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FICTIONAL POEM FOR CONTEST Ever since the day that you passed away I’ve struggled with life, it’s been so hard I crouch by your tiny grave at the churchyard shedding bitter tears, which are here to stay I endured rounds of IVF so I could conceive and I’m finding it extremely difficult to cope I shut myself in the nursery and silently mope Your tragic death I find so hard to believe Nobody can tell me what went so wrong on the stormy night when you were born My beloved child, your loss I now mourn Safe my arms is where you really belong Contest Enclosed Rhyme September 2018 Sponsor Dear Heart 9/2/18

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Curtis Moorman

Date: 10/5/2018 12:03:00 AM

Jan, have you ever wondered why you rate so high on Soup. Well, the fact is, you are so good as a poet that you deserve it. And, it is recognized by all who read your wonderful poems. Congratulations on your win!

Constance La France

Date: 10/2/2018 3:02:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this emotional and well done write ~

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/1/2018 6:20:00 PM

Yes, Jan...I too am relieved that this is fiction because your words were so convincingly expressed in this very emotive poem. Congratulations on your 1st place win! Hugs, Sandra

John Gondolf

Date: 9/30/2018 1:45:00 PM

I can feel a deep sadness, Jan, I'm glad this is just fiction. Congrats on your win. John

Mike Gentile

Date: 9/30/2018 6:48:00 AM

Congratulations Jan on your top win!’nn

Paul Callus

Date: 9/30/2018 4:53:00 AM

This is beautiful and heart-wrenching, Jan. Congratulations on placing first! Hugs // paul

Tom Cunningham

Date: 9/29/2018 10:19:00 PM

Back with congratulations Jan. Tom

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/29/2018 8:27:00 PM

Yay! I am so happy to see this lovely poem take top honors Jan. Very deserving! Congratulations my friend! : )

Eve Roper

Date: 9/29/2018 7:53:00 PM

so well done and the topic is wonderfully said :) congratulations on your win...

Joseph May

Date: 9/29/2018 7:36:00 PM

Congrats on your top win Jan

Line Gauthier

Date: 9/29/2018 6:49:00 PM

Congrats on sharing your gold medal win, Jan.

Tania Kitchin

Date: 9/29/2018 5:56:00 PM

Beautiful poem, congratulations on your first place win!

Susan Ashley

Date: 9/29/2018 5:55:00 PM

Returning with congratulations, Jan, for your excellent win with your sadly beautiful and exquisitely expressed poem. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/3/2018 5:48:00 PM

Jan, you are a master at these. I always feel that I'm reading a true story, even when you've announced beforehand that it's not. Bravo! ~ Gershon

Jan Allison
Date: 9/3/2018 7:05:00 PM

Thanks GW I manage to write sad for Constance's contests:-) hugs Jan xx

Winged Warrior

Date: 9/3/2018 10:27:00 AM

Very sad but true, Jan...best of luck...love & light...^WW^

Jan Allison
Date: 9/3/2018 12:50:00 PM

thanks ^WW^:-) hugs Jan xx

Aurore Severo

Date: 9/3/2018 1:44:00 AM

This is very sad, only glad is fiction, peace and love xoxoxoxo

Jan Allison
Date: 9/3/2018 12:50:00 PM

Thanks so much Aurore:-) hugs Janxx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/2/2018 8:14:00 PM

This fictional poem touched on the memory of my infant sister's death that tormented my mother the rest of her life. Marlena only lived twenty five minutes before she departed leaving heartbreak in her wake. I'm sure your lovely poem will do well as Constance will relate to it. : )

Jan Allison
Date: 9/3/2018 12:49:00 PM

Thanks Connie I do tend to write sad for Constance b ut I much prefer humour:-) hugs jan xx

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 9/2/2018 5:22:00 PM

Fine pieceJan, so sad a piece but spoken with such honesty. Blessings,Gordon

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2018 5:23:00 PM

Thanks Gordon:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 9/2/2018 5:00:00 PM

If it is any consolation, what could be better than knowing only love throughout one's life? Still, another winner for sure! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2018 5:05:00 PM

Thankfully its a fiction write for me, but sadly i know some can relate to the death of a child at birth:-( hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/2/2018 3:39:00 PM

A sad one.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2018 4:07:00 PM

it is indeed Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith

Date: 9/2/2018 2:18:00 PM

So sad Jan, such a departure for you, best wishes...

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2018 2:39:00 PM

I do surprise people with the odd serious poem and Constance's contests seem to inspire me to write sad:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Ashley

Date: 9/2/2018 11:43:00 AM

Oh, there is such soulful beauty in your tragic poem, Jan. Tender expression and exquisite imagery of a mother with a broken heart morning her loss.. Best wishes for a win.. ~Susan

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2018 2:38:00 PM

Thanks Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 9/2/2018 11:13:00 AM

Lovely poetry expressing in depth sadness .....thank you

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2018 2:35:00 PM

Cheers Judy:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 9/2/2018 9:24:00 AM

A well written verse that tugs at the heartstrings Jan. It's so tragic when that happens to parents. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2018 2:34:00 PM

Thanks Tom:-) hugs Jan xx