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When I Let One Loose In the Elevator

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When I let one loose in the elevator, I’d been goosed by gas, released the stench of embarrassment. Out flew a largemouth bass — now for the harassment. When I let one loose in the elevator, nearby, I heard Joan’s guffaw cry, “O sakes alive!” She had a blast. A so-called friend, she turned me in, refused to lie, so I rear-ended her, let another one past. 7/31/2021 When I Let One Loose In The Elevator Sponsor: Charles Messina

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/10/2021 9:31:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a cute/fun write. I must remember to never ride the elevator with you. hahaha Have a blessed day with your win...............

Delice Arleen Skelly

Date: 8/9/2021 10:35:00 PM

Dear Kim, everyone's poems were so lighthearted, they brought a smile to my face. Congratulations..Delice

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/10/2021 4:35:00 AM

Thanks, Delice!

Indiana Shaw

Date: 8/9/2021 8:55:00 PM

I'm still trying to get over the aftermath of this one, I do hope the grassy little snake Joan, recovers, after all you were both friends before you got in the lift, ha, ha, ha . . . ; )

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/10/2021 4:34:00 AM

LOL! Joan is a gas!

Anne E Sangster - K

Date: 8/9/2021 5:51:00 PM

Lol :-D at... so I rear ended her and let another one past. Congratulations on your win Kim. Cheers Anne :-)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/9/2021 7:21:00 PM

Thanks, Anne!

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 8/9/2021 5:22:00 PM

That’s really funny Kim, gave me a laugh. Congratulations on your win in the contest… Belle

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/9/2021 7:21:00 PM

Thank you, Belle!

Terry Flood

Date: 8/9/2021 4:33:00 PM

She got what she deserved, Kim... shame she wasn’t smoking. Congrats on your win. Terry

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/9/2021 7:21:00 PM

Thank you, Terry!

Jan Allison

Date: 8/9/2021 3:06:00 PM

Have never heard of rear ended lol this made it even more funny for me,many congratulations on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/9/2021 7:22:00 PM

Thank you, Jan! :)

Janice Canerdy

Date: 8/9/2021 10:21:00 AM

LOL! Congrats, Kim! Janice

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/9/2021 2:06:00 PM

Thank you, Janice!

Charles Messina

Date: 8/9/2021 7:23:00 AM

LOL Kim, So funny! Congratulations on your win! Thanks for the laughs. Hugs Charlie

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/9/2021 7:31:00 AM

Glad you liked it! Thank you, Charlie!

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 8/5/2021 1:55:00 PM

This is an excellent humorous piece, Dear Kim. Wish I could write like yours! Wonderful take! Love ~ Mala

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/5/2021 6:00:00 PM

Thanks so much, Mala!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/3/2021 5:21:00 PM

ha!!! Great ending line, Kim. These poems are really going fast here at Soup.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/3/2021 5:33:00 PM

LOL…right!

Garima Dubey

Date: 8/3/2021 11:12:00 AM

Been there ,done that but wouldn't repeat it .(*_*). Loved your humour Kim.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/3/2021 1:18:00 PM

Thank you, Garima!

Jack Ellison

Date: 8/2/2021 1:26:00 PM

LOL My kind of humour Miss Kim!!! XOX

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/3/2021 5:40:00 AM

LOL! Thanks, Jack! :)

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 8/1/2021 3:03:00 PM

I guess you can't really deny it if there are only two of you in there~

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/1/2021 5:21:00 PM

Perhaps there was more…lol

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 7/31/2021 10:52:00 PM

Seems the elevator is working properly, the gas does not affect it. Hugs

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/1/2021 4:38:00 AM

LOL!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/31/2021 8:40:00 PM

Holy Mackerel, Kim! Pun fully intended. Good luck in this zany contest! ~ Gershon

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/1/2021 4:38:00 AM

Thank you, Gershon!

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/31/2021 7:43:00 PM

This is hilarious Kim, a winning poem for sure!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/1/2021 4:37:00 AM

Thank you, Caren!

Marilene Evans

Date: 7/31/2021 12:55:00 PM

What can I say.... cannot say anything for I'm just laughing. Good luck in the contest.... Have a great day.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/31/2021 6:27:00 PM

Thank you so much!

Tom Cunningham

Date: 7/31/2021 11:54:00 AM

well written Kim. Nothing worse in a closed space when your nose twitches and you start to gag lol Tom

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/31/2021 6:29:00 PM

So true! My granddaughter had a scary then embarrassing moment. First she was out in the heat, said she couldn’t see, nearly fainted, she was given water. We get onto the ferry and her mom starts going…ooh something stinks…grand was close to tears. Later on she tells mom…”it was me.” They can laugh about it after the fact…the bittersweet or sour…

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/31/2021 10:59:00 AM

Hi Kim, I laughed out loud reading this one. Well done. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day. Soup mail:-) Alexis

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/31/2021 6:29:00 PM

Thank you, Alexis! ;)

Quoth Theraven

Date: 7/31/2021 10:53:00 AM

Kim, This is so hilarious, trapped without a ventilator. Usually only see largemouth bass jumping after a morning rain, almost never in the elevator. -Richard

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/31/2021 6:30:00 PM

LOL!

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 7/31/2021 10:51:00 AM

Had me chuckling with this humorous poem. Enjoyed. love phyl

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/31/2021 6:30:00 PM

Thanks, Phyl!