What Vision

(Done in a form called Wrapped Refrain)

What vision most inviting I now see before my eyes,
upon this grassy hill beyond which peaks of mountains rise
to heaven’s heights, where clouds are swirled 
the pink of an enchanted world!
It’s with great gladness I am drawn
to what appears at break of dawn.
With long hair streaming in the wind, she stands in front of me.
Oh, can you guess what vision most inviting I now see?

How sweet will be our days; she’s come again. And everything
will brighten;  birds will sing. Here is mythical Goddess Spring!
Shining, clad in white, midst the wild
bloom, she treads. Lovely woman-child!
And where she goes, a seedling grows;
a soft breeze blows; a new stream flows.
Young hearts are all a-flutter, and the bard takes up his pen.
How blessed our world. How sweet will be our days; she’s come again!

Submitted Feb. 2, 2022 for 'A STRAND (1065)' Poetry Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Balasubramanian Avatar
February 4, 2022 at 2:19 AM
Beautiful. Loved the beauty in this personification. Congrats!
Callus Avatar
October 2, 2016 at 5:19 AM
How very beautiful this is, Andrea...one of your best! I'm wrapped in its delightful cloak! Congrats on this fine win. Regards // paul
Allison Avatar
October 1, 2016 at 6:19 PM
what a fascinating for you used - have never seen this before - your creativity inspires me to try harder with my own works:-) hugs Jan xx
Scars Avatar
October 1, 2016 at 10:40 AM
lovely poem about our beautiful nature lovely Andrea :) congratulations on your placement :)-luloo
Canerdy Avatar
October 1, 2016 at 9:40 AM
This is LOVELY, Andrea! Congrats on your win. Janice
A  Avatar
October 1, 2016 at 9:14 AM
Andrea, Congrats on your win. Stop by my blog "in a perfect world" and celebrate with a smile or two. With Hugs **SKAT**
Lindley Avatar
May 25, 2015 at 12:25 AM
My God, there is much similarity. Goddess Spring in yours and Goddess of Nature in mine. Form too has similarity. Great write my friend..This is an impressive and very creative write..A7 Adding this to my fav list to study..
Torres Avatar
March 20, 2014 at 9:44 AM
beautifully penned... an amazing masterpiece here... CONGRATULATIONS Andrea!!! ..&__&
Mehta Avatar
March 20, 2014 at 4:58 AM
Well penned write and congratulations on the fine win, andrea
Andresen Avatar
March 20, 2014 at 4:04 AM
- Congratulations on your win in the contest sponsored by Giorgio A.V. - A wonderful win poem from you Andrea ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Goswami Avatar
March 20, 2014 at 3:12 AM
She is our purified soul . What vision ! well written dear poet...Best wishes from India...
A  Avatar
March 20, 2014 at 1:33 AM
ANDREA, Congrats! Enjoyed your winning poem. Love ~SKAT~
A  Avatar
March 20, 2014 at 1:01 AM
Andrea , Congrats, awesome win! ~SKAT~
A   Avatar
March 19, 2014 at 10:36 PM
Hi Andrea Impressive like the themes. Congratulations on your win. :) Love ~LINDA
Poteet Avatar
March 19, 2014 at 9:01 PM
Appropriate as we celebrate the coming of spring tomorrow. I'll have to research that wrapped refrain, Well-done Andrea, Congrats on your win.
Walker  Avatar
March 19, 2014 at 3:12 PM
Congrats on your win Andrea... Verlena
Horsch Avatar
March 19, 2014 at 7:53 AM
Congrats on your win Andrea, The Goddess spring is almost here. But you brought her to us a little early in this wonderful poem.......Hugs......Roger
Stephens Avatar
March 19, 2014 at 7:43 AM
Hi Andrea, Congrats on your win. Your Spring Goddess should meet my version of a Spring lady in "Spring Reborn". Regards Theresa x
Brumley Avatar
April 4, 2011 at 6:43 PM
What a vision indeed! You know that I love this poem girl! I love this Goddess although I have to take 70 mg. of Benidryl just to be around her! Good luck in the contest!
Austin Avatar
February 27, 2011 at 9:48 AM
Goddess Spring...Sun God. You know how I love mythology, so I gotta love this one and the other one too. Love, Dave
Knop Avatar
February 27, 2011 at 5:52 AM
Awesome entrance for Debbie's contest, Andrea, best of luck!...Love, Gert
Aul Avatar
February 26, 2011 at 7:57 AM
Good luck with this great write.......George
Kendrick Avatar
February 26, 2011 at 7:48 AM
Enjoyed the form..I have read many written in this form but did not know what style it was called..Good luck in the contest with your creative work..Sara
Sweetheart Avatar
February 25, 2011 at 2:35 PM
Wonderful write Andrea.. such beautiful imaginative lines flowing like warm breezes on a Summer day luv.. if for any contest..good luck my friend.. u have a certain flare to entice every reader luv..
Tate Avatar
February 25, 2011 at 9:57 AM
Andrea, you have such a grasp on imagery depicting metaphors of spring, people and nature all entertwined. Good show and good luck in the contest. Thanks for your nice comments on my poem Stream of Life.
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