is really delightful Sara as it is, I enjoyed it immensely! Great Work!!