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When I Let One Loose In the Elevator

When I let one loose in the elevator,
I’d been goosed by gas,
released the stench of embarrassment.
Out flew a largemouth bass —
now for the harassment.

When I let one loose in the elevator,
nearby, I heard Joan’s guffaw cry,
“O sakes alive!” She had a blast.
A so-called friend, she turned me in, refused to lie,
so I rear-ended her, let another one past.

7/31/2021
When I Let One Loose In The Elevator 
Sponsor: Charles Messina

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Paula Goldsmith August 10, 2021 at 9:31 AM Congratulations on your win. What a cute/fun write. I must remember to never ride the elevator with you. hahaha Have a blessed day with your win...............

Delice Arleen Skelly August 9, 2021 at 10:35 PM Dear Kim, everyone's poems were so lighthearted, they brought a smile to my face. Congratulations..Delice Kim Rodrigues August 10, 2021 at 4:35 AM Thanks, Delice!

Indiana Shaw August 9, 2021 at 8:55 PM I'm still trying to get over the aftermath of this one, I do hope the grassy little snake Joan, recovers, after all you were both friends before you got in the lift, ha, ha, ha . . . ; ) Kim Rodrigues August 10, 2021 at 4:34 AM LOL! Joan is a gas!

Anne E Sangster - K August 9, 2021 at 5:51 PM Lol :-D at... so I rear ended her and let another one past. Congratulations on your win Kim. Cheers Anne :-) Kim Rodrigues August 9, 2021 at 7:21 PM Thanks, Anne!

Beryl Edmonds August 9, 2021 at 5:22 PM That’s really funny Kim, gave me a laugh. Congratulations on your win in the contest… Belle Kim Rodrigues August 9, 2021 at 7:21 PM Thank you, Belle!

Terry Flood August 9, 2021 at 4:33 PM She got what she deserved, Kim... shame she wasn’t smoking. Congrats on your win. Terry Kim Rodrigues August 9, 2021 at 7:21 PM Thank you, Terry!

Jan Allison August 9, 2021 at 3:06 PM Have never heard of rear ended lol this made it even more funny for me,many congratulations on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Kim Rodrigues August 9, 2021 at 7:22 PM Thank you, Jan! :)

Janice Canerdy August 9, 2021 at 10:21 AM LOL! Congrats, Kim! Janice Kim Rodrigues August 9, 2021 at 2:06 PM Thank you, Janice!

Charles Messina August 9, 2021 at 7:23 AM LOL Kim, So funny! Congratulations on your win! Thanks for the laughs. Hugs Charlie Kim Rodrigues August 9, 2021 at 7:31 AM Glad you liked it! Thank you, Charlie!

Malabika Ray Choudhury August 5, 2021 at 1:55 PM This is an excellent humorous piece, Dear Kim. Wish I could write like yours! Wonderful take! Love ~ Mala Kim Rodrigues August 5, 2021 at 6:00 PM Thanks so much, Mala!

Andrea Dietrich August 3, 2021 at 5:21 PM ha!!! Great ending line, Kim. These poems are really going fast here at Soup. Kim Rodrigues August 3, 2021 at 5:33 PM LOL…right!

Garima Dubey August 3, 2021 at 11:12 AM Been there ,done that but wouldn't repeat it .(*_*). Loved your humour Kim. Kim Rodrigues August 3, 2021 at 1:18 PM Thank you, Garima!

Jack Ellison August 2, 2021 at 1:26 PM LOL My kind of humour Miss Kim!!! XOX Kim Rodrigues August 3, 2021 at 5:40 AM LOL! Thanks, Jack! :)

Michelle Faulkner August 1, 2021 at 3:03 PM I guess you can't really deny it if there are only two of you in there~ Kim Rodrigues August 1, 2021 at 5:21 PM Perhaps there was more…lol

Victor Buhagiar July 31, 2021 at 10:52 PM Seems the elevator is working properly, the gas does not affect it. Hugs Kim Rodrigues August 1, 2021 at 4:38 AM LOL!

Gershon Wolf July 31, 2021 at 8:40 PM Holy Mackerel, Kim! Pun fully intended. Good luck in this zany contest! ~ Gershon Kim Rodrigues August 1, 2021 at 4:38 AM Thank you, Gershon!

Caren Krutsinger July 31, 2021 at 7:43 PM This is hilarious Kim, a winning poem for sure! Kim Rodrigues August 1, 2021 at 4:37 AM Thank you, Caren!

Marilene Evans July 31, 2021 at 12:55 PM What can I say.... cannot say anything for I'm just laughing. Good luck in the contest.... Have a great day. Kim Rodrigues July 31, 2021 at 6:27 PM Thank you so much!

Tom Cunningham July 31, 2021 at 11:54 AM well written Kim. Nothing worse in a closed space when your nose twitches and you start to gag lol Tom Kim Rodrigues July 31, 2021 at 6:29 PM So true! My granddaughter had a scary then embarrassing moment. First she was out in the heat, said she couldn’t see, nearly fainted, she was given water. We get onto the ferry and her mom starts going…ooh something stinks…grand was close to tears. Later on she tells mom…”it was me.” They can laugh about it after the fact…the bittersweet or sour…

Alexis Y. July 31, 2021 at 10:59 AM Hi Kim, I laughed out loud reading this one. Well done. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day. Soup mail:-) Alexis Kim Rodrigues July 31, 2021 at 6:29 PM Thank you, Alexis! ;)

Quoth Theraven July 31, 2021 at 10:53 AM Kim, This is so hilarious, trapped without a ventilator. Usually only see largemouth bass jumping after a morning rain, almost never in the elevator. -Richard Kim Rodrigues July 31, 2021 at 6:30 PM LOL!

Phyllis Babcock July 31, 2021 at 10:51 AM Had me chuckling with this humorous poem. Enjoyed. love phyl Kim Rodrigues July 31, 2021 at 6:30 PM Thanks, Phyl!