With Our Dying Breath

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At the moment of death, when our body falls, as our whole life replays through our laboured mind, what are the dark spots our heart then there recalls, that still exercises a relentless bind on our consciousness far removed from bliss squalls, having not pursued pathways loving and kind and thus our head and heart not quite hand in glove, do we learn at last that we owe debts of love? 03-January-2023

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Joanna Daniel

Date: 1/6/2023 5:02:00 AM

Very high thoughts, US, great ending line:)

Deb M

Date: 1/3/2023 5:46:00 AM

So beautiful U.S…love the second last line! Debx

Unseeking Seeker
Date: 1/3/2023 7:47:00 AM

Thank you, Deb

Constance La France

Date: 1/3/2023 5:40:00 AM

Seeker, I love your poem, well done. I think God is all forgiving if one truly repents. I imagine that before we can enter Heaven a review is done of our life, like a movie playing, both the good and the bad. And a decision is made by Heavens elders on how you may be able to repent your sins or be forgiven your sins. It is just my imagination for I have no proof, Constance

Unseeking Seeker
Date: 1/3/2023 7:46:00 AM

Sin is misalignment from love due to ignorance. Our conscience speaks as voice of God but we don’t listen. Then karma or law of cause & effect comes into play. Since all is one, we must spherically experience the pain we inflected on others by exchanging roles, until the ‘victim’ exits this stupid game of revenge by forgiving the transgressor. God does not judge, we judge ourselves from the lens of love.