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Would Love Breathe Forever?

Sometimes, when your sparkling spirit waltzes with me to the perfumed periwinkle grooves of saffron breezes, I'm lost in a forever gaze, within those flickering ferns of a nascent nightmare, where I ain't any velvet-purple orchid, which gets saved in every mellifluous moment by the sacrosanct touch of your sempiternal fingertips. I fear, what if I were a translucent roseate, while lilac lips not fully stained with crimson syllables of poetic affection, would you still drape my soul in succulent chartreuse sepals of your silken embrace? What if my skin were an artisan's flawed gold-fabric, would you trace kohl runes in my imperfect veins, or cherish the warmth of my cosy cherry- embroideries laced with floral brocades of our dawning dreams? Will you still carve sunset's soft tapestries on my archaic terracota-pages, and hue a hyacinth- harmony of harp, upon my moon- dyed soul, if ever our love's scarlet star forgets to twinkle in verbena verses carved along the wisteria of midnight? I wonder if, our heartbeats will melt in sanguine autumn rays of afterlife, when our souls are locked in winter's frosty beams yet evanescent in glossy lakes of butterfly-serenades, sung by summery elixir of spring. What if my heart had lost its sunburst soulful similes stretching across platinum psalms and engraved these marine metaphors as immortal wrinkles in the dying leaflets of iced cyan hours? What if I were a forsaken breath of poesy? Would you still sequin the scarlet letters of stelliform - 'Hiya' with silky cream- pearls of your lazuline eyes, would you still love me, if I weren't a poet? So, when the gossamer glass of blue crescent has broken, please reminisce those unspoken ruby rhymes within amaranthine aroma of poetry, sewn with solivagant threads of invisible illustrations along those sandalwood shorelines, where, I would've been caged by the blackbirds of terrestrial time. Evermore, I will still cherish our serendipitous eden in sun's amber canopies, wishing you to be my venus-glazed muse for eternity, even when the seraphic satan, looking so pure, has erased my silhouette from life, within a shimmering death's kiss, alzheimer's reaper has thawed upon vintage verses and parched phrases have breathed in their last belief. "Would love still breathe, when 'You and I' are lost in waves of woe, exhuming regretful lifelines?"

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Date: 9/24/2023 10:32:00 AM
All I want to say has been said. I agree this fabulous poem is epic and stimulating. You are a wonderful talent. Belated congrats!
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Date: 9/14/2023 9:21:00 AM
So happy to not have missed such amazing take on "Would you love me if I wasn’t a poet " ! You are dripping with the nectar of poetry, Hiya! You have a stunning and impressive way how you forge your words, how you paint your portraits and landscapes, how you dive into your depth and come out with the most powerful of feelings and you render them into a masterpiece of poetry! You are a poet and you are Hiya an entity of the beauty of duality and lucky and blessed who falls for you.. Congratulations dear on your top win and it is my tremendous pleasure and honour to share such a recognition! Best regards and God bless you.
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Date: 9/13/2023 7:20:00 PM
wow ! I was infatuated with your mellifluous words of love, you exude poetry and breathe it out, congrats on this wonderful win dear Hiya :)
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Date: 9/13/2023 12:49:00 PM
This is an epic poem.. from the start to the end it is full of metaphors and descriptive word pairings that create vivid imagery through out the poem... Your opening stanza starts with a most poetic question, I fear, what if I were a translucent roseate, while lilac lips not fully stained with crimson syllables of poetic affection, would you still drape my soul in succulent chartreuse sepals of your silken embrace? It set the scene for the rest of the poem. Thanks for writing.
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Silent One
Date: 9/13/2023 12:50:00 PM
Congratulations on your first place
Date: 9/13/2023 7:23:00 AM
I'm pleased to stand beside you on this grand podium, dear Hiya. Congratulations on your remarkable triumph in the esteemed contest. Your magnificent and exquisite poem truly deserves this prestigious accolade.
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Date: 9/5/2023 8:40:00 AM
Another masterpiece from you dear Hiya. Your poetry is as beautiful as your kind, generous heart. I think we are all dumbfounded at times when we read your poems filled with so many poetic devices, great skill, splendidly crafted words…. I could go on and on! But most of all, what I love the most is you and your kind heart, love and support to others on here. Keep wowing and inspiring us. Love and hugs xx
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/6/2023 10:34:00 PM
Oh my, this beautiful comment really warmed my heart, thank you sooo much dear beautiful soul, I'm so grateful to know that you enjoyed reading this poem.. Your kind support and love truly means a lot to me! I admire your wonderful writes as well, always a pleasure to read them. Sending love- Hiya :)
Date: 9/4/2023 4:15:00 PM
You weave words with Alliteration and metaphors well, Wonderful write
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/6/2023 10:31:00 PM
Thank you so much for your kind visit and for reading my poem, I am very grateful for your beautiful words! :)
Date: 9/4/2023 7:32:00 AM
You certainly have a way with metaphor, just like Inky. Alzheimers reaper? I'll bet no one has ever used that before lol. Satan the fallen seraph has no claim on this beautiful poetry
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/6/2023 10:30:00 PM
Awwn, you're just too kind and generous! Yes, I simply adore Ink's metaphors and have learnt a lot, still am.. Haha, thank you so much, I'm grateful that you think so about this poem! :)
Date: 9/4/2023 7:21:00 AM
You have blown my mind, Hiya, with this magical verse, I need to sit with a dictionary to decipher the hidden meanings:) brilliant:)
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/6/2023 10:29:00 PM
Oh my, thank you so much for your kind visit and for reading my poem, I truly appreciate your beautiful support~ Hiya :)
Date: 9/4/2023 7:12:00 AM
Reads like a good contender for the contest. Way to go. Very descriptive and expressive lines penned. Sara
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/6/2023 10:28:00 PM
Awh, thank you so much for your sweet and beautiful words dear Sara, I'm beyond grateful for your kind support :)
Date: 9/3/2023 10:42:00 PM
WOW. The descriptive phrases you magically conjure are hypnotizing. No words can compare with this adorable verse.
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/4/2023 5:50:00 AM
Awh, dear SV, you're always so sweet in giving such kind compliments, I'm deeply grateful for your beautiful support and for always blessing my poems with your generous words :)
Date: 9/3/2023 10:43:00 AM
Dear Hiya, a stunning piece of breathtaking images, alliteration and word choices - with an exquisite originality of structure, I find it hard to choose words to describe your creation - it's simply splendid!
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/4/2023 5:48:00 AM
Awh, thank you so much dear beautiful soul, for your gorgeous and heartwarming feedback.. I'm so glad that you liked reading this.. Very grateful for your kind visit, sending love :)
Date: 9/3/2023 7:46:00 AM
another stunning medley of word combinations, alliteration and images - a gorgeous piece :)
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/4/2023 5:48:00 AM
Awwn, thank you so much dear, I'm so glad that you enjoyed reading this piece, truly appreciate you for visiting and reading :)
Date: 9/3/2023 7:44:00 AM
Hiya, I am at a loss for where to start showering praise upon this metaphorical masterpiece. The way you incorporate flowers into your writing is simply enchanting. Your ability to create vivid mental images is unparalleled, and the choice of words you use is nothing short of breathtaking. Each alliteration you employ is flawlessly executed, and the way your ideas effortlessly flow is a testament to your skill. The profoundness in every line adds layers of meaning and complexity to your poem.
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/4/2023 5:47:00 AM
Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback and kind words, I'm truly grateful for such in-depth analysis of my poem. You're really very generous.. I'm very thankful to you for always visiting my page blessing with your beautiful comments. :)
Date: 9/3/2023 5:47:00 AM
So, when the gossamer glass of blue crescent has broken and the hazel harbor of obsidian oxymorons has glistened with ruby-rusts --Just a few lines I picked out from the blossoms of your poetic heart that adorn your vocabulary. Splendid, as ever, Hiya.
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/3/2023 7:43:00 PM
Thank you so much for your very kind feedback and heartwarming compliments, this indeed means a lot to me coming from a brilliant poet like you, I'm very grateful :)
Date: 9/3/2023 5:39:00 AM
Another great poem on the prompt
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/3/2023 10:04:00 AM
Thank you so much for reading, dear beautiful soul, I truly appreciate you! :)
Date: 9/3/2023 5:06:00 AM
Can anyone come near you in this contest? How bland my own writing will be if ever I attempt to enter this contest! So in any case I don't dare to do that! You are like a skilled mazon building an edifice laying brick on brick. Your bricks are the metaphors and images of the rarest kind and with them you sculpt beautiful structures. I am lost in your 'verbena verses'and 'agate rhymes'. Excellent Hiya!
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/3/2023 10:03:00 AM
Gosh, such beautifully appreciative and honouring words from such a brilliant poetess like you, this means the world, I'm wholeheartedly grateful to you dear.. And truly cherish these words of kindness by your lovely heart and I'm sure that you can definitely create something very heartfelt for this contest.. It's always a pleasure reading your wonderful writes- sending love :)
Date: 9/3/2023 2:34:00 AM
This silences the dark and draws breathe from the light that is everlasting, embraces so gentle and so powerful, like the rainbow after the rain or the lightening piercing the stormy skies. This speaks of endless kisses, blazing passions, burning delights. This is a fire on the inside, arising to meet the insight into loving. I love this so. Beautiful. God bless you with love, Gina
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/3/2023 9:47:00 AM
Oh dear Gina, thank you so much for visiting my page and for reading, your heartwarming words have truly enchanted my heart, how poetic you are even in writing comments~ Sending love - Hiya :)
Date: 9/2/2023 11:12:00 PM
Wowow where do i even begin praising this metaphorical gem? I absolutely love your use of flowers here, im sure silent one will love that. And i love the way you’ve questioned too here it goes with the prompt so well. My fave line should be “ amaranthine alliterations” “ alzheimers reaper” suns amber canopies! Ah those alliterations are flawless and your imagery is stunning and the way this flows is beyond beautiful. I think this must be one of my favorite from you. You’ve kept it so evocative and touching. And theres so much depth in your lines. How sometimes we wonder if our beloved would accept us even if we were flawed. Goodluck for the contest
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/3/2023 9:46:00 AM
Oh, thank you so much for your sweet words.. I'm so glad that you like this as a fav, that truly made me so happy, Ink! Your feedbacks are always as beautiful as your lovely heart and I'm ever so grateful for your heartwarming words!!! :)

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