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Yet

"I did not but see her passing by, and yet I will love her until I die." ~ Robert Menzies You don't know I am aware of the depth of your despair Or that I hear you crying when you think no one’s there The ailment within your heart is more than I can bare Yet, you have the innocence of a child I watch you disappear in shadows and I say a prayer Sad, am I when in your eyes there's a blank stare I would ask what makes you frown, but would you share Yet, not so long ago you smiled Silently, you tiptoe, timidly trying not to make a sound What do you write upon page after page, spiral bound? I marvel at your drawings, only those that I have found Yet, I wonder why you feel exiled What burden gives you cause to wear a dolorous face I would offer you my heart if your pain it could erase To brush away your sorrow, my hand would give chase Yet, the secret you hold is not reconciled I am helpless when clouds in blue above, you color gray Can I breach your wall of gloom and make it go away How do I paint a rainbow in your sky every single day Yet, no list of answers have I compiled It's an antidote, I seek to end the spillage of your tears What cure will abdicate from the throne, your deep fears Tell me, my love, why you've strayed from me for years yet, I know our love has not been defiled Do you feel locked within the vault of a sepulcher room Sweet bud, without reason to open your petals and bloom A gardenia in spring, scent lying trapped inside a womb Yet, would, if I could, join you in your world beguiled. May 6, 2023 Writing Challenge ~ 'Y' Words Sponsored by Constance La France
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Poet Avatar
May 11, 2023 at 1:21 PM
Your poetry "YET" is fantastic. From the first Verse to the last, I was engrossed. I am happy for you that you won, LIN.
Lane Avatar
May 11, 2023 at 4:14 PM
Lasaad, I am so pleased to read your kind comments. Thank you very much.
Fowler Avatar
May 11, 2023 at 1:18 PM
Congratulations on your win Lin! :)
Lane Avatar
May 11, 2023 at 4:12 PM
Thanks a lot, Linda.
Andresen Avatar
May 11, 2023 at 1:03 PM
- Congratulations on your win, Lin :) - hugs
Lane Avatar
May 11, 2023 at 4:12 PM
Thank you very much, Anne-Lise.
Goldsmith Avatar
May 11, 2023 at 8:27 AM
Congratulations on your win. A powerful write/picture. Love It. Have a great/blessed day writing away..................
Lane Avatar
May 11, 2023 at 11:05 AM
Thank you for the kindness of your remarks, Paula.
La France Avatar
May 11, 2023 at 6:50 AM
Lin, thank you so much for sharing your wonderful poem with us in my Writing Challenge congratulations and I love your quote !
Lane Avatar
May 11, 2023 at 7:09 AM
It’s always a pleasure to write for you, Constance. Thanks for the placement.
Allison Avatar
May 11, 2023 at 5:10 AM
Dropping back with many congrats on your win Lin:-) hugs Jan xx
Lane Avatar
May 11, 2023 at 5:22 AM
Thanks so much, Jan. Glad you're feeling better.
George Avatar
May 10, 2023 at 9:40 PM
Hi Lin, Congratulations on your well deserved first place win. I liked the poem even more reading it a second time.
Lane Avatar
May 11, 2023 at 4:26 AM
Hi Valsa. A second read is a poet’s reward. Thanks so much.
Y. Avatar
May 10, 2023 at 9:25 PM
Hi Lin, Im just coming back to say congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved. Have a great evening;-) Alexis
Lane Avatar
May 11, 2023 at 4:25 AM
Thank you for returning with your thoughts, Alexis.
Seeker Avatar
May 10, 2023 at 9:01 PM
Another level! Am marking this as a fav
Lane Avatar
May 10, 2023 at 9:10 PM
Thank you very much, Seeker. It was special to me the moment I read it in completion.
M  Avatar
May 8, 2023 at 10:46 PM
Oh my Lin your ability to paint a beautiful picture with words is utterly amazing…you have a true gift! Emotive, touching and a simply beautiful tale of love! Clever pants!!! Debx
Lane Avatar
May 9, 2023 at 4:46 AM
Hi Deb. You are definitely cheerleader material. Seriously, I thank you for the many compliments you offer my poem. Each one gratifying.
George Avatar
May 6, 2023 at 6:58 PM
Amazing poetry. The melancholy plaguing a heart and an an attempt to ease the pain from a distance are so powerfully delineated. I can surmise the depth of concern shown and your desire to alleviate the pain somehow. Very emotive.
Lane Avatar
May 6, 2023 at 7:07 PM
Valsa, I can tell from your remarks that you felt this man's pain. Your comments are always very insightful. Thank you.
Baker Avatar
May 6, 2023 at 2:03 PM
I loved your entry for the contest, Lin. I could feel the love and concern you so passionately would offer. You rhymes were perfect and I thought the three rhyming lines and a repeat rhyme as the 4th line of ech verse were exquisite. Thank you for sharing you gift of poetry with us. Well wishes in the contest. I had to add this to my FAV's list along with the other one I just read. A poet friend in Texas, Bill
Lane Avatar
May 6, 2023 at 7:05 PM
What an amazing review you've offered my poem, Bill! I don't think it's a form I've ever used and came about in this one because I had 3 rhyming words I liked and couldn't decide which one to discard, so I didn't. lol It made for a much more descriptive write to add to the man's sorrow. I'm glad you like this one so much. Thanks, neighbor to my West.
Andresen Avatar
May 6, 2023 at 7:28 AM
- Beautifully written, Lin ... deeply touching ... almost crying ... - Best wishes in the contest :) - Have a lovely weekend - hugs
Lane Avatar
May 6, 2023 at 8:15 AM
Anne-Lise, while writing it I felt the same emotions, wishing I could give them a happy ending. There was no way out that sounded feasible. A comment such as yours is worth more than a contest result. Thank you.
Y. Avatar
May 6, 2023 at 6:18 AM
WoW! Lin, This is so well written. Although it's sad, you can feel the love and heartache. It held my attention from start to finish. Well done. Best wishes in the contest:-) Alexis
Lane Avatar
May 6, 2023 at 6:22 AM
Morning, Alexis. There's something very sad to me about the word, 'yet,' It just as easily can be used in a positive way, but my thoughts took a different path, one that led me to sorrow for his loss, more emotional than physical. Thank you, sweet friend for letting me know it held your interest.
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May 6, 2023 at 6:12 AM
Unrequited love possibly, beautifully expressed Lin, sometimes no matter how hard one tries it’s just not meant to be, sad and tragic all at once, a difficult one to pen, yet I enjoyed the read, through the poetic experience, cheers David
Kavanagh  Avatar
May 6, 2023 at 6:24 AM
Possibly she became melancholic and depressed, one can never be sure why these issues arise, but very real they are!
Lane Avatar
May 6, 2023 at 6:17 AM
Thanks so very much, David. Writing this one came as an unexpected experience that began as just a way to express the pain felt by a man whose wife, for whatever reason, became detached from reality. Why I wrote it from a male perspective is a mystery to me.
Allison Avatar
May 6, 2023 at 5:07 AM
wow I cant beat what Mark has said, amazing poetry Lin, beautifully composed as ever:-) hugs Jan xx
Lane Avatar
May 6, 2023 at 5:28 AM
Jan, you're never at a loss for words. ;-) Seriously, thank you for honoring this one with your comments.
Koplin Avatar
May 6, 2023 at 5:05 AM
Lin, this is a very sad story, but you made it seem so real. Great poem, my friend!
Lane Avatar
May 6, 2023 at 5:26 AM
G'morning, Mark. My thanks to you for always appreciating my lines. I look forward to the days when you have time to write again.
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