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A threadbare sigh relentlessly lisps while he begs with twilight for inner calm; Dear life...he is just a young man, wobbly feet wanting to run away from unknown ground which reeks of territorial conquest, of violence inhumane as rat- tat- tat of bullets explodes: Just like one nameless label of life's bloody route , he turns into a fetal shape on the road leading to nowhere; not even hell-- till grunts of combat lamentations echo upon the breeze; crushed grains hurling a lone figure half alive, half lifeless with rosary beads on his neck... amidst coal of eve.

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Date: 5/1/2025 5:52:00 PM
Very beautiful, deep, deep thoughts...the end was powerful
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Date: 5/1/2025 3:40:00 AM
this is so sad, your poem has such delicacy and empathy, enjoyed reading
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Date: 4/29/2025 11:00:00 AM
Nette, it is hard to comprehend how and why we send people off to experience this sadness. You paint a very frightening and grim picture, and I hope it helps people realize that peace is a good alternative. Smiles.
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Date: 4/28/2025 9:04:00 PM
The young soldiers listening to the explosion of the gun and the shower of bullets must be longing to run away from scenes of war. But their sense of duty make them stay and incidentally fall down wounded, half dead and half alive. Powerful poem, dear Nette.
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