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When I Was An Old Man

When I Was an Old Man, Waiting to kick the can. I looked back on my life with a frown, just before I was cut down. I thought only of decision not made, As everything began to fade. My life, passed by in an instant, as I am now very distant. In a few years I will be forgotten, but in a few days I will be rotten. I will live on as a statistic, to serve the futuristic. But nonetheless, my body will die here today, as I slip into a slow decay. My name will fade bit by bit, as more love ones die and more enemies quit. No History Book will record my daily constraints, for I am but another nameless saint.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 6/12/2016 10:59:00 PM
jack B, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 6/8/2016 12:29:00 PM
- Poetry: Music in words .... rhythmic expression of emotion, like the nectar of the bee, you are sharing here with us Jack :) - Welcome to Poetry Soup :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/8/2016 12:42:00 AM
Deep write, Jack, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs **YNR - SKAT**
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Date: 6/7/2016 7:16:00 AM
That's the way to go! Congrats on your first entry and welcome to Poetry Soup, Jack. :)
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Date: 6/6/2016 7:55:00 PM
So is everybody.... but soupers and poetry readers still there will be reading a line from this poem and another from that ....mentally they will chat... with the poet....isn't it a matter of gratefulness and satisfaction, whether big or small is a subjective stuff...however you have written very well my friend....
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