With Such Longing

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Inside a bamboo garden, where I followed a red-crowned crane an exotic treasure of another sort held me spellbound seated upon the lawn, a courtesan beauty there did reign. Guilty, I stood beside a Lychee tree, expectations of arraign but she smiled with cherry lips, in pale blue she was gowned inside a bamboo garden, where I followed a red-crowned crane. A delightful scene of refined Chinoiserie, created quite urbane Lotus flowers, Jin of bonsai, beside the paragon were found seated upon the lawn, a courtesan beauty there did reign Exquisitely she sat, blush on her cheeks, fragile as porcelain. I longed to caress her coifed hair, cascading and unbound inside a bamboo garden, where I followed a red-crowned crane. I feared death, for when she beckoned my heart was being slain. I bowed before the Eastern goddess in whose beauty I had drowned seated upon the lawn, a courtesan beauty there did reign. Worthy of gracing a palace, she and the Chinoiserie shall remain no longer will I find her graceful figure on the ground inside a bamboo garden, where I followed a red-crowned crane seated upon the lawn, a courtesan beauty there did reign. July 16th, 2017

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Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/21/2017 5:54:00 AM

An excellent villanelle to accompany that beautiful painting, Lin:) well done:)

Lin Lane
Date: 7/21/2017 6:12:00 AM

Your remarks are always so uplifting, Jo. Thanks so much.

Funom Makama

Date: 7/19/2017 1:27:00 PM

You just unzipped the covers of my mind to the unprecedented worship of your adorable lines with a powerful choice of words that can't just be ignored. Showers of your wisdom is well palpated in this page and the only thing I can say is a big WELL DONE! Can't wait to have more of your mental command flowing through my reading mind.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/19/2017 1:33:00 PM

and how many other poems did you copy/paste this comment on? I know you did that on my last poem...same exact comment on at least 2 other poets on the same day... Don't bother visiting my writes with such insincere words.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/16/2017 11:40:00 AM

Oh so full of oriental desire and your imagery is outstanding Lin I could picture the scene so perfectly:-)a beautiful villanelle I have seldom written this challenging form:-) Hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 7/17/2017 7:31:00 AM

It IS a challenge but worth the effort when it comes together. Thanks, Jan.

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 7/16/2017 11:23:00 AM

Impressive again, Lin.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/17/2017 7:30:00 AM

Thanks, Dale.