David Kavanagh Poet Free verse

Would You Love Me If I Wasn'T a Poet

Would you still love me 
if I never tore you apart 
Took off your face paint 
Got under your skin
Looked behind those hazel eyes 
Put you back together again 
better than before 
say you didn’t snore 
Lie true my teeth 
catching these words falling through my mind 

Would you still love me if I never thought deep 
Seen outside the cosmos 
went back and forth through time 
put it into rhyme 
Walked across the face of the sun 
dug into its core
Came back to earth in a coronal mass ejection 
blacking out cities 
sowing fields with magnetism 

Would you still love me without my indignation 
to question god
Why he needed man
was there even a plan 
Tell him human intelligence is driving us mad 
how I see an abstract shape of eternity 
From my perspective 
one where we never die

So would you still love me if I wasn’t a poet
No, you would tell me I’m a pain!
for going with the grain 
not speaking out, or freaking out 
Bowing my head, whilst closing my mind 
pretending I’m blind 
You love a man not a poet
I love you too 
because unlike this 
you just don’t crow it

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The Situation September 19, 2023 at 6:40 PM Not the best rhyming but the ideals are consuming. I made it through to the end and had something to commend. David Kavanagh September 19, 2023 at 7:24 PM Heya TS, this one’s written in free verse, so won’t find many rhymes, perhaps just one or two, thanks for the read and commendation, cheers David

Silent One September 13, 2023 at 1:33 PM A personal take on the contest and one that reads very well.. Thanks for writing and congratulations on your placement. David Kavanagh September 13, 2023 at 2:37 PM Thank you! it was a pleasure to take part in your contest, cheers David

Curie Stark September 10, 2023 at 11:43 PM Beautiful She would definitely love for what you are Poet or not David Kavanagh September 11, 2023 at 5:51 AM Thank you Curie, I appreciate the vote of confidence in my poetry and me, delighted to meet you, cheers David

Charmaine Chircop September 8, 2023 at 2:36 PM To get under her skin,to dig and search deeper until you truly reach her..I'm sure she would love that..The fact that you want to see and know her for who she is.Beautiful poem David Kavanagh September 9, 2023 at 4:36 AM Heya Charmaine, you totally get this one, wanting to see past the superficial/skin deep, I love to go into the out of bounds realm, thank you so much for stopping by, cheers David

Christopher Flaherty September 7, 2023 at 1:42 PM This is your seminal poem or work to me David Sir That sums up and epitomizes you The how and why David was able to slay Goliath Thinking out loud with carefully processed Thought Congratulations David Kavanagh September 7, 2023 at 2:41 PM Thanks Christopher, I probably could’ve kept going on this one, but think I got my message across without writing a book, Goliath was a big wuss lol, cheers David

I Am Anaya September 4, 2023 at 6:07 PM Love it! No matter what I know she loves you, like we do David, btw, I think it would nice to see more poetry dedicated to wives and lovers. Not much of that is around, time to use ones individuality and break that mold. ;) I Am Anaya September 13, 2023 at 10:18 AM Congratulations on your win! Three dimensional character study and the devoid of superficial cliches and surface observation is readily apparent in you. David Kavanagh September 5, 2023 at 6:04 AM Heya Anaya, A poets life is sometimes difficult to separate from their own love life, i’m certainly not a romantic at heart, I usually come at romance from a different perspective, but yes I believe we would still have hit it off, even if I was never a poet, thank you for sharing your thoughts on this one, cheers David

Lin Lane September 4, 2023 at 12:59 PM I'm thinking she might want to think twice about loving you because you get under her skin and you're indignant. lol None of those traits are you though, David. You definitely don't go with the grain and you're never a pain. Good luck in this contest. David Kavanagh September 4, 2023 at 1:09 PM Thanks Lin, good to have you back after the holidays, I actually meant all this in the literal sense of seeing what’s under her skin and into her soul, but I know you know that, oh I’m sure I’m a pain for a few around here, because I don’t go with the grain, anyways it’s ok to go against the grain once the splinters are facing in the right direction>Cheers David

Yann Rolland September 3, 2023 at 4:54 PM so enlightning poetry, i would have never thought the question this way, you build a strong poem, a great inspiration, thanks a lot David Kavanagh September 4, 2023 at 12:40 PM Thanks Yann, I’m delighted you got some inspiration from this one, I always like to hear when someone bounces off a poem I’ve written, I’ve bounced off many myself, even just one line can throw me into a completely new direction, cheers David

Paula Goldsmith September 3, 2023 at 10:21 AM A wonderful story/write. "Good Luck" I also did this one. Have a blessed/great ~ day/week.......... David Kavanagh September 3, 2023 at 12:06 PM Thanks Paula, you’re very kind, sorry I missed your one, but of course I will have to check it out now, cheers David

Sotto Poet September 3, 2023 at 8:09 AM I am at a loss for where to start showering praise upon this metaphorical masterpiece. The way you incorporate your views into your writing is simply enchanting. Your ability to create vivid mental images is unparalleled, and the choice of words you use is nothing short of breathtaking. The profoundness in every line adds layers of meaning and complexity to your poem. BOL in the contest David Kavanagh September 3, 2023 at 12:05 PM Thanks Lasaad, I always appreciate your eloquent critique, although don’t always feel deserving, nevertheless I won’t complain, I could’ve kept going into the quantum realm, but gave it a rest this time, gets pretty weird down there lol, cheers David

Mystic Rose Rose September 3, 2023 at 7:39 AM lol, smart one David, gl in the contest, :) David Kavanagh September 3, 2023 at 11:59 AM Thanks Rose, glad you enjoyed, it was a strange theme to ponder , cheers David

Ink Empress September 3, 2023 at 6:45 AM Brilliant diction and flow of words here. I love the opening and the ending the most. Especially “ would you love me if i never thought deep seen outside cosmos” such heartfelt emotions expressed in a very creative and impeccable manner. Wish you all the best for the contest David Kavanagh September 3, 2023 at 12:21 PM At the end of the day we are all peers, and It’s always nice to bounce off each other’s tangents, ;.) Ink Empress September 3, 2023 at 7:17 AM Its good to be unique and original and not follow others, i admire that. Your way with writing is beyond profound and very poetic. Truly a pleasure reading you David Kavanagh September 3, 2023 at 7:08 AM Thank you IE, I really am just my own person when it comes to writing poems, of course we all have our own styles and see life differently, doesn’t mean we’re any less human or humane, main thing for me is never to force my opinions upon others, I do appreciate your fine critique, and well wishes for contest, cheers David