Your Christmas Fir

Your Christmas fir was small and new,
When planted in the ground for you;
Once potbound, then its roots were free.
You stroked its branches, cuddled me:
I thought it felt like déjà vu.

I watched it as it slowly grew,
Though evergreen, its air was blue,
Not happy as it used to be,
Your Christmas fir.

Your love was dying, yes, I knew,
But what was I supposed to do?
Each time we fought, so sad to see,
All seemed reflected in the tree;
It turned to brown when we were through,
Your Christmas fir.

*The fir I'd planted started off well, but soon looked sorry for itself, and died after the relationship ended
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Kendrick Avatar
January 5, 2012 at 4:37 PM
Congrats on your winning work..Sara
Arno Avatar
January 5, 2012 at 4:30 PM
Congratulations on your beautiful write Best regards, Jon
Brown Avatar
January 5, 2012 at 6:13 AM
Congratulations on your win in ~Cyndi's~ "Gifts Given--Received" contest Jack. Love, Carol
Quigley Avatar
January 4, 2012 at 10:44 PM
What an interesting write Jack. Thoroughly enjoyed. Congrats
Poet Avatar
January 4, 2012 at 6:45 PM
An excellent write Jack.Congrats on your win.
The Rogue Rhymer Avatar
January 3, 2012 at 11:16 PM
Jack-While quite deep and sad...This is such a fantastic write. Flows beautifully! A big congrats.!
Song Avatar
December 20, 2011 at 5:49 PM
A tree mirroring a life is powerful stuff, Jack...loved the double meanings laced through out. Must fav this one for it"s excellence. Love, Gwendolen
Dietrich Avatar
December 14, 2011 at 6:00 PM
That is neat'o how you related your relationship with the growth of the tree.You found an awesome form for expressing your ideas!!
Sivey Avatar
December 14, 2011 at 4:55 PM
What a Fantastic write here Jack! You have combined with terrific wit the relationship of someone and one love with the tree! Done exquisitely! Love it! Awesome Work!!
Kendrick Avatar
December 14, 2011 at 2:31 PM
Sorry for the double loss in your life..Those things stay with us even though we have moved on..Enjoyed reading your work..If for the contest, reads like a winner to me..Thanks for stopping by, reading, and commenting on my work..Sara
Merryman Avatar
December 14, 2011 at 1:05 PM
Such a sad story, but a lovely poem, Jack. Best wishes in the contest. Kim
Devonshire Avatar
December 14, 2011 at 10:29 AM
This is truly a beautiful and touching rondeau, Jack. I like the way the life of the tree represented the life of your relationship. Best wishes in the rondeau contest with this moving poem, my friend. Love and blessings, Carolyn
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
December 14, 2011 at 10:25 AM
Oh thats sad. x
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