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At morn the leaves were just green, When I was just seventeen. At the bench I sat in vain, Till sunshine chased the rain. As green leaves turned to gold, Softly the colours manifold. Now, old auburn tree rustles, But the branch no more hustles 19 August 2021 Your Pick Again Poetry Contest Sponsored by Brian Strand

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Date: 8/29/2021 11:18:00 AM
Hmm, all I can find is that your rhyme was not exact between whistles and rustles. Doesn't keep me from loving this one!
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Date: 8/29/2021 11:05:00 AM
No placement?? I loved this one. I wonder if this is the one that needed internal rhyming, which I am not seeing here. I'm going to go look at the rules again. I can't see how this would not place otherwise.
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Date: 8/24/2021 7:44:00 AM
Oh that waiting for blossom! Now much older, I even miss the waiting: Love it! Great write!
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Date: 8/19/2021 3:11:00 PM
So beautiful! "Through the storms through the rain" - love this poignant line. Hugs ~ Mala
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Date: 8/20/2021 8:51:00 AM
Thank you for your inspiring feedback, dear Mala.
Date: 8/19/2021 11:19:00 AM
Very poetic, JCB. Best for a win.
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Date: 8/20/2021 8:51:00 AM
Thank you.
Date: 8/18/2021 12:34:00 PM
So poignant!! Love this.
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Date: 8/20/2021 8:51:00 AM
Thank you dear Andrea.

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