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(Done in a form called Wrapped Refrain) What vision most inviting I now see before my eyes, upon this grassy hill beyond which peaks of mountains rise to heaven’s heights, where clouds are swirled the pink of an enchanted world! It’s with great gladness I am drawn to what appears at break of dawn. With long hair streaming in the wind, she stands in front of me. Oh, can you guess what vision most inviting I now see? How sweet will be our days; she’s come again. And everything will brighten; birds will sing. Here is mythical Goddess Spring! Shining, clad in white, midst the wild bloom, she treads. Lovely woman-child! And where she goes, a seedling grows; a soft breeze blows; a new stream flows. Young hearts are all a-flutter, and the bard takes up his pen. How blessed our world. How sweet will be our days; she’s come again! Submitted Feb. 2, 2022 for 'A STRAND (1065)' Poetry Contest

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Date: 2/4/2022 2:19:00 AM
Beautiful. Loved the beauty in this personification. Congrats!
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Date: 10/2/2016 5:19:00 AM
How very beautiful this is, Andrea...one of your best! I'm wrapped in its delightful cloak! Congrats on this fine win. Regards // paul
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Date: 10/1/2016 6:19:00 PM
what a fascinating for you used - have never seen this before - your creativity inspires me to try harder with my own works:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 10/1/2016 10:40:00 AM
lovely poem about our beautiful nature lovely Andrea :) congratulations on your placement :)-luloo
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Date: 10/1/2016 9:40:00 AM
This is LOVELY, Andrea! Congrats on your win. Janice
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Date: 10/1/2016 9:14:00 AM
Andrea, Congrats on your win. Stop by my blog "in a perfect world" and celebrate with a smile or two. With Hugs **SKAT**
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Date: 5/25/2015 12:25:00 AM
My God, there is much similarity. Goddess Spring in yours and Goddess of Nature in mine. Form too has similarity. Great write my friend..This is an impressive and very creative write..A7 Adding this to my fav list to study..
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Date: 3/20/2014 9:44:00 AM
beautifully penned... an amazing masterpiece here... CONGRATULATIONS Andrea!!! ..&__&
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Date: 3/20/2014 4:58:00 AM
Well penned write and congratulations on the fine win, andrea
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Date: 3/20/2014 4:04:00 AM
- Congratulations on your win in the contest sponsored by Giorgio A.V. - A wonderful win poem from you Andrea ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/20/2014 3:12:00 AM
She is our purified soul . What vision ! well written dear poet...Best wishes from India...
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Date: 3/20/2014 1:33:00 AM
ANDREA, Congrats! Enjoyed your winning poem. Love ~SKAT~
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Date: 3/20/2014 1:01:00 AM
Andrea , Congrats, awesome win! ~SKAT~
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Date: 3/19/2014 10:36:00 PM
Hi Andrea Impressive like the themes. Congratulations on your win. :) Love ~LINDA
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Date: 3/19/2014 9:01:00 PM
Appropriate as we celebrate the coming of spring tomorrow. I'll have to research that wrapped refrain, Well-done Andrea, Congrats on your win.
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Date: 3/19/2014 3:12:00 PM
Congrats on your win Andrea... Verlena
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Date: 3/19/2014 7:53:00 AM
Congrats on your win Andrea, The Goddess spring is almost here. But you brought her to us a little early in this wonderful poem.......Hugs......Roger
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Date: 3/19/2014 7:43:00 AM
Hi Andrea, Congrats on your win. Your Spring Goddess should meet my version of a Spring lady in "Spring Reborn". Regards Theresa x
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Date: 4/4/2011 6:43:00 PM
What a vision indeed! You know that I love this poem girl! I love this Goddess although I have to take 70 mg. of Benidryl just to be around her! Good luck in the contest!
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Date: 2/27/2011 9:48:00 AM
Goddess Spring...Sun God. You know how I love mythology, so I gotta love this one and the other one too. Love, Dave
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Date: 2/27/2011 5:52:00 AM
Awesome entrance for Debbie's contest, Andrea, best of luck!...Love, Gert
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Date: 2/26/2011 7:57:00 AM
Good luck with this great write.......George
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Date: 2/26/2011 7:48:00 AM
Enjoyed the form..I have read many written in this form but did not know what style it was called..Good luck in the contest with your creative work..Sara
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Date: 2/25/2011 2:35:00 PM
Wonderful write Andrea.. such beautiful imaginative lines flowing like warm breezes on a Summer day luv.. if for any contest..good luck my friend.. u have a certain flare to entice every reader luv..
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Date: 2/25/2011 9:57:00 AM
Andrea, you have such a grasp on imagery depicting metaphors of spring, people and nature all entertwined. Good show and good luck in the contest. Thanks for your nice comments on my poem Stream of Life.
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