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I came to your door last night but you weren’t home bursting with anticipation dreams, memories to share bouquet of wildflowers plucked from that path near the meadow but you weren’t home wanted to confess my ardor peruse photos of exotic locations kindle connection embrace you with arms and words admit how long this attraction has nurtured but you weren’t home should I return tonight when full moon ignites passions lovers worldwide snuggle, dance, bond beneath a Milky Way of sequin stars will your lips grant entry or would I turn away once more because you weren’t home *20 lines

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Christopher Flaherty

Date: 4/3/2019 5:02:00 PM

Were they not at home Or did your fear of Love and hurt tell you so. Knock , Knock Whose there Open the Door And See

Christopher Flaherty
Date: 4/3/2019 6:57:00 PM

Also my sincere apologies if I have called you Caroline sorry . Spell Check is supposed to Correct I really should pay more attention sorry

Christopher Flaherty
Date: 4/3/2019 6:53:00 PM

Cheers Carolyn I actually got or took hope from this . This spoke to me of sweet sentiment. Innocence

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 4/3/2019 5:17:00 PM

My intent was that the person had mentally checked out. Thanks for reading, Christopher.

Line Gauthier

Date: 2/27/2019 10:05:00 PM

Back with most deserving congrats on your win, Carolyn. Love your poem.

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 2/25/2019 11:28:00 PM

This is so full of ardour, hope, and trepidation - pulls you in like a stolen kiss-

Vladislav Raven

Date: 2/18/2019 7:48:00 AM

Hi Carolyn, a most beautiful piece touched with such gentle emotion, painting such real visions upon the canvas of my mind. This is such a wonderful write. Keep following the heart Carolyn, for one day he will be home. Such wonderful lines. All the best in the contest. A fave. Have a wonderful Monday. Hugs....Mike. XXX

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 2/14/2019 5:17:00 AM

Beautifully captured Carolyn. Happy Valentine's Day my friend. xxoo

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/13/2019 7:39:00 PM

sure hope you get a win with this, Carolyn. How are you doing? My email is pretty quiet these days.

M. L. Kiser

Date: 2/13/2019 4:37:00 PM

The power of being let down; so sad and empty. Good luck in the contest; well done.

Jack Horne

Date: 2/13/2019 1:56:00 PM

love this heartfelt write, hon - glad you got a chuckle from my entry in your contest : )

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 2/13/2019 10:43:00 AM

Hi Carolyn, This man does not sound worthy of your love although the poem is excellent - if he's not home, his bad luck! So well penned. Poetry hugs, Jennifer.

Constance La France

Date: 2/13/2019 9:30:00 AM

Carolyn, there is nothing more heart shattering than have a love that is not returned, your poem is beautifully penned ~

Arturo Michael

Date: 2/13/2019 7:09:00 AM

Maybe he moved...Lovely concept and write...unfortunately...Many are not home yet...Happy Valentine my friend...

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 2/13/2019 2:14:00 AM

Anticipation's betrayal is something that the heart is difficult to accept! You have captured this truth in these masterfully crafted verses so vividly that no-one remain unmoved! Excellent dear Carolyn!

Paul Callus

Date: 2/12/2019 8:46:00 AM

Knocking at somebody's heart and getting no answer is so very sad, Carolyn. You have inserted so much emotion in these lines; I love what you have done here, and I am sure even the sponsor will! Hugs // paul

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 2/12/2019 8:49:00 AM

Thank you for reading and for getting the gist of what I was trying to convey, Paul!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/12/2019 3:55:00 AM

- ... maybe he was home ... behind the curtains ... follow your heart, my friend - A lovely poem :) - Best wishes in the contest, Carolyn :) - hugs // Anne-Lise:)

Rico Leffanta

Date: 2/11/2019 6:39:00 PM

With iPhone in hand, too many people are not at home when they are at home …… Good luck in the contest! Aloha! Rico

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 2/11/2019 9:59:00 PM

Or they've mentally checked out...

Line Gauthier

Date: 2/11/2019 4:24:00 PM

Lovely, Carolyn. Very touching.

Harry Horsman

Date: 2/11/2019 4:18:00 PM

Amazing poetry Carolyn, he is the loser, not the poet.

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 2/11/2019 4:29:00 PM

It's not being "home" in the metaphorical sense, Harry, and not based on recent personal experience.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 2/11/2019 3:44:00 PM

Your poem flows so naturally, Carolyn..a story one can easily relate to..perfectly executed, as always.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/11/2019 2:53:00 PM

Is this for the repeating lines contest,Carolyn? If so, what a great job!!! I really like this. I love when key lines are repeated in poetry, which is why I love so much kyrielle, quatern, etc.

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 2/11/2019 4:31:00 PM

I prefer the Villanelle to the others you mentioned as it seems one can do more with it. I do have poems that repeat a single line, but don't like whole "refrains" that repeat unless it's a song. Thanks for reading, Andrea

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/11/2019 2:53:00 PM

How has the week started out for you?

Tom Cunningham

Date: 2/11/2019 2:40:00 PM

Wasn't sure what that contest was about, but you've made it clear in your write Carolyn. Good luck. Tom.