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Oh, to fly underwater - to ply the deepest oceans! To navigate sunbeams like temple pillars, And moonbeams as fingers of soft, blue magic! Squid lights dancing among their abyssal reach ... To break the wake with a fin at night, Making the phosphorescence trace easy curves ... Artful squiggles to hail the Milky Way above! To explore the colors and vibrancy of the reefs, Throbbing with life and vitality ... excitement and danger! Spinning and courting among the coral ... To have the entire world's waters as my playground - The keen bite of the cold, deep trench, Teeming with food and plankton, rife, Or the joyous warmth of the Caribbean and South Pacific! My fellow swimmers, of endless fascination ... The sonorous bellows of the whales trembling, The sweet songs of the dolphins, at play, The pulsing of the deep waters in storms, And the peaceful, unshaken silence of a lagoon ... To swim deep to the darkest, coldest depths, And return to breach the surface - air-borne and majestic! Oh, to be a manta ray! The gentle, giant birds of the water ... The master swimmers and fliers of the sea! Sleek, beautiful ... and lone. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Your Favorite Animal In The Wild" Poetry Contest, Line Gauthier, Sponsor.

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Date: 5/16/2018 6:00:00 AM
Huzzah! This poem just needed the right contest! Congratulations on your top place finish, mo hugs! <3
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/16/2018 9:26:00 PM
Ha - thank you, Mo - I guess you're right ... fate knew its destiny before I did! ;-) <3
Date: 5/14/2018 3:27:00 PM
Back again to marvel once more at the imagery, vitality, and pace of this remarkable write, richly deserving of the first-place trophy. Blessings, Gershon
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/16/2018 9:22:00 PM
You are too kind, my friend, but I so appreciate your wonderful comments - poems in themselves! :-)
Date: 5/14/2018 2:25:00 PM
Deserving of a 1st place, regards, Kevin
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/16/2018 9:21:00 PM
Many thanks, Kevin! :-)
Date: 5/14/2018 1:00:00 PM
Congratulations on your win! A poem so deserving of first place. Bravo, Greg, bravo!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/16/2018 9:20:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Edward - blessings! :-)
Date: 5/14/2018 11:26:00 AM
Fabulous, Gregory. So elegant. Beautiful. Cheerful. Congrats on your well deserved gold medal win.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/16/2018 9:20:00 PM
Many kind thanks, Line - I so appreciate that! :-) <3
Date: 5/14/2018 11:24:00 AM
Congratulations on your #1 win! Breathtaking and stunning imagery with words. You are an amazing writer.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/16/2018 9:19:00 PM
This is such a kind comment, Susan, and I know it's heartfelt ... blessings to you, Dear friend! :-) <3
Date: 5/9/2018 8:24:00 PM
Stunning write from all aspects and angles...I was so intrigued by the title on your list of poems---and sure wasn't expecting MANTA rays!! Hats off to your ingenuity again and again...So, Gregory R, you can call me Comrade Volkov now! Sweet musings to you, O Poet! ~ Comrade V.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/9/2018 8:29:00 PM
Comrade Volkov, ha - love it!! I guess I would be Comrade Karashnikov, bringing agony to readers everywhere, lol! Thanks for the kind words, Buddy - this one was disqualified because I didn't START it with the phrase "I wish I was a ...", (even though the directions did NOT stipulate that as a rule). It is what it is ... I know its worth, and that and the comments are what matters. Blessings! :-)
Date: 5/7/2018 10:31:00 AM
Well, it places for me! You write so wonderfully.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/7/2018 3:54:00 PM
Many kind thanks to you, SW - I so greatly appreciate that! :-) <3
Date: 5/7/2018 9:04:00 AM
Amazing animals...equally amazing write, I've never contemplated the manta ray, it is a stunning creature, thanks for letting the imagination soar, we get to enjoy your flight of fantasy!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/7/2018 3:54:00 PM
That's very kind of you, John, and I'm so pleased you liked my poem - and you know my weird imagination, lol! Blessings, Buddy! :-)
Date: 5/7/2018 5:18:00 AM
Another beautiful ink my dear friend, and I can't stop watching those rays getting air ;) xomo!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/7/2018 3:53:00 PM
That's so very sweet of you, Mo - thank you so much, Friend! :-) <3
Date: 5/7/2018 5:11:00 AM
"To navigate sunbeams like temple pillars"...beautiful write Greg
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/7/2018 3:52:00 PM
Thank you so much, Joseph - so appreciated! :-)
Date: 5/7/2018 1:02:00 AM
This is an excellent piece, beautiful use of vocabulary and imagery, Greg, and worthy as a standalone piece. I was maybe too harsh on the criteria for the contest or didn't put it across to well, otherwise it would have been near the surface like a breeching whale. Apologies for any confusion. Regards, Viv
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/7/2018 3:51:00 PM
Thank you for the comment ... I followed the directions.