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Caught in a square Count down the sides 4 3 2 1 reduced to 0 I do not understand How does it work, where can I find the key Where is the lock, what is behind that door Why can't I open what's inside I need it formless shapes, around they go I feel them here, near, their silent moves recede, then a touch, far too unexpected let go go off of me let go of me let go of me let go of me

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Funom Makama

Date: 6/17/2017 9:10:00 AM

So great and excellent. Three words underrating this magnificient piece which has dragged my mind in the viscose silk of awe to really lack what to say. A definite 7 friend.

Darren White
Date: 6/17/2017 2:37:00 PM

My friend, your comments alone are always little beautiful poems. Thank you :)

Agnes Krampe

Date: 6/16/2017 7:56:00 AM

Awesome shape poem, Darren.

Darren White
Date: 6/16/2017 11:48:00 PM

Thanks Agnes :)

Anne-Marie Coreggia

Date: 6/15/2017 7:49:00 AM

Squared away at the bottom of the poem, you may feel lost in a vicious circle that won't let go of you when all along the key is right there in front of your very eyes. This is so powerful and clever Darren!:) Amitiés

Darren White
Date: 6/15/2017 7:58:00 AM

Thanks Anne-Marie, I love this interpretation very much :)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/15/2017 12:51:00 AM

and yet without knowing, you have found the key to humanities love, and I could not think of a better caretaker!!!

Darren White
Date: 6/15/2017 7:58:00 AM

Oh, and I HUG you for it too :)

Darren White
Date: 6/15/2017 12:54:00 AM

I love this comment Art, I love the way you turned it into something positive.

Sara Ella

Date: 6/14/2017 7:34:00 PM

Yikies! This is a scary one! O.O But the shape is cool - looked okay on my iPad too. What struck me most is the words in the key shape. If you read them line by line - the timing is perfect! You have another AWESOME poem. :)

Darren White
Date: 6/14/2017 10:59:00 PM

yes? I tried a different approach to accomplish it too, but Soup doesn't allow coding. Thanks Sara :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/14/2017 3:12:00 PM

Always interesting. Making us dive deep into this dark ink room.

Darren White
Date: 6/14/2017 11:00:00 PM

Yeah, indeed :) Thank you, Kim .

Tim Smith

Date: 6/14/2017 11:30:00 AM

Wow what a masterpiece...that's me peeking through the keyhole

Darren White
Date: 6/14/2017 1:30:00 PM

I know :D Sorry!

Tim Smith
Date: 6/14/2017 12:55:00 PM

Lol...I was the UPS guy not postman...same difference

Darren White
Date: 6/14/2017 12:48:00 PM

Peekaboo Tim, there's no dog here, now hand me the mail!

Chris Green

Date: 6/14/2017 10:30:00 AM

Is it a coincidence that "creepy" and "creative" both start out the same...not this time. This was dark, frightening, lonely and so cool in how it was done. Your talent always amazes me my friend.

Darren White
Date: 6/14/2017 12:47:00 PM

Hehe, yeah, that is right! I wanted to do something with a shape again and this came to mind :) Thanks my friend.

Maria Williams

Date: 6/14/2017 10:16:00 AM

Hi Darren my friend, A scary situation indeed to be in - how on earth do you think of all these things and I love how you make an image out of words? ...Maria PS my latest 'Coconut Kisses and Peppermint Streams' may help soothe - don't eat too many though, unless you want to pay a visit to monsieur dentiste...Maria

Darren White
Date: 6/14/2017 12:44:00 PM

Thanks Maria :) It's actually quite hard, on PC it looks great, like a key, but on tablet or phone it's distorted :( I visited your poem. Thank you SOOOOO much my friend :)

Dean Wood

Date: 6/14/2017 10:14:00 AM

This is interesting Darren. I like the key shape. A little strange but also deep. Makes me wonder. - Dean

Darren White
Date: 6/14/2017 1:31:00 PM

Yes, Dean. It's not right away apparent what it is about. Let's say it's a general bad experience... That a easy explanation, I know, but it is also a true one.