Winter Ws

Winter - W/S snow thunder rumbles white fire sparkles in flurries hummingbirds dine at feeders brittle wind torrents howl like exiled banshees as a fat robin hunts for worms 1/9/23 Contest: Winter Sedoka Sponsor: Charlie Messina

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Len Gasun

Date: 2/5/2023 5:12:00 AM

I love the panoramic view of winter in your poem my dear friend Sam. I can imagine the birds probably taming for foods. I love and enjoyed your stellar poem in a beautiful form. Hope I can try sedoka someday. Thanks for sharing. Big Congrats on your win! Hugs

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/26/2023 6:28:00 AM

I wanted to drop by to say congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Thanks for sharing. Sara

Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/27/2023 10:42:00 AM

Thank you so much Sara for your return visit and your congratulations! So appreciated. This was a fun contest. Sending you blessings!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/25/2023 1:27:00 PM

I like the way you put the birds into this one. Congrats for the win.

Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/27/2023 10:40:00 AM

Thank you so much Andrea! We always have lots of different birds in our yard - perhaps its the feeders?! It just seemed natural to include them. Sending you warm blessings!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/25/2023 9:15:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. Your "Winter" is a wonderful story/write. Poor birds out in the cold. Have a wonderful day..............

Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/27/2023 10:36:00 AM

Paula, thank you so much! Winter is truly a hard time for the birds as they look for food. We have a hummingbird feeder and a bird feeder. They are always empty and need refilling! But we see the results in our fat robins and happy hummingbirds. Sending you warm blessings!

Charles Messina

Date: 1/25/2023 5:00:00 AM

Beautiful poem, Sam. Lovely imagery...Congratulations on your placement in my contest! Stay warm...brrr. Hugs Charlie

Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/27/2023 10:32:00 AM

Hi Charlie! Thank you so much for sponsoring this delightful contest! I love the haiku emphasis on creating images. So grateful for your placement. There are wonderful entries. Must have been fun to read such creative entries. Hope you are well. Blessings and a hug my friend.

Gary Radice

Date: 1/22/2023 2:48:00 AM

All that's been said Sam. Once more your imagery places the reader in the places you write of. 'Brittle' is a wonderful adjective to describe the wind torrents. 'Snow Thunder' conjures up great imagery too. A great read. Cheers - Gary

Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/27/2023 10:29:00 AM

Hi Gary! Thank you so much! I love knowing that the images conjured up pictures for you. Have loved learning about the haiku types of poems. They are perfect for exploring vivid imagery! So glad you enjoyed it. All the best! Cheers!

Juliet Ligon

Date: 1/18/2023 7:29:00 AM

I love the way you described the sparkling snow as "white fire."

Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/24/2023 11:03:00 AM

Thank you so much Juliet! I love seeing the sun glint through a snowstorm. Such an amazing and wonderful sight in a magic wonderland. Blessings to you!

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 1/17/2023 11:02:00 PM

Very picturesque with perfect imagery.

Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/24/2023 10:45:00 AM

Thank you so much Victor! For me, even though winter doesn't have the bounty of color of spring, the images of the season are unforgettable! Hope you are well. Blessings.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/16/2023 2:29:00 PM

such interesting contrasts, Sam. Creative work.

Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/24/2023 10:44:00 AM

Thank you so much Andrea! More and more I am seeing winter as a season of contrasts! Blessings!

Susan Ashley

Date: 1/13/2023 8:24:00 PM

My Dearest Rhyme Time Friend, your imagery is so dynamic and dramatic! I adore the rich contrasts drawn. Winter can be both wild and mild and your golden pen illuminates the poetic page with imagery both furious and tranquil. Your poetic finesse knows no bounds, my sweet poetry sis! Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes sent on hummingbird breezes.. ~Susan

Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/24/2023 11:01:00 AM

My Dearest Rhyme Time Friend, sending you my heartfelt gratitude for your beautiful and very perceptive view of this winter haiku. More and more I am seeing winter as a season of stark contrasts - blacks and whites and reds, so unlike the rainbow of spring, the thunder storms of summer or the kaleidoscope of autumn - contrasts I savor like a warm cup of tea on a chilling winter afternoon filled with rain or snow! Your beautiful message is like that warm cup of tea to savor for it brings me blessings and joy sweet poetry sis! Sending you blessings in cascades of sparkling snowflakes! :)"

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 1/13/2023 7:36:00 PM

This feels like the contrast between the harshness of winter and the more gentle hand of spring, very descriptive as always!

Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/18/2023 10:35:00 AM

Hi Michelle! Happy New Year! This was such a fun, new form of haiku for me. Winter is such a season of contrasts that, in my mind, lead to a new awakening in spring! Even in the cold and stormy days, spring's shadow is ever present in robins, hummingbirds and winter flowers like the daphne. Hope you are staying warm and cozy in all the northwest rain! Blessings.

Valsa George

Date: 1/12/2023 3:42:00 AM

'wind howling like exiled banshees' and 'flurries of white fire'.... The intensity of the chill winter... can it be better expressed in any other images.... ? I feel awed by your telling images at once arresting and eye catching, dear Sam.

Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/13/2023 10:41:00 AM

Dearest Valsa, many thanks and much gratitude for your lovely message and feedback! I always feel a sense of awe by your words that leave a warm glow and weave a spell of joy for me. It is indeed a joy to share the beauty of imagery together. Your amazing imagery is always a motivating force for me to continue to reach higher and go deeper! Sending you blessings of joy sweet friend!!

Michael Tor

Date: 1/9/2023 5:28:00 PM

Very effective words Sam conveying Winters arrival. Thanks for sharing...

Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/13/2023 10:17:00 AM

Hi Michael! So good to hear from you! So glad you enjoyed this foray into winter's wonderland. Sending you warm blessings of peace and joy in this season of storms!

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/9/2023 4:37:00 PM

Sam, with your wonderful word choice, you were able to portray a scene that was breathtakingly beautiful. A top winner for me. Best wishes for the contest

Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/13/2023 10:15:00 AM

Hi Lasaad! Heartfelt gratitude to you for your delightful compliments and your feedback. It was so much fun to imagine winter in this picture. It is such a season of contrasts. Thanks for taking a walk with me through this winter wonderland all bundled up in scarves and mittens! Blessings my friend.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 1/9/2023 4:10:00 PM

A lot of beauty, action and sparkle grace this well imagined poem, Sam. Best wishes for the contest. :)

Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/13/2023 10:04:00 AM

Hi Evelyn! Thank you so much for your beautiful message! Your words are so meaningful to me. A lovely gift for the new year. This poem was inspired by a winter storm, a robin and the hummingbird that comes to the feeder outside my office window! Take care. Blessings of joy to you for a color filled new year!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/9/2023 2:17:00 PM

Great imagery, Sam!

Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/13/2023 9:59:00 AM

Hi Kim! Thank you so much. As I watched a storm roll in I saw a very fat robin hopping across the lawn. Love it when nature paints magic in pictures!