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Words That Make You Feel

You seemed to love me and I thought it was real, Young and foolish, I was so naive but quite genteel, Attended all your ballgames, cheered you on with zeal, Even learned curling so we could join your bonspiel. I played your queen at functions, you had a great deal, Said you loved me once, I thought that was the seal. After your presidency was done, you played the heel, Said it was over between us, our situation was not ideal, Your expression was matter of fact, your face cold as steel, Suddenly I felt nauseous my world spinning like a wheel, Looking in your eyes, this whole courtship was surreal. Did everything you asked of me, my love I cannot repeal, Could anyone truly love you more, that was my appeal. For once you became quiet, this relationship a lying ordeal, My words, my actions ~ If all I did, was make you feel. Written October 7, 2011 For Paula Swanson’s contest “If all I did, was make you feel”

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Date: 11/20/2011 10:46:00 AM
really sad and good poem it made me feel
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Date: 11/7/2011 5:37:00 PM
wow great job with this Monorhyme, Lee. You got in all you wanted to say and never missed a beat. Way to go
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Date: 10/21/2011 10:41:00 AM
,Good morning,~ LEE ~ how are you this wonderful Friday :-) morning... As for me, I'm missing everyone I know here on the soup PLUS more. *glad we are back up*. By the way I'm also stopping by to read a couple of poems OR commenting the ones I could not all week or yesterday, after being shut out for them awful few days..ENJOYED YOUR POEM, thank you for sharing! Take care and have yourself a wonderful Friday~ ;-) Always,..p.d.
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Date: 10/13/2011 9:52:00 AM
Lee, I don't think this is about yourself, is it? Because you mention about a presidency. anyway, it's a good poem with all the monorhyme in it!
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Date: 10/12/2011 7:30:00 PM
wow, fifteen lines of monorhyme... now THAT takes a vocabulary! Way ta go, Lee! Namaste~N
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Date: 10/12/2011 2:23:00 PM
Enjoyed reading you today Lee, quite a flow going here...
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Date: 10/8/2011 7:50:00 AM
So many emotions in this excellent poetry Lee, and most definitely a candidate for the winners podium. Have a lovely weekend :)
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Date: 10/7/2011 11:53:00 PM
OH, now that is what I call poetry. Great monorhyme, Lee. Sounds like a real bugger. Oops, can I say that here? Ah, I'm sure even Mother Theresa would have butted this bonehead to the curb. Cheers and hugs, Cyndi.
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Nancy Jones
Date: 10/12/2011 7:31:00 PM
am pretty sure mother T was familiar with boogers...
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Lee Ramage
Date: 10/8/2011 12:28:00 AM
Thanks Cyndi, appreciate the kind words.
Date: 10/7/2011 10:42:00 PM
heh... sounds like the feelin' was one-sided. what a monorhyme, lee!! imPRESSive!!! Beauty eve~N
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Lee Ramage
Date: 10/8/2011 12:27:00 AM
Thanks Nancy. Lee

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