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You Gave Me Wings

With your cruelty
You turned my heart to stone
Then with skillful hands
You crafted it with your chisel 
Chipping away small pieces 
Sculpting life like wings
Providing the illusion of magnificence
How the world marveled at your masterpiece
Envied my perceived trancendence
Yet sadly my heart would never be able to fly!

Copyright © Richard Lamoureux | Year Posted 2015

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Isa Mahrie Date: 4/26/2015 3:01:00 PM Hi Richard, skilfully crafted and how you close it the last line a complexion in this poem of love and sadness and close it perfectly in the last line ... Many Thanks having my "Velvet" poem Win in your " Tell Me" Contest Login to Reply

Scott Thirtyseven Date: 4/25/2015 12:29:00 AM Your imagery is majestic. Your words elegant. Marvellous. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/25/2015 7:22:00 AM Thankyou Mon Ami.

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 4/24/2015 9:13:00 AM - Richard, a touching write! - I wish you a wonderful weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/24/2015 9:14:00 AM Thanks Anne Lise.

Maurice Yvonne Date: 4/23/2015 12:40:00 PM Irony written perfectly veiled and in the end it is the poet that uses a rubber chisel to effect reaction, thought and revaluation. Well done Richard! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/24/2015 9:16:00 AM Oops my thanks jumped up to Mary Jo.

Constance La France Date: 4/23/2015 10:00:00 AM Richard, you have created a poem beautifully sad, that last line is piercing, well done 7, and I want to thank you so much for my placement in your Tell Me contest with my poem Why God Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/24/2015 9:13:00 AM My pleasure Constance! I appreciate you entering my contest"

Kp Nunez Date: 4/23/2015 9:31:00 AM The speaker seems to come from a state of such pain from loosing his sense of self and finally, transformed by the trappings, the symbolic wings were the very things that imprisoned him. A marvel of a read. A 7. This is really good, Richard. Forces one to look into the darker, and then see the more important aspects of life. Kim :) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/23/2015 9:45:00 AM I like how you interpreted my words.

Mama Bear Date: 4/22/2015 5:01:00 PM Been there, done that, don't want to do it again. Thanks for the reminder. Love Mom Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/23/2015 8:29:00 AM Have a good trip mom, love ya.

Charmaine Chircop Date: 4/22/2015 4:47:00 PM To be given wings like a bird, yet live in a cage and unable to use them is worse than being born without wings in the first place. Profound indeed, Richard. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/23/2015 8:30:00 AM Thanks for thoughtfully considering my words.

Debbie Duncan Date: 4/22/2015 4:08:00 PM Nicely done Richard. On my poem Accidental Sea. I prefer# 2 as well. My 27 yr old daughter changed words in 1 & said hers was better. I said we will see. Thanks for reading it. Have a great day ;) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/23/2015 8:31:00 AM Ha ha, the arrogance of youth. Thanks for dropping by.

Tim Smith Date: 4/22/2015 2:01:00 PM Excellent Richard...even if we are crafted to what is perceived to be perfection we are often broken inside Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/23/2015 8:35:00 AM You are kind Tim.

Eileen Manassian Date: 4/22/2015 10:52:00 AM This is lovely, Richard. Beautiful in every way Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/23/2015 8:37:00 AM Awww you are sweet! Hugs!

Jaycee Cervenka Date: 4/22/2015 10:03:00 AM This is not the pretty piece that the title would imply. When I first started reading I thought that of he's going to fly away from the situation, but at last, it is still stone which is not buoyant. Really like this one, Richard. ~Jan Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/22/2015 10:09:00 AM Thanks Jan, I'm pleased you like my piece Jan.

Anna Hopper Date: 4/22/2015 8:47:00 AM Excellent write! I tend to have a hard time following poetry that doesn't rhyme consistently. This poem, however, flows of the tongue. It was an intellectual piece that a newbie could appreciate! Thanks for sharing. A 7 from me! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/22/2015 9:12:00 AM You are kind Anna.