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Walk A Mile in Her Shoes - Contest  - poem awarded 8th place

Within These Walls

Nobody knows what’s going on within these four walls
The fighting, the shouting, the pain and suffering – no friend ever calls
The skin around your eye is as black as the night
Yet you cover it up, no-one knows about your plight

‘Oh I caught it against the cupboard door or tripped and fell on the floor’
These are the excuses – we have heard them all before
Its not just physical violence you can see
There is verbal abuse that eats away at me

Both men and women can be the aggressors
With their violence and abuse they are the oppressors
‘Oh its just his way he loves me really’ she said
But in the morning she could be lying dead

Stand up to the bullies don’t let them get away
Or you may not be here to see another day
Talk to someone there are people who can help
And hopefully by the law they can be dealt

Submitted to the Dark Side of Love Contest
Sponsored by Shadow Hamilton

2nd November 2014
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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A   Avatar
February 6, 2016 at 7:45 PM
thank you for the kind reply
A   Avatar
February 6, 2016 at 4:14 PM
Jan, Congrats on "Your Dark Side of Love WIN!!!" XOX ~LINDA~
Allison Avatar
February 6, 2016 at 4:16 PM
Thanks Linda it is a very emotive subject:-( hugs Jan xx
Onclaud Avatar
February 5, 2016 at 1:39 PM
jan, seething write for bullies...congrats on your shining win.. huggs
Allison Avatar
February 5, 2016 at 1:47 PM
Thanks Nette it is good to be able to get more reads of my poem with this contest:-) hugs Jan xx
May Avatar
February 5, 2016 at 11:17 AM
A powerful write Jan...Congrats on your win!
Allison Avatar
February 5, 2016 at 11:47 AM
Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx
Cheema Avatar
February 5, 2016 at 8:56 AM
Love your encouraging spirit! Congrats on your great placement, Jan!
Allison Avatar
February 5, 2016 at 8:58 AM
Thanks Balveen:-) hugs jan xx
Scars Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 1:06 PM
Miss lady Jan, wonderful poem, such depth and it is raw poetry. Well done, *smiles* -luloo
Allison Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 1:09 PM
The was based on observation and things I have read Luloo can't believe how long ago I wrote it:-) hugs Jan xx
Haight Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 10:48 AM
Great poem, Jan. I think there are way too many people caught in this vicious web. Congratulations on your fine win. Hugs, Sandra
Allison Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 11:23 AM
Thanks Sandra it is such an emotive subject - many many years ago I used to work with a girl who was regularly coming into work with black eyes/ bruises etc and she would always have an excuse but we knew who was really causing her pain:-( hugs Jan xx
Gentry Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 9:18 AM
Congratulations Jan on your win! I like how you described the problem and offered a solution. Dark with some hope.
Allison Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 9:19 AM
In reality it must be terribly difficult to escape an abusive relationship Susan:-( hugs Jan xx
Turner Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 7:54 AM
Well written, Jan. Once again congratulations on your win.
Allison Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 9:15 AM
Thanks Daniel:-) hugs Jan xx
Hamilton Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 7:40 AM
great pen Jan congrats on 3rd place hugs
Allison Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 9:14 AM
Thanks for giving us the chance to showcase old poems too I remember writing this one a long time ago:-) hugs jan xx
Lane Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 6:21 AM
Congratulations on taking this one off the shelf for a win. Well done, Jan.
Allison Avatar
February 4, 2016 at 6:25 AM
It was one of my early writes Lin so it lovely for it to be viewed again :-) hugs jan xx
Jones Avatar
January 9, 2015 at 6:25 PM
*nor. Guess I can't spell either. *S* Cynthia
Jones Avatar
January 9, 2015 at 8:04 PM
LOL I hear ya there my friend. hehe *S* Cynthia
Allison Avatar
January 9, 2015 at 6:38 PM
lol I have finger trouble too need a 'smell chequer' for my computer lol:-) Hugs jan xx
Jones Avatar
January 9, 2015 at 6:24 PM
Woman not man should endure this kind of pain. Excellent write you have yourself here Jan. Already saved in my fav's. And a 7 rating. Well done. :O) Keep up with the great work. Keep on penning. Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us. We all truly appreciate it. *S* Cynthia
Jones Avatar
January 9, 2015 at 8:03 PM
Good thing it's a fictional write. Oh wow!!!! That's horrid. :OS *S* Cynthia ~HUGS~
Allison Avatar
January 9, 2015 at 6:37 PM
Thankfully its a fictional write on my part but is based on memories from my teenage years where someone i worked with was a victim of abuse - the stories she came up with the explain the bruises - oh breaks my heart to think back all those years:-( hugs jan x
Smith Avatar
August 14, 2014 at 6:09 AM
So true Jan...I am so worried right now....hugs Tim
Allison Avatar
August 14, 2014 at 6:35 AM
You and me both Tim :-( ... I've sent soup mail to our friend. Hugs Jan xxxx
Horsman Avatar
August 10, 2014 at 7:33 AM
Needed to be written, and oh so well too..straight to the point, Jan, like this...
Allison Avatar
August 10, 2014 at 9:14 AM
Thanks Harry - it was written for a contest but some of the poem is true based on what I saw a colleague go through when i was 16 - she tried to cover it up but we could see past the 'excuses' she gave for her black eyes and bruising - so so sad and it still goes on today:-( Hugs Jan xxx
Sirak Avatar
April 23, 2014 at 6:24 AM
Congrats on your win. No one knows the life of sadness and fear a victim leads and they can't always ask for help.
Allison Avatar
April 23, 2014 at 6:46 AM
thanks for the lovely comment Monterey I can only imagine the pain and suffering abused people go through. Hugs Jan x
Roberts Avatar
April 21, 2014 at 10:22 PM
Jan, congratulations, such a sad subject ...Seren
Allison Avatar
April 22, 2014 at 1:45 AM
Thanks Seren for the lovely comment. Hugs Jan xx
A   Avatar
April 21, 2014 at 6:38 PM
Jan, , Loved how you extracted this one away. Congratulations, this is a great win, for such a painful and realistic theme, when writing about this topic, In which phantom's around Abused Women. Have a nice day:) ~LINDA
Allison Avatar
April 21, 2014 at 6:42 PM
Thanks Linda I really appreciate your kind words. Hugs Jan xx
Macfarlane Avatar
April 21, 2014 at 6:10 PM
Well done Jan, congrats on a powerful write and win. Hugs
Allison Avatar
April 21, 2014 at 6:13 PM
Thanks Cecilia - I'm delighted to have received a placement in this very worthwhile contest. Hugs Jan x
Flach Avatar
April 21, 2014 at 4:19 PM
Thank you for entering the contest, Jan and congratulations on your placement. I found this poem to have nice flow, rhyme and meter. I also thought you brought up some very powerful and valid points about abuse: "Its not just physical violence you can see / There is verbal abuse that eats away at me" and "Both men and women can be the aggressors" are insightful and thoughtful messages that all should hear. Thanks. Joe
Allison Avatar
April 21, 2014 at 4:21 PM
Thank you so much Joe - its a poem I wrote not long after I joined the site in February - since then the creativity has just come from nowhere. Thank you for bringing this contest to highlight this continuing abuse. Hugs Jan xx
Torres Avatar
April 21, 2014 at 1:29 PM
Jan... this is one so personal... women may not be beaten or bruised... but inside of her soul, she is bleeding... with a double-edged sword that slashed her heart... a verbal abuse she endure all the time... I am part of their world... and still don't escape from the dark... CONGRATULATIONS on your win!! ..a new fave on my list.. ...!! :O))oxoxoxo
Allison Avatar
April 21, 2014 at 1:34 PM
wow thanks so much for the lovely comment Aiyah. its not written from personal experience - well not my own anyway but when i was 16 and a student a girl at the nursery I worked at came in with a black eye and we had the caught it on the door excuse - it happened week out week in but she just wouldn't get out of an abusive relationship - so sad hugs Jan xxxx
Graham Avatar
February 13, 2014 at 7:49 AM
Tackling a subject that's anything but poetic. Well expressed and rhyming too ...
Allison Avatar
February 13, 2014 at 4:39 PM
Hi Patricia Thanks for the lovely comment. Ive only been writing poems for 3 months and having such fun being creative and yet still tackling subjects like domestic abuse and bullying is something I never thought I'd write about. regards Jan x
Pettit Avatar
February 11, 2014 at 4:37 PM
Domestic violence is a big problem so many of us have to deal with all the time. Your work is very descriptive and detailed with some good rhyming.
Allison Avatar
February 11, 2014 at 6:43 PM
Hi Robert Its just written from observation mainly in women's magazines not from my own experience. thanks for the lovely comment. Jan x
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