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In deep of night, I sink into pain’s hell That fingers bang heavily without calm, Where staring violets cannot foretell, How near or far I'll be from sorrow’s harm. While flickers of stars descend on relay My newborn child lies cold, grim buds prevail, And breaths endure the ache from evening’s slay Questioning heaven, I begin to wail. And as I droop wearily in bent form, This flat-line succumbs to reality, While beads of prayer clatter like a storm Angst rising, my jailed heart a misery. Contest of Eve Roper: Second Chance N/A May 2016 Posted 5/23/2016 Resubmitted 6/3/2016

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Date: 7/24/2016 1:32:00 AM
Wonderful win, Nette...skat
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Date: 6/12/2016 10:03:00 AM
Congratulations, Nette on your big win in Eve Roper's Second Chance contest. Deep and sorrowful verses that make any heart ache in misery. Beautiful and profound feelings expressed in every stanza. Thank you for sharing it. Best Wishes & Hugs, Andrew.
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Date: 6/8/2016 5:47:00 PM
Congrats Nette, for your placement with this deep poem!! ;-)
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Date: 6/5/2016 10:43:00 PM
Lovely sad write! Congratulations!
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Date: 6/5/2016 8:38:00 PM
Nette, congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
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Date: 6/5/2016 8:35:00 PM
Very sad and emotional poem. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 6/5/2016 7:09:00 PM
Nette, a beautiful poem! congrats on your placement in the contest! :)-Luloo
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Date: 5/24/2016 1:56:00 PM
Excellently done my lovely friend. A +7 i feel my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
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Date: 5/23/2016 12:50:00 PM
Wow! This is awesome, awesome and so awesome. This piece is heartfelt and deeper than deep.
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Date: 5/23/2016 9:25:00 AM
oh gosh... this is a weepy one indeed :( Awesome job with this, Nette.
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Date: 5/22/2016 3:34:00 PM
This was read with a "sunken and sad" heart! A sadly courageous write with immense impact! This is so real to me! I saw my Mom, when I was nine and what would have been her fourth son move on to be an Angel because he was born with a hole in his heart! Your words are real! Bless you Nette!
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Date: 5/22/2016 2:43:00 PM
My dear, I haven't choked this much in a long while. Incredible paean with images that haunt--" ache from evening's slay", " jailed heart a detainee."
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Date: 5/22/2016 1:06:00 PM
- Heartbreaking and beautiful, Nette - Good luck in contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/22/2016 1:04:00 PM
This is brilliant Nette! "While beads of prayer clatter like a storm" I love this line! #7 ; )
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