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Lost out in space Somewhere God has hurled A less evil place A far fairer world Where one circumstance I'm allowed to defy Where I'm granted one chance To just say goodbye Where I rip through that wreck To the seat where you bled Where I cradle your neck And hold up your head Where I brush off the mud And soothe your last fear Where I clean off the blood And wipe your last tear Where I lay you to rest And stroke shattered bones Where you die on my chest Instead of alone

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Date: 10/30/2015 7:57:00 PM
Great write, Tim. Congrats on your win. No one dies alone although the ability to see a loved one off on their journey is comforting. Last goodbyes are bittersweet. Perhaps this poem speaks from experience. It is heartwrenchingly beautiful. Janece
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Date: 10/30/2015 6:29:00 PM
wow, what an impact this one has. Surprised it was not even higher on the list. You had a great 15th poem on your poet's page, Tim! Congrats in the contest
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Date: 10/28/2015 12:36:00 AM
Terrific interpretation, Tim, congrats! Regards, Viv
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Date: 10/28/2015 12:09:00 AM
Congrats on superb win again Tim with this amazing write! Loved to read again!
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Date: 8/16/2014 1:28:00 AM
Very sad write on the theme of accident. Tim, congrats
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Date: 8/16/2014 1:12:00 AM
Wonderful write Tim! had always been a winner, glad to hv read this, congrats on huge win!
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Date: 8/15/2014 11:31:00 PM
Congrats Tim, such a sad write...Seren
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Date: 8/15/2014 9:13:00 PM
Congratulations Tim.... Linda
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Date: 8/15/2014 6:58:00 PM
Tim this rips my heart my friend...hugs your way
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Date: 8/15/2014 2:50:00 PM
so hauntingly sad Tim an awful experience congrats on placing hugs
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Date: 8/15/2014 2:41:00 PM
Aw, Tim, this is such a beautiful, hauntingly sad write about your little boy. They are never grown up when they die, always our babies. Love you, dear friend. Congratulations on this win.
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Date: 8/15/2014 2:26:00 PM
such a sad write Tim but many congrats on your win:-) Hugs jan xxx
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Date: 10/8/2013 8:57:00 PM
Tim, great write on the longing theme... SKAT
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Date: 10/6/2013 5:52:00 PM
Hello Tim CONGRATULATIONS!!! Thanks for supporting the ""LONGING poem"" contest <----- Awesome!! If you'd like:-) stop by my latest poem "FORBIDDEN". Enjoy my latest blog! "ALL SHE WROTE" if you like:) AT -----> http://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry_blogs/blog_detail.aspx?BlogID=15995&PoetID=18720 -------take care & enjoy your coming week. Love*** Linda
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Date: 3/10/2013 1:10:00 PM
Tim this one moved many of us to tears I'm sure....I hope you know no one dies alone or lives alone for that matter...I'm sure angels were holding your friend. Blessings..
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Date: 3/10/2013 11:20:00 AM
Good morning, TIM;-) Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. Have yourself a nice and sweet Sunday. ~Always & Forever *LINDA
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Date: 3/6/2013 2:52:00 PM
Nice Write!!!
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Date: 3/4/2013 2:37:00 PM
An unusual eulogy - a self-soother. Beautiful stuff. Congrats on the selection. daver
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Date: 8/21/2012 6:30:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved placement in John Heck's "Dazzled" contest Tim. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/20/2012 8:15:00 PM
what a very sad poem, Tim, but an incredible poem. Congrats again!!!
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Date: 8/20/2012 9:30:00 AM
Wow......Tim, what can I say?........John had asked for raw emotion in his contest......and by the third stanza, when the raw pain of this poem began to rip my heart.......I wanted to pray that this was not based on a true loss of your own experience. An amazing poem, my friend.
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Date: 8/20/2012 8:59:00 AM
Very nice work! Congratulations on your win (I'd have placed it higher) Terry
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Date: 8/20/2012 4:54:00 AM
Congratulations on your smashing win Tim xx
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Date: 8/20/2012 2:57:00 AM
Tim, congrats on your great win....David
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Date: 8/19/2012 10:51:00 PM
Tim, I am touched beyond words...congrats on your win. This one hoes to my faves. Love and Blessings, Rhonda
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