Lin Lane Poet Villanelle

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With Such Longing

Inside a bamboo garden, where I followed a red-crowned crane 
an exotic treasure of another sort held me spellbound 
seated upon the lawn, a courtesan beauty there did reign. 

Guilty, I stood beside a Lychee tree, expectations of arraign 
but she smiled with cherry lips, in pale blue she was gowned 
inside a bamboo garden, where I followed a red-crowned crane. 

A delightful scene of refined Chinoiserie, created quite urbane 
Lotus flowers, Jin of bonsai, beside the paragon were found
seated upon the lawn, a courtesan beauty there did reign 

Exquisitely she sat, blush on her cheeks, fragile as porcelain.
I longed to caress her coifed hair, cascading and unbound
inside a bamboo garden, where I followed a red-crowned crane. 

I feared death, for when she beckoned my heart was being slain. 
I bowed before the Eastern goddess in whose beauty I had drowned
seated upon the lawn, a courtesan beauty there did reign.

Worthy of gracing a palace, she and the Chinoiserie shall remain
no longer will I find her graceful figure on the ground
inside a bamboo garden, where I followed a red-crowned crane
seated upon the lawn, a courtesan beauty there did reign.


July 16th, 2017

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Joanna Daniel July 21, 2017 at 5:54 AM An excellent villanelle to accompany that beautiful painting, Lin:) well done:) Lin Lane July 21, 2017 at 6:12 AM Your remarks are always so uplifting, Jo. Thanks so much.

Funom Makama July 19, 2017 at 1:27 PM You just unzipped the covers of my mind to the unprecedented worship of your adorable lines with a powerful choice of words that can't just be ignored. Showers of your wisdom is well palpated in this page and the only thing I can say is a big WELL DONE! Can't wait to have more of your mental command flowing through my reading mind. Lin Lane July 19, 2017 at 1:33 PM and how many other poems did you copy/paste this comment on? I know you did that on my last poem...same exact comment on at least 2 other poets on the same day... Don't bother visiting my writes with such insincere words.

Jan Allison July 16, 2017 at 11:40 AM Oh so full of oriental desire and your imagery is outstanding Lin I could picture the scene so perfectly:-)a beautiful villanelle I have seldom written this challenging form:-) Hugs Jan xx Lin Lane July 17, 2017 at 7:31 AM It IS a challenge but worth the effort when it comes together. Thanks, Jan.

Dale Gregory Cozart July 16, 2017 at 11:23 AM Impressive again, Lin. Lin Lane July 17, 2017 at 7:30 AM Thanks, Dale.