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You

Weren't

Home

I came to your door last night
but you weren’t home
bursting with anticipation
dreams, memories to share
bouquet of wildflowers
plucked from that path near the meadow
but you weren’t home

wanted to confess my ardor
peruse photos of exotic locations
kindle connection
embrace you with arms and words
admit how long this attraction has nurtured
but you weren’t home

should I return tonight
when full moon ignites passions
lovers worldwide snuggle, dance, 
bond beneath a Milky Way of sequin stars
will your lips grant entry
or would I turn away once more 
because you weren’t home




February 11, 2019
For Cecelia Hopkins-Drewer’s “Repetition” Contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




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Date: 2/14/2019 5:17:00 AM
Beautifully captured Carolyn. Happy Valentine's Day my friend. xxoo
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Date: 2/13/2019 7:39:00 PM
sure hope you get a win with this, Carolyn. How are you doing? My email is pretty quiet these days.
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Date: 2/13/2019 4:37:00 PM
The power of being let down; so sad and empty. Good luck in the contest; well done.
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Date: 2/13/2019 1:56:00 PM
love this heartfelt write, hon - glad you got a chuckle from my entry in your contest : )
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Date: 2/13/2019 10:43:00 AM
Hi Carolyn, This man does not sound worthy of your love although the poem is excellent - if he's not home, his bad luck! So well penned. Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 2/13/2019 9:30:00 AM
Carolyn, there is nothing more heart shattering than have a love that is not returned, your poem is beautifully penned ~
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Date: 2/13/2019 7:09:00 AM
Maybe he moved...Lovely concept and write...unfortunately...Many are not home yet...Happy Valentine my friend...
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Date: 2/13/2019 2:14:00 AM
Anticipation's betrayal is something that the heart is difficult to accept! You have captured this truth in these masterfully crafted verses so vividly that no-one remain unmoved! Excellent dear Carolyn!
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Date: 2/12/2019 8:46:00 AM
Knocking at somebody's heart and getting no answer is so very sad, Carolyn. You have inserted so much emotion in these lines; I love what you have done here, and I am sure even the sponsor will! Hugs // paul
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 2/12/2019 8:49:00 AM
Thank you for reading and for getting the gist of what I was trying to convey, Paul!
Date: 2/12/2019 3:55:00 AM
- ... maybe he was home ... behind the curtains ... follow your heart, my friend - A lovely poem :) - Best wishes in the contest, Carolyn :) - hugs // Anne-Lise:)
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Date: 2/11/2019 6:39:00 PM
With iPhone in hand, too many people are not at home when they are at home …… Good luck in the contest! Aloha! Rico
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 2/11/2019 9:59:00 PM
Or they've mentally checked out...
Date: 2/11/2019 4:24:00 PM
Lovely, Carolyn. Very touching.
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Date: 2/11/2019 4:18:00 PM
Amazing poetry Carolyn, he is the loser, not the poet.
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 2/11/2019 4:29:00 PM
It's not being "home" in the metaphorical sense, Harry, and not based on recent personal experience.
Date: 2/11/2019 3:44:00 PM
Your poem flows so naturally, Carolyn..a story one can easily relate to..perfectly executed, as always.
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Date: 2/11/2019 2:53:00 PM
Is this for the repeating lines contest,Carolyn? If so, what a great job!!! I really like this. I love when key lines are repeated in poetry, which is why I love so much kyrielle, quatern, etc.
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 2/11/2019 4:31:00 PM
I prefer the Villanelle to the others you mentioned as it seems one can do more with it. I do have poems that repeat a single line, but don't like whole "refrains" that repeat unless it's a song. Thanks for reading, Andrea
Date: 2/11/2019 2:53:00 PM
How has the week started out for you?
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Date: 2/11/2019 2:44:00 PM
Unique write, Carolyn. Loved the theme. Kept us in suspense since we do not know if he's playing truant. Hugs.
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Date: 2/11/2019 2:44:00 PM
Turn away.Turn away now before you regret it.He's a loser like all men.Nice sadly it is unresolved
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Date: 2/11/2019 2:40:00 PM
Wasn't sure what that contest was about, but you've made it clear in your write Carolyn. Good luck. Tom.
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