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When I Let One Loose In the Elevator

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Example for my contest :)

When I let one loose in the elevator... The girl right next to me sighed So, I said to her " Can't you smell that odor... Geez, it smells like something has died" Holding a tissue over her nose In a squeamish voice, to me...she said "If I didn't know any better mister... I could've sworn, I thought you were dead"

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Lindsay Laurie

Date: 8/11/2021 10:06:00 PM

Hello Charles ... sometimes it pays to leave well enough alone - thanks Charles - Lindsay

Indiana Shaw

Date: 8/10/2021 7:16:00 AM

Old poets never die, they just smell that way . . . ; )

Anne E Sangster - K

Date: 8/9/2021 5:37:00 PM

Hi Charles. Lol at your last stanza. Sounds like an odor like that could be used as mace. :-D Nicely done! Thanks again for the top win and hosting this fun competition. It was definitely a blast! Hugs Anne :-)

Anisha Dutta

Date: 8/6/2021 5:50:00 AM

Cute n Witty. Enjoyed. 'll try. Don't know whether that will satisfy you or not. Blessings.

Beata Agustin

Date: 8/4/2021 12:55:00 AM

Thanks for the giggles from this muse. I hope to compose one according to your contest requirement. God bless you.

Jennifer Fenn

Date: 8/3/2021 8:57:00 PM

Lol! Poets who enter your contest have big shoes to fill! Let’s see if we can top this!

Brandy Nicole

Date: 8/3/2021 7:25:00 PM

Hmm, it seems the tissue over her nose didn't help that much. (Yuck !) She can still smell. She is waiting for the elevator doors to open, so she can breathe again. :) This is cute and clever. Thanks for the smile this evening. :) Brandy

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/3/2021 1:20:00 PM

I wish I had Read your rules better and seen this cute example first. I have about six stanzas and need to start all over. haha!!!

Charles Messina
Date: 8/3/2021 7:09:00 PM

lol...sorry

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 8/3/2021 8:51:00 AM

A brilliant example for your elevator contest Charles, what fun it is to join in… Belle

Paris-Maree Boreham

Date: 8/2/2021 9:50:00 PM

Geez Wheeze what was that? LoL am glad i wasn't on that elevator hahahaa

Jan Allison

Date: 7/31/2021 5:47:00 PM

ha ha ha I hope I can write one as good as this:-) hugs Jan xx

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 7/31/2021 3:53:00 PM

I'm pinching my nose and giggling all the while, :)

Tom Cunningham

Date: 7/31/2021 2:54:00 PM

Lol, everyones worst nightmare. Great example for your contest Charlie. Hope you're keeping well. Tom

Marilene Evans

Date: 7/31/2021 1:05:00 PM

Charlie, you made me laugh so hard. I'm not sure if I could come up with something.

Constance La France

Date: 7/31/2021 7:54:00 AM

Charlie, lol, you made me giggle, great example for your contest, I am not great with funny but let me see if I can find my funny bone ~ peace and tranquility _Constance

L Milton Hankins

Date: 7/31/2021 7:50:00 AM

Charles, you have given me a wonderful example, so I shall let one go for you. Get your handkerchief ready!

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/31/2021 7:43:00 AM

Lol! Charlie, You have penned a funny example for your contest. I will see what I can come up with:-) Alexis