Unseeking Seeker Poet Ottava rima

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With Our Dying Breath

At the moment of death, when our body falls,
as our whole life replays through our laboured mind,
what are the dark spots our heart then there recalls,
that still exercises a relentless bind
on our consciousness far removed from bliss squalls,
having not pursued pathways loving and kind
and thus our head and heart not quite hand in glove,
do we learn at last that we owe debts of love?

03-January-2023

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Joanna Daniel January 6, 2023 at 5:02 AM Very high thoughts, US, great ending line:)

Deb M January 3, 2023 at 5:46 AM So beautiful U.S…love the second last line! Debx Unseeking Seeker January 3, 2023 at 7:47 AM Thank you, Deb

Constance La France January 3, 2023 at 5:40 AM Seeker, I love your poem, well done. I think God is all forgiving if one truly repents. I imagine that before we can enter Heaven a review is done of our life, like a movie playing, both the good and the bad. And a decision is made by Heavens elders on how you may be able to repent your sins or be forgiven your sins. It is just my imagination for I have no proof, Constance Unseeking Seeker January 3, 2023 at 7:46 AM Sin is misalignment from love due to ignorance. Our conscience speaks as voice of God but we don’t listen. Then karma or law of cause & effect comes into play. Since all is one, we must spherically experience the pain we inflected on others by exchanging roles, until the ‘victim’ exits this stupid game of revenge by forgiving the transgressor. God does not judge, we judge ourselves from the lens of love.

Christuraj Alex January 3, 2023 at 5:31 AM You have, indeed, very solid and clear Indology. I am greatly inspired. Unseeking Seeker January 3, 2023 at 7:40 AM Thank you, Chris

Regina Mcintosh January 3, 2023 at 2:59 AM Love this - just beautiful. God bless you. Love, Gina Unseeking Seeker January 3, 2023 at 3:18 AM Thank you, Gina :)

Victor Buhagiar January 3, 2023 at 2:28 AM We owe lots of debts of love, but why leave it for the last moment? Unseeking Seeker January 3, 2023 at 3:18 AM Exactly, dear Victor

Valsa George January 3, 2023 at 1:10 AM If we can realize far ahead of death that we owe debts of love, our life will become one of bliss. Sublime thoughts, dear Seeker friend ! Unseeking Seeker January 3, 2023 at 2:07 AM Thank you, Valsa!