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I need a separation, you can understand, it involves subjugation, you can understand. My boss at work chooses only female colleagues, some may be a temptation, you can understand. On break, his frequent jokes border on harassment, it is only flirtation, you can understand. Often I see him out in public with his wife in pleasant conversation you can understand. But when he’s at work, he’s much too touchy-feely; it’s not imagination, you can understand. Quitting my job, I'm moving on to better things; though he’s the aggravation, you can understand. Relief is coming to my senses, I proclaim my own emancipation, you can understand. a fictional ghazal, written February 5, 2017 for Broken Wings' contest on "G" forms

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Date: 2/12/2017 11:18:00 AM
Like it. Perhaps all exit interviews with human resources should be in poetic form. Congratulations! :-)
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Date: 2/11/2017 7:42:00 PM
Reason congratulations on your win in my contest with this wonderful write ~
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Date: 2/11/2017 3:56:00 AM
I was so surprised a ghazal form even existed in English (I am used to the form in Arabic), and I am pleased to see your interpretation. It's great, powerful, congratulations :)
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Reason A. Poteet
Date: 2/11/2017 12:44:00 PM
How does the English form compare to the Arabic? It has always fascinated me, the repeat and the rhyme before. I have done only 3 or 4; but have been pleased with the results for the most part. Thanks for your comment. It encourages me to write another.
Date: 2/10/2017 8:40:00 PM
You completed it like a smoothly flowing gazelle. Jim Horn
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Reason A. Poteet
Date: 2/10/2017 9:34:00 PM
Thank you, Jim. Am getting attached to the form; it is built for emphasis and the middle rhyming word is most unique. Appreciate the comment.
Date: 2/8/2017 8:17:00 AM
Congrats, Reason! Great content!
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Reason A. Poteet
Date: 2/8/2017 8:38:00 PM
thank you, Kim. I'm smiling at the placement. Ghazals are a complex write; hard to achieve a flow.
Date: 2/7/2017 8:55:00 AM
Glad it's fiction, Reason:) well written:)
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Date: 2/8/2017 8:40:00 PM
Thank you, Jo. Appreciate the read and remark.
Date: 2/5/2017 10:11:00 PM
Very glad it's a fictional account and it's a great ghazal. Flows very well. It's a surprisingly difficult form to write in. It's difficult to maintain the reprise without saying the same thing over and over again but you did a super job
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Phillip Garcia
Date: 2/6/2017 7:31:00 AM
Not a cop out at all. It's a wise course of action
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Reason A. Poteet
Date: 2/6/2017 7:01:00 AM
Thank you Phillip. I appreciate the read and encouraging remarks. The theme is current and my solution is not a cop out; it's reality. You can't change people but you can get out of their reach.
Date: 2/5/2017 3:00:00 PM
Yes, I can understand! A great fictional piece that many women can relate to, Reason. This is the second wonderful ghazal I've read from you. Both would be great entries! L&B, Rhonda
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Date: 2/5/2017 6:47:00 PM
thank you, Rhonda, I appreciate the supportive remarks. Wasn't sure about the placement of the rhyming words on The Train.

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