Wet Desert Hope


Sad mother   ...   no son
Went off to war, never come home
No phone call, no letter come
Flowers planted in the garden,
came spring never sprung
Sad, sad mother   ...   misses her only son
	            Navajo mother, 
          raised under the desert sun 
			Peaceful woman, 
	forgave the white man 
for what he done 
When she forsook God in the midst of a long famine,
		   that selfsame day 
	desert rain came pouring down
Now once again, the desert sky has no rain cloud 
To beg God to forgive her sin, 
	     for the life of her son, she ain’ too proud
She adopted the peace of the white man,
then asked her son not to go fight in his war
But true to his name, Running Spirit ran
Now, in the desert of her soul, 
	            it’s raining tears in a downpour
Struggling through her long famine of pain,
she keeps clinging to wet desert hope
	Sad, sad, sad mother   ...   no son
Holding on strong ... 
		       but for how long ... 
				          to her last hope
Sits in a rocking chair at home
with a gun on her lap   ...   and a handwritten note:
“My tears, they could drown the sun,
but I wait for the desert rain to still come
But should the day come when I lose my last hope,
it’s my choice: I choose the gun   ...   not the rope”
		      Sad, sad, sad, sad mother   
	   ...   no son, no son, no son — no sun
Waiting alone, so long, in darkness by the phone,
listening for his voice after each singing ringtone
		         The rope of despair 
keeps trying to choke off all her air 
Still, she’s holding on strong 
                                              trying her best to cope ... 
But each passing day  
gets closer to feeling the final tightening of the rope — 
yet for now, she rests the gun on the lap of her hope
Her tears they drown the sun
with wet desert hope
Written last on the note:
“Forgive me, son ... 
if you come home, and I’m gone”

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 7/3/2017 9:08:00 AM
This is heartbreaking Freddie. Very moving. Well written. - Dean
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Date: 7/1/2017 11:30:00 AM
A very moving piece of your fine writing, Freddie.
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Date: 6/28/2017 9:54:00 AM
This is deeply poignant and touching Freddie. Your picture of the poor mother waiting for her boy in despair is so moving. Well expressed my friend...Maria
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Date: 6/27/2017 6:22:00 PM
Emotion pours from me when I read this. Great work. I wonder, F.R. Jr., if the lines were in a different sequence, if this would draw even more emotion. For example: "but for how long ... to her last hope Sits in a rocking chair at home with a gun on her lap ... and a handwritten note: “My tears, they could drown the sun, but I wait for the desert rain to still come But should the day come when I lose my last hope, it’s my choice: I choose the gun ... not the rope”
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Date: 6/27/2017 6:32:00 PM
(cont.) This set of lines is so powerful, so revealing. Revealing mid poem. The quote: “Forgive me, son ... if you come home, and I’m gone” is so genuine, visceral, a deep line that broadens where the poem could be going/or go for the reader. Try it as the first line of the poem. Don't reveal that he's her only son until the end. I dig this poem -- tough topic. Great lines that can be played with, rearranged, so as to not reveal too much to the reader too quick.
Date: 6/27/2017 11:54:00 AM
What was your inspiration?
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Date: 6/27/2017 10:20:00 AM
I'm with Heidi, sadly heartbreaking and deeply touching my friend.
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Date: 6/27/2017 9:15:00 AM
This one is heartbreaking Freddie! Well written and expressed.
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