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Your Fly Is Down

I know I know You didn't mean to let me in And you Could have crushed me like a bug Instead you caught me Softly Saved me Trapped me Ogled me through the glass A while Then sent me on my way I'm free But a little crushed just the same. Date: 11,20,2017 Contest: Make me actually LOL Sponsor: Nina Parmenter

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Date: 11/20/2019 8:29:00 AM
I'm crushed and blushing reading these amazing words Maureen. Thank you.
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Jeff Connelly
Date: 11/20/2019 11:39:00 AM
Por favor. Please do blow yourself up; meaning like a blowfish not TNT haha Maureen.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/20/2019 8:54:00 AM
...this is one of my personal best in my over inflated opinion.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/20/2019 8:47:00 AM
The wild fling ;), thank You!
Date: 12/16/2017 10:46:00 AM
Thank you for the not so quiet, rather loud, uncontrollable laughter you gave me. LOVE IT !
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 12/16/2017 12:46:00 PM
Ha! Awesome :) thank you lovely! xomo
Date: 12/8/2017 3:46:00 AM
what an intriguing little write this is Maureen.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 12/8/2017 7:47:00 AM
Thank you John :)
Date: 12/7/2017 4:16:00 AM
I read it twice once for each meaning and who knows maybe a third is in order, very cool poem.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 12/7/2017 8:03:00 AM
Thank you Jerry :)
Date: 12/2/2017 5:17:00 PM
Much enjoyed this one Maureen. Always want mine to turn out like this but my cliches always take over, ha :)
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 12/2/2017 11:11:00 PM
Giggles. I personally love using preloaded words :)
Date: 12/1/2017 2:28:00 PM
I can not believe you wrote a poem like this one. I giggled all the way through this poem. have a nice day my friend.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 12/1/2017 10:30:00 PM
Flies buzzing around the gutter ;) a lovely day to you Darlene!
Date: 11/27/2017 3:17:00 PM
Title sure got me dear Mo!!! LOL Loved it even though you tricketh me!!! Lovesies, Jacko xxx
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/27/2017 7:20:00 PM
Lol! Smooches dear Jackson!
Date: 11/25/2017 11:13:00 PM
Aww Maureen, I am enthralled with your inspired and ingenious write. Absolutely brilliant and beautifully written from your title to your moving and tender last two lines. Your creative mind is amazing my talented friend. I love it!
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/26/2017 7:29:00 AM
Susan :) you are always so wonderfully supportive, you warm me again and again; thank you dear poetess, your words mean so much to me. I appreciate your appreciation :) much love your way! xomo & have a wondrful day!
Date: 11/25/2017 8:57:00 AM
Good one, Maureen. Love how you titled your poem: sticking your tongue out... made him look! You got the last laugh.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/25/2017 9:23:00 AM
Giggles! Thank you Line :) xomo!
Date: 11/25/2017 7:34:00 AM
Maureen, your ambiguity is delish!
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/25/2017 8:32:00 AM
Cheers! Thank you so much Craig :) xomo!
Date: 11/23/2017 6:17:00 PM
This poem speaks on two levels. Ain't that cool?
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/23/2017 7:31:00 PM
Cheers! :)
Date: 11/22/2017 1:16:00 PM
Maureen, what a fun write and oh that darn fly, well done !
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/22/2017 6:27:00 PM
Thank you :) xomo!
Date: 11/22/2017 10:21:00 AM
I came back to read again and it is plain as nose on my face. A talking fly,...... oh my......don't know what was going on in my head yesterday. It is a really good poem sis.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/22/2017 10:29:00 AM
Aha! Such is the confused state post such seduction!
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/22/2017 10:27:00 AM
Lol! No you were probably right yesterday ;)
Date: 11/22/2017 9:19:00 AM
Moving piece
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/22/2017 9:47:00 AM
:) thank you!!
Date: 11/21/2017 9:50:00 PM
This is a deep poem Maureen, i relate to the women who've suckered me into their web. loved this one.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/22/2017 7:45:00 AM
You read me well! Thank you Lewis :) xomo!
Date: 11/21/2017 1:48:00 PM
I like this I'm feeling it in my thoughts. very thought provoking.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/22/2017 7:43:00 AM
Thank you Ron :) xomo!
Date: 11/21/2017 12:03:00 PM
Title grabbed me my friend and this very creative jewel further awed me. Excellent poetry and a fav....
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/21/2017 1:09:00 PM
You warm my heart dear poet, thank you dearly my friend. xomo :)
Date: 11/20/2017 11:23:00 PM
oh so cute, how you lured me with that title and it was an actual FLY. Awesome!
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/21/2017 6:49:00 AM
Tee hee ;) not necessarily... <3
Date: 11/20/2017 9:35:00 PM
Hey! This was not what I expected and after I started reading it was again not what I expected!!??!! So I read it again! I've always said I wouldn't hurt a fly but now I have to admit I wasn't really thinking about psychologically!! Love it! Going right in my FAV drawer!!.........Pat
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/21/2017 6:53:00 AM
A little catch an release, no harm no foul... till someone loses a heart! Thank you Pat! xomo
Date: 11/20/2017 12:40:00 PM
Oh my; my mind is on overload you have penned me into a conundrum. Do I chose the forth right or go with my grotty imagination. Oh heck both are funny as hell.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/20/2017 3:40:00 PM
Giggles! Thank you sweet sister of the pen xomo!
Date: 11/20/2017 11:11:00 AM
At least you got a chance to fly away ...who knows how you would have ended up if you had stayed... Lovely day to you
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/20/2017 11:41:00 AM
Exactly! Lol :) ...and you!
Date: 11/20/2017 10:05:00 AM
This is great Mo...I like the multiple meanings
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/20/2017 10:46:00 AM
Thank you so much Tim :) xomo!
Date: 11/20/2017 9:33:00 AM
Instinctively, I reached for my zipper pull! Pavlov would be proud. Ya got me! I've said it before — I love how your mind meanders! Oh, and, GOTD! ~ j
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/20/2017 9:49:00 AM
Lol! Salivation is nigh! Delighted to spread giggles :) Thanks dear! xomo
Date: 11/20/2017 9:20:00 AM
This is one beaut of a personification poem, Maureen. It elicited a wide range of emotions from me ... laughter, somber introspection, and wonderment at your pen creativity. You are one blessed poetess. Sunshine bright poetry that buzzes thru the mind. Love and smiles always, sis.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/20/2017 9:46:00 AM
Thank you for your sunshine bright words of encouragement my friend. Much love! xomo
Date: 11/20/2017 7:14:00 AM
I see the scene--well written for impact!
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/20/2017 7:58:00 AM
Thank you Vijay :) xomo!
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