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written for 14 beautiful lines contest, sponsored by Constance La France

Wings of Gossamer Sparks

"As if you were on fire from within. The moon lives in the lining of your skin." ~ Pablo Neruda
When the sky unfurls your silhouette, like moonlight glazed in sequined haze, I breathe the ache, cradle the air~ on tiptoes beneath quivering stars, to taste poetry within your warmth, free-flowing on the sighs of silence, where silken veins mirror tender dreams of soulmates engrossed in rainbow mists. But am I to remain a veiled verse, an irrelevant flame ~ a blemished rhyme, as songs within your heart fall out of sync, amidst paper promises, still forged in love, beneath the wings of gossamer sparks, raining tears of memories...
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Fowler Avatar
May 6, 2025 at 8:46 AM
Hi Inky. As always, your subtle alliterations and carefully woven words create excellence! Congratulations! :)
George Avatar
May 4, 2025 at 9:23 PM
Not mistaken....! Before hand, I knew it would be a first place winner. Back to your poem with congratulations, dear friend on your top win.
Goldsmith Avatar
May 4, 2025 at 11:32 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your magical "Wings of Gossamer Sparks" write. What a great picture you have here. Have a blessed day with your win.......
Andresen Avatar
May 3, 2025 at 9:22 AM
Hi, Ink :) - Congratulations on your fourteen beautiful lines in the contest :) - Have a lovely weekend :) - hugs
Parker Avatar
April 30, 2025 at 7:18 PM
you weave a very rich imagination with your poetic pen, dear poet, not a lot of poets can do that, it takes a very sensitive soul...Frederic
Empress Avatar
May 1, 2025 at 7:50 AM
I find it an honor to receive comments from talented and experienced poets like you dear frederick! Thank you so very much truly
Gifford Avatar
April 30, 2025 at 5:56 PM
Hello IE, this is another beauty you have painted, my friend. Always a pleasure reading your work. Sending blessings your way.
Empress Avatar
May 1, 2025 at 7:45 AM
So kind of you, thank you so much always for your generous support! Im grateful
George Avatar
April 30, 2025 at 4:36 AM
Memories .... sweet memories! When you see him as a 'silhouette, like moonlight glazed in sequined haze', what you feel is a kind of ache. How you long to curl once more in his warmth. What a nostalgic feel your celestial lines have produced...! But those dreamy moments are no more there, what remains is just memories that cause an overflow of tears! Dear Empress, this poem is sheer beauty, crystallized! The image is spectacular!
Empress Avatar
May 1, 2025 at 7:41 AM
Thank you so much sweet valsa! I appreciate you always! Truly! Sending you light
Hind Avatar
April 29, 2025 at 9:30 PM
Breathtaking imagery and feeling, really - loved it
Empress Avatar
May 1, 2025 at 7:36 AM
Awn thank you always for being so kind and supportive always grateful
Jama Avatar
April 29, 2025 at 3:51 PM
First of all I love the picture you picked to go with your poem. Second, this is bittersweetly dark. "I breathe the ache, cradle the air~ on tiptoes beneath quivering stars," absolutely beautiful. Your metaphors never cease to amaze.
Empress Avatar
May 1, 2025 at 7:29 AM
Wow it must be eid or Christmas? To receive a comment from you is truly shocking and a pleasant surprise haha! Grumpy! Thank you for reading and for supporting my poem! Grateful truly for your visit
Onpaper Avatar
April 29, 2025 at 12:02 PM
When the sky unfurls your silhouette, like moonlight glazed in sequined haze, oooo sequined haze !!! That’s sexy!!!! to taste poetry within your warmth, where silken veins mirror tender dreams of soulmates engrossed in rainbow mists. Oooo the imagery papi!!! as songs within your heart fall out of sync, amidst paper promises, mmm that is cleaver!!! still forged in love, beneath the wings of gossamer sparks, raining tears of memories..an absolute beauty!!!
Empress Avatar
May 1, 2025 at 7:28 AM
Papi u are an absolute beauty! Thank you so much for your comment
Beaufort Avatar
April 29, 2025 at 10:48 AM
IE, great how you end with a question. You will never end up a veiled verse or irrelevant flame here. However, you do point out how difficult it is to become that way in the eyes of another you might be fond of. Hopefully when that happens we are in a position to move on to a better place in the universe. The mind is a funny thing and it's not so easy to just let go. Hope you are well and (of course) smiles!!
Empress Avatar
May 1, 2025 at 7:27 AM
Thank you so much dear duke for all your comments, so kind and generous of you! Yes you are right mind is a funny thing, and appreciate always the smiles . Sending you light
Poet Avatar
April 29, 2025 at 7:16 AM
A wonderful poem, dearest Ink. You probed topics such as illicit affection, longing, and the need for connection. You assume their sentiments for someone who remains aloof, noting their role in their bond and the impact of memories. I enjoy the rich and evocative language that uses images to evoke feelings of longing and ethereality. Words like "silhouette," "moonlight," "quivering stars," and "gossamer sparks" create a dreamy mood, yet phrases like "veiled poetry" and "blemished rhyme" imply sentiments of inadequacy and worthlessness. Best wishes for the contest.
Empress Avatar
May 1, 2025 at 7:27 AM
Thank you so much youv perfectly interpreted what my poem means. Appreciate your visits always
DiMino Avatar
April 29, 2025 at 6:49 AM
Actually, you are your beautiful poetry...everything else is illusion. Poetry doesn't hide...it reveals. Metaphors are less words, and more spirit source, lifting them and us mystically aloft. Great writing!
Empress Avatar
May 1, 2025 at 7:21 AM
Thank you so very much dear joe, for your poetic and kind response, grateful truly for your support!
Cunningham Avatar
April 29, 2025 at 6:47 AM
One thing for sure your pen is aflame IE, Beautiful imagery and metaphors, your tools in trade. Best of luck in the contest. Tom
Empress Avatar
May 1, 2025 at 7:14 AM
Awn thank you dear tom, for always being so kind and generous! Im truly grateful for your support always
Lane Avatar
April 29, 2025 at 4:44 AM
There's nothing veiled about this verse. You've made it exceedingly clear that your gossamer sparks ignited a very relevant flame.
Empress Avatar
May 1, 2025 at 7:12 AM
Ah thank you so much dear linnersz, so kind of you! Appreciate always your support!
Rhymes Avatar
April 29, 2025 at 4:24 AM
An irrelevant flame ! Wow!
Empress Avatar
May 1, 2025 at 7:11 AM
Thank you dahlin
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