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Your pain my loss within your flight
Contained and lost within your night
I need you then I need you now
I bleed for you with broken vow
Undone and torn you fought the fight

Held close your lies with all my might
Felt most alone with cries of fright
Now on my knees I pray and bow
Your pain my loss

Above the clouds I lost my sight
With love aloud I crossed hands tight
No more conviction I’ll allow
Torn with affliction, don’t know how
My soul craves yours with deep contrite
Your pain my loss


*Internal Rhyme used*


Date Written: July 11, 2016

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 9/27/2016 2:49:00 PM
Congratulations Laura: I like the repeating refrain. The internal rhyme sustains the pain. Cheers, SuZ
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Date: 9/24/2016 9:48:00 PM
Laura, Congratulations on your well-deserved win. :):):) Stop by my latest blog "Last Laugh." if you'd like. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 9/25/2016 9:55:00 AM
thank you very much for my placement lovely Linda :)-luloo
Date: 7/20/2016 1:01:00 AM
This is beautiful, Laura:) I too chose to use internal rhyme in mine, though I never saw your example till today:)
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Date: 7/11/2016 11:58:00 AM
This is excellent. Beautiful write. It's a fun form, too. So many possibilities with the first four syllables. You picked some great ones
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Date: 7/11/2016 4:35:00 PM
thank you Phillip :)-luloo