winter cemetery

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Poetry/Verse/winter cemetery
Copyright Protected, ID 12-1610-461-22
All Rights Reserved, 2023, Constance La France

Written, December 22, 2023
For the International Contest Short Form Poetry x 3
Sponsor, Chetta Achara, Judged 01/15/2024

Fifth Place

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"My poem consists of Kimo, Tanka, and Haiku." as I walk, birds are singing me a song ancient trees a canopy and I follow a path all is calm winter within the cemetery as I seek a tomb ... where I read your engraved name weeping. . . I have found mother the snow is falling the scene is white beautiful ~ bird footsteps visit

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Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 12/23/2023 6:40:00 PM

Constance, this takes us on a poignant journey through grief and remembrance. The shift from the serene nature imagery of the Kimo to the stark reality of the cemetery in the Tanka is powerful, drawing us into your search for your mother. The Haiku at the end leaves a quiet resonance, the bird footprints a delicate mark on the white beauty, a symbol of nature's continued cycle in the face of loss. A beautiful and moving tribute, expressing deep sorrow with both simplicity and strength. - Daniel

Constance La France
Date: 12/26/2023 1:09:00 PM

Daniel, thank you so much for the lovely comment, and compliment , appreciate, blessings

Brenda Chiri

Date: 12/23/2023 1:41:00 PM

Beautifully writte !:)

Constance La France
Date: 12/26/2023 1:09:00 PM

Brenda, thank you so much for the compliment, blessings

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/22/2023 4:38:00 PM

the picture captured my heart...then I felt breathless and sad reading your poem. I appreciate the flow of the three forms you used. Best wishes with the contest, Sara

Constance La France
Date: 12/26/2023 1:10:00 PM

Sara, thank you so much for the compliment on my pic and poem, blessings, and thank you also Sam !

Sam Scott
Date: 12/23/2023 1:31:00 PM

Same Sara - love the picture!

Ink Empress

Date: 12/22/2023 8:54:00 AM

Ah how gorgeous is this! So beautiful how you’ve done storytelling in such a descriptive manner ensuring all your forms flow together so well. And the picture you’ve used here is stunning too: i love this. Best wishes for the contest

Constance La France
Date: 12/26/2023 1:12:00 PM

Ink, thank you so much for the compliment, lovely comment and encouragement, blessings