Edward Ebbs Poet Choka

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Within Reach

Heat of the day sun and fun
Swimming and diving
Signs read do not swim or dive
Young and immortal
Swimming until exhaustion
Time for one more dive
A graceful dive, but too deep
Trying to surface
Forces are pulling downward
Trying to surface
Grabbed this hand just within reach
Safe at water’s edge
Exhausted and still vomiting, 
I witness no one to thank.

Edward J. Ebbs - April 11, 2015

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Eric Ashford August 12, 2019 at 3:40 PM Cool write. Liked the mysterious question implied at the end.

Ann Foster August 12, 2019 at 12:51 AM "He" was right there. :) Wonderfully written. Mountains of things you did not say, which were said... Lovely. Ann

Curtis Johnson November 27, 2017 at 11:26 AM Great one Edward.

Andrea Dietrich April 16, 2015 at 2:03 PM rereading this one, I really like it! Edward Ebbs April 16, 2015 at 9:06 PM Thank You Andrea :)

Shadow Hamilton April 14, 2015 at 6:24 PM the foolhardiness of youth eh Ed great write gl in contest hugs 7 Edward Ebbs April 14, 2015 at 10:58 PM Yes, it's that immortal part of being young. I was always in the water somewhere, rapids, lakes, ocean...the ocean was my first love...Thank you.

Debbie Guzzi April 14, 2015 at 8:21 AM So nice to read your poetry this morning. Light & Love Edward Ebbs April 14, 2015 at 10:55 PM Thank you and thanks for visting Debbie :)

Constance La France April 13, 2015 at 7:30 AM Ed, such an intense choka, powerful,7, best of luck in the contest, btw, I had a similar experience in the water, makes one really think and thanks for visiting my poem, blossoms and bubbles Edward Ebbs April 13, 2015 at 2:43 PM "Makes one really think" is the right words...thank you :)

M. L. Kiser April 13, 2015 at 5:26 AM You had me rather tense, for a couple of lines. Glad that you were saved. Powerful poem. Edward Ebbs April 13, 2015 at 6:19 AM Me too...I would have missed so much, thank you :)

Eileen Manassian April 12, 2015 at 4:25 AM It's a miracle...Love write. Those things still happen!

Andrea Dietrich April 11, 2015 at 11:40 PM wow, it sounds like you were saved by an angel or something. What an incredible way to do this contest idea. Love it. Edward Ebbs April 12, 2015 at 7:03 AM Thank you Andrea :)

Sandra Haight April 11, 2015 at 8:26 PM Amazing poem, Ed. What an experience - somewhat like a miracle. (I read some of your details in your response to Mystic.) Best wishes for the contest. Sandra Edward Ebbs April 11, 2015 at 11:36 PM Thank You Sandra, it was so long ago :)

Poet Destroyer A April 11, 2015 at 4:47 PM Thank you for the reply Ed, it means a lot to me. Wishing you the best of luck in this particular contest. Love Linda

Poet Destroyer A April 11, 2015 at 3:13 PM 'young and immortal" loved that line. a miracle i foresee you need not thank anyone but the big guy up stairs:), enjoyed your write, -p.d.