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chasing shooting stars wandering the galaxy gold dust at my feet AP: Honorable Mention 2020 Submitted on February 27, 2018 for contest HAIKU sponsored by DEBORAH BEACHBOARD

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/17/2018 3:42:00 PM

this is the type of haiku I like (which I mentioned at your blog as an example of a rule broken that the modern haiku guys do not like) To imagine the gold dust at your feet. I think that is just FINE to write a haiku that way. this is one of your best haiku.

Line Gauthier
Date: 4/17/2018 6:20:00 PM

Agreed, Andrea. We should have two separate categories: "true haiku" and "fake haiku".

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/28/2018 1:23:00 PM

- You have created a beautiful picture, Line :) - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Line Gauthier
Date: 2/28/2018 2:54:00 PM

Thank you, Sunshine. I always love your visits.

Paul Callus

Date: 2/28/2018 4:22:00 AM

A striking image, Line. I hope you made some lovely wishes:) Regards // paul

Line Gauthier
Date: 2/28/2018 7:24:00 AM

Thanks, Paul, for your sweet visit and comment.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/27/2018 6:08:00 PM

I really like this one and gold dust at your feet. For me, haiku are cool when using figurative language.

Line Gauthier
Date: 2/27/2018 6:40:00 PM

Thanks, Andrea. Much appreciated visit ad comment.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/27/2018 12:04:00 PM

Interestingly, (I think), your words directed me to the Biblical patriarch, Jacob. When he dreamed of a ladder to Heaven (Stairway to Heaven, Led Zeppelin, anyone?), Jacob saw angels ascending and descending, AND his head was in the heavens, while his feet remained firmly planted on earth...Kudos on this Haiku, Line! :)gw

Line Gauthier
Date: 2/27/2018 12:07:00 PM

Thank you so much, Gershon. I knew my little haiku was of biblical proportions. LOL