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What were you doing, alone in the woods, my John, What were you doing out at dawn? Why it hasn't rained for ages now, So many failed crops, and fields you must plough. Your dirty clothes are all so glum. You're just a little dirty bum You deserve no pity, my son. Go up and clean yourself, get done, There'll be no food for you tonight, And don't dare cry you messy mite. What were you doing, alone in the woods, my John, What were you doing out at dawn? You dared disobey me again, Bastard idiot and a pain. Look at your clothes, all wet with dew, Torn without a valid reason, too. Do you think that I can afford Money needed, is all we hoard? I'll show you what attire you'll fray. I swear I'll tear your hideaway. What were you doing, alone in the woods, my John, What were you doing alone at dawn? Did I not send you to get twigs, Why do you behave like poor pigs? What are those stains around your face? Eating berries? Did you say grace? There, how's that for a bloody punch? Now your face looks best like a crunch, Can't even take his correction. Wipe that juice, you misconception. What were you doing, alone in the woods, my John, What were you doing alone at dawn? Were you smooching with silly ****, That goody goody, y mutt? Go find a hooker, try to learn What true pleasures women can burn. You'll never learn from that hussy, Good for nothing bit of lassie. If I see you again with her, Why I'll castrate you forever. What were you doing, alone in the woods, my John, What were you doing alone at dawn? Were not your father there with you? Why is your face so red and blue? Why haven't you returned together? Eating berries in this weather? Why is your new shirt so blood-stained? Don't you know he will have you chained! Oh John, my John, you'll never learn Your father will kill you, he's stern. What's that smile on your face, my John? What were you doing, alone in the woods, my son, What were you doing? placed 1

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Date: 8/19/2023 6:11:00 PM
Victor glad to see you back my friend we missed you and sent many prayers. Congratulation on your win!!!!
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Date: 8/18/2023 4:51:00 PM
Wow Victor, welcome back! That was some grand slam comeback of a poem! We all missed you very much, so glad to see you on here again!
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Date: 8/18/2023 10:08:00 AM
Congratulations on placing first, indeed well written and for me a fave for sure. Your poetic artistry is all over this ballad. I am duly impressed! Pangie
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Date: 8/18/2023 2:21:00 AM
Great story/poem a huge congratulations
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Date: 8/17/2023 4:56:00 AM
Hi Victor , glad to see you back ! You have come up with an intriguing story of a wayward son inviting the displeasure of his father ! Congratulations on your first place win. !
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Date: 8/16/2023 12:13:00 PM
- Back with a well-deserved congratulations on your win, Victor :) - hugs
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Date: 8/16/2023 12:06:00 PM
Back with congratulations. I enjoyed reading this WOW of a Wonderful write/story it again. Have a great day writing away.............
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Date: 8/16/2023 7:46:00 AM
Wow! Great work. Congratulations!
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Date: 8/16/2023 6:08:00 AM
Back with congrats on your outstanding win, Victor. Keep well
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Date: 8/16/2023 4:36:00 AM
Whoa Victor….what an extremely powerful provoking ,captivating write….you are definitely back my friend!! Cuddles….Debx
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Date: 8/16/2023 12:03:00 AM
wow this is good but it made me cry. :(
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Date: 8/15/2023 8:59:00 PM
Wow, loved this, a bit on the dark side!!! Hope you doing well!
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Date: 8/15/2023 7:55:00 PM
Hi Victor, welcome back and what a chilling story you have here, your pen has done wonders with this dark write..
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Date: 8/15/2023 7:53:00 PM
Coming back with a powerful poem. I am so glad your back. Many blessings and hugs.
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Date: 8/15/2023 7:28:00 PM
Hello, Vic, so good to read yours again. And what a captivating story… Hope all is well with you my friend :)
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Date: 8/15/2023 6:24:00 PM
A very powerful and dark write Victor, Good to see you back
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Date: 8/15/2023 4:11:00 PM
Stirring, I was made to feel nauseous, the ballad where you see it coming. Glad to see you are back, Victor. xHugs ~I Am Anaya
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Date: 8/15/2023 4:07:00 PM
That's some poem you penned my friend. Wonder what he was up to. Gives the feeling he was getting rid of a pain he could no longer put up with. Good to hear from you once more. Hope you weren't hurt badly. I will remember you in my prayers. God Bless, JB
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Date: 8/15/2023 1:45:00 PM
Gosh you vividly descriptive poem sure packed a punch Victor, so glad to see you back:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 8/15/2023 1:30:00 PM
Nice to see you back Victor. A great story/poem with a superb surprise ending. Take good care of yourself… Belle
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Date: 8/15/2023 12:25:00 PM
Nice dark one Victor, yes looks like John bashed dad’s brains in good, only so much demeaning a guy can take til he snaps, back with a bang, good to see you writing again, cheers David
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Date: 8/15/2023 11:46:00 AM
It's wonderful to see a post by you, Victor! Lifting a pen brought you back to us, but don't overdo. Rest well.
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Date: 8/15/2023 11:30:00 AM
Victor, your tale captivated to the end, as is usual with your stories. It's so great to be reading them again. Welcome back, my friend.
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Date: 8/15/2023 11:15:00 AM
Welcome back Victor. Highly emotive write captures the readers' mind.
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Date: 8/15/2023 10:45:00 AM
- Wooow... Victor ... if I were John ... (I peed my pants in fear ... his father is no joke ) - Excellent "come back poem" ... you've been deep missed my friend ... happy to "see you" and read you :) - hugs
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