Richard Lamoureux Poet Free verse

You Gave Me Wings

With your cruelty
You turned my heart to stone
Then with skillful hands
You crafted it with your chisel 
Chipping away small pieces 
Sculpting life like wings
Providing the illusion of magnificence
How the world marveled at your masterpiece
Envied my perceived trancendence
Yet sadly my heart would never be able to fly!

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Isa Mahrie April 26, 2015 at 3:01 PM Hi Richard, skilfully crafted and how you close it the last line a complexion in this poem of love and sadness and close it perfectly in the last line ... Many Thanks having my "Velvet" poem Win in your " Tell Me" Contest

Scott Thirtyseven April 25, 2015 at 12:29 AM Your imagery is majestic. Your words elegant. Marvellous. Richard Lamoureux April 25, 2015 at 7:22 AM Thankyou Mon Ami.

Anne-Lise Andresen April 24, 2015 at 9:13 AM - Richard, a touching write! - I wish you a wonderful weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Richard Lamoureux April 24, 2015 at 9:14 AM Thanks Anne Lise.

Maurice Yvonne April 23, 2015 at 12:40 PM Irony written perfectly veiled and in the end it is the poet that uses a rubber chisel to effect reaction, thought and revaluation. Well done Richard! Richard Lamoureux April 24, 2015 at 9:16 AM Oops my thanks jumped up to Mary Jo.

Constance La France April 23, 2015 at 10:00 AM Richard, you have created a poem beautifully sad, that last line is piercing, well done 7, and I want to thank you so much for my placement in your Tell Me contest with my poem Why God Richard Lamoureux April 24, 2015 at 9:13 AM My pleasure Constance! I appreciate you entering my contest"

Kp Nunez April 23, 2015 at 9:31 AM The speaker seems to come from a state of such pain from loosing his sense of self and finally, transformed by the trappings, the symbolic wings were the very things that imprisoned him. A marvel of a read. A 7. This is really good, Richard. Forces one to look into the darker, and then see the more important aspects of life. Kim :) Richard Lamoureux April 23, 2015 at 9:45 AM I like how you interpreted my words.

Mama Bear April 22, 2015 at 5:01 PM Been there, done that, don't want to do it again. Thanks for the reminder. Love Mom Richard Lamoureux April 23, 2015 at 8:29 AM Have a good trip mom, love ya.

Charmaine Chircop April 22, 2015 at 4:47 PM To be given wings like a bird, yet live in a cage and unable to use them is worse than being born without wings in the first place. Profound indeed, Richard. Richard Lamoureux April 23, 2015 at 8:30 AM Thanks for thoughtfully considering my words.

Debbie Duncan April 22, 2015 at 4:08 PM Nicely done Richard. On my poem Accidental Sea. I prefer# 2 as well. My 27 yr old daughter changed words in 1 & said hers was better. I said we will see. Thanks for reading it. Have a great day ;) Richard Lamoureux April 23, 2015 at 8:31 AM Ha ha, the arrogance of youth. Thanks for dropping by.

Tim Smith April 22, 2015 at 2:01 PM Excellent Richard...even if we are crafted to what is perceived to be perfection we are often broken inside Richard Lamoureux April 23, 2015 at 8:35 AM You are kind Tim.

Eileen Manassian April 22, 2015 at 10:52 AM This is lovely, Richard. Beautiful in every way Richard Lamoureux April 23, 2015 at 8:37 AM Awww you are sweet! Hugs!

Jaycee Cervenka April 22, 2015 at 10:03 AM This is not the pretty piece that the title would imply. When I first started reading I thought that of he's going to fly away from the situation, but at last, it is still stone which is not buoyant. Really like this one, Richard. ~Jan Richard Lamoureux April 22, 2015 at 10:09 AM Thanks Jan, I'm pleased you like my piece Jan.

Anna Hopper April 22, 2015 at 8:47 AM Excellent write! I tend to have a hard time following poetry that doesn't rhyme consistently. This poem, however, flows of the tongue. It was an intellectual piece that a newbie could appreciate! Thanks for sharing. A 7 from me! Richard Lamoureux April 22, 2015 at 9:12 AM You are kind Anna.