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Winter Architectures

WINTER ARCHITECTURES


Clouds convulse, cold feathers fall:

dressing green globes with white gowns,

frosting brown houses like cakes--

snow architectures.
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2:42 pm, November 10, 2015

Copyright © Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser | Year Posted 2015

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Sara Kendrick Date: 11/18/2015 9:14:00 AM Winters come and winters go but this work will stand forever!!! Way to go with this win..Congrats..Sara Login to Reply

Pandita Sietesantos Date: 11/18/2015 2:49:00 AM What a beautiful winter Dodoitsu! The imagery is outstanding! Congratualtions, my dear Olive on your wonderful win! Warmest regards. Pandita Login to Reply

Charlotte Puddifoot Date: 11/17/2015 6:42:00 AM olive, i totally agree with what heather has said below, this is stunning and lovely! wonderful use of alliteration and imagery - you are a strong imagistic writer - congrats on your well deserved win! :) Login to Reply

Heather Ober Date: 11/14/2015 11:35:00 AM Olive, this is just beautiful. The alliteration flows so naturally, and your imagery pops right off the page! I love the idea of snow falling like feathers, and those frosted brown "cake" houses. That last line is the perfect ending! Big congrats on your 1st place win in my contest :) Login to Reply

Skat A Date: 11/14/2015 7:47:00 AM Olive, Congratulations on your "Winter Dodoitsu Win." Luv SKAT Login to Reply

Michael Tor Date: 11/13/2015 11:34:00 PM Nice win Olive congratulations!! Login to Reply

David Mohn Date: 11/13/2015 10:29:00 PM Terrific Olive...big congrats on this beauty Login to Reply

Kim Merryman Date: 11/13/2015 8:13:00 PM I love the unique imagery in this, Olive! Congrats on your well deserved 1st place win! Love, Kim Login to Reply

Barbara Gorelick Date: 11/13/2015 3:02:00 PM Love the cake/icing...congrats! BG Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 11/13/2015 2:19:00 PM Very beautiful take on winter Olive many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/19/2015 2:40:00 AM thanks much Jan, pleased to read you stopping by and leaving some comment.. =`)

Paul Callus Date: 11/12/2015 4:29:00 PM Love your take on this winter theme, Olive_eloi! very creative 'architecture', especially the snow-covered houses which you liken to icing-sugared cakes. hugs // paul Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/16/2015 8:20:00 PM Paul, weeeeee I really just had to write this down and that line is my fave too, you know I love sweets and I ate a cake that day and made me realize and like it to the brown houses.. =`) with the architectures, spring out from my head... =`)~Olive Eloisa thanks much! Paul Callus Date: 11/15/2015 1:28:00 PM Congratulations Olive_eloi!!! This poem was a winner from the start:) Well done! Hugs // paul

Edlynn Nau Date: 11/11/2015 12:45:00 PM You made me miss the snow as it Falls. Love the image of snow building this white dream. This is just a lovely write! Login to Reply Edlynn Nau Date: 11/16/2015 9:21:00 PM Congratulation on your prize for this write! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/16/2015 8:17:00 PM Thanks much Edlynn.. pleased to read your comment.. =`)

James Fraser Date: 11/11/2015 11:59:00 AM A wintry scene captured beautifully with a brush of delicacy that's quaint and delightful. Nice one little one // hugs // James xxxx Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/16/2015 8:16:00 PM huge one, thanks always for the generous comment.. =`)~Olive Eloisa =`)

Ravi Sathasivam Date: 11/11/2015 2:30:00 AM Excellent. Beautifully said. Enjoyed. Tks Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/16/2015 8:15:00 PM thanks much ..=`)

Afolabi Muideen Date: 11/11/2015 1:24:00 AM Wow! What a beautiful and wonderful write my friend Olive. Your write depicts imagery that brought your write to life in the sense of this reader. Excellent..........A.M. Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/16/2015 8:14:00 PM thanks much Afolabi, i love pictures.. =`)~Olive Eloisa =`)

Arthur Vaso Date: 11/10/2015 9:45:00 PM Beautiful! Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/16/2015 3:50:00 AM thanks much Arthur.. =`)

Andrea Dietrich Date: 11/10/2015 5:43:00 PM oh I just noticed it's dodoitsu. Isn't that four lines instead of five?? You might want to check it fast!! Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/10/2015 6:09:00 PM Andie, thanks much =`) I did this poem so fast that I wasn't able to read the form correctly... thank you and I did correct. I hope its ok.. =`) weeee!!! ma mistake!!! :D! but had fun writing this.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 11/10/2015 5:42:00 PM so cute, that last part especially, the imagery is of gingerbread houses!!! Login to Reply

Kp Nunez Date: 11/10/2015 11:41:00 AM Very charming Olive! I like the imagery you have created in my mind...and the alliteration in each line...Lovely sound...all the best! hugs! Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/16/2015 8:05:00 PM Kim thank you so much for this wonderful generous comment.. =`) i love alliterations as poetical device.. =`)

Emile Pinet Date: 11/10/2015 8:41:00 AM A magical land of feathers and down takes shape in the reader's mind, and draws a smile. Emile. Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/11/2015 8:32:00 PM I always enjoy creating imagery in my poems Emile.. =`) Words in poetry for me should appeal to all senses..=`)

Mark Woods Date: 11/10/2015 2:40:00 AM Exquisite imagery and love the comparison of snowflakes to feathers. It takes me back to our last snow fall and even though I am not a big fan of snow (due to the hardship it cause farm animals) I must admit it creates some divine beauty. A very enjoyable poem. Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 11/10/2015 9:06:00 PM Thanks much Mark.. :) I never experienced winter yet and I agree to what you said regarding the animals.. =