Waiting

I did not know that one could feel death cold in summer sweat,
as images of you flash lightning fast, the wind remains still and vigils
past the midnight hour, no relief comes from the short rain shower.

But images are not enough when the cold of the night yearns for warmth;
for the bed never used to be this big, the sheets this chilly to one’s touch,
the hours never used to be parched lips waiting to be moistened by your kiss.

If only dealing with feelings was as simple as watching scenes from old movies
where in despair, the heroine can just crumple the letter to throw in the bin,
only to pick it up later and lovingly remove the creases, to be read again.

So as a patient farmer waits for the grains to grow from green stalks
and a mother who calmly expects to see the face of the child in her womb,
I will soothe the sorrow in my breast, till fate deigns for me too, to rest.




12 July 2015
Open Poetry Contest - 6th Place
Sponsor: Charlotte Puddifoot

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 7/25/2015 9:37:00 PM
Beautifully written. I was captured to the very last word. Worthy 7.
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Date: 7/25/2015 4:28:00 AM
Waiting...perfect title to go with this amazing poem! Congrats on your placement in the contest. I can truly relate to your sentiments here!
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Date: 7/22/2015 3:02:00 AM
Wonderful write n win Kim! Big congrats!
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Date: 7/21/2015 8:21:00 AM
Lovely winning entry Kim, congrats!! pleased to see us three in the list.. :D!~Olive Eloisa yey~
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Date: 7/20/2015 2:43:00 PM
Oh dear, very sad! Happiness comes from seeing that you had a place in the winning list, though... Julia, xx
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Date: 7/20/2015 5:56:00 AM
Such beauty and sadness dancing together. Well done Kim
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Date: 7/20/2015 4:24:00 AM
Excellent offering, Kim!! Worthy of this win and a top rating. Congratulations! The poet in you is maturing at a fast pace:) hugs // paul
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Date: 7/19/2015 8:42:00 PM
Wonderful piece of work, Kim, effortlessly beautiful. Congratulations, Viv x
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Date: 7/19/2015 6:12:00 PM
Kim, congratulations in Charlotte Puddifootst... SKAT
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Date: 7/19/2015 4:54:00 PM
I really like this; a blending of the classical and contemporary, it reads well, and I love that sixth line (grammatical tip: 'used' instead of 'use') - congrats on your win in my contest :)
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Kp Nunez
Date: 7/19/2015 7:03:00 PM
Thank you, Charlotte! I really appreciate the opportunity and the inspiration. As to the grammatical tip, thank you too, although I checked again some web authorities (for I seem to remember my grammar teacher saying otherwise), most said that negative for "used to be" should be "did not use to be" is correct, but not widely accepted because it is informal (which is in agreement with my old teacher's English grammar rules) :-))). To resolve the issue, I will change "did not" with "never". Again, thank you so much!
Date: 7/19/2015 2:46:00 PM
such a beautiful emotional write Kim many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/16/2015 1:33:00 AM
ahh crazy lovely Kim, I have missed your words and I am glad i visited PS today :)) You have "soothe the sorrow in my breast". I love it!!!
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Date: 7/14/2015 4:20:00 PM
This is so beautiful... I absolutely love it all. That second stanza is awesome, and I love the first one too, the line, "past the midnight hour, no relief comes from the short rain shower." and the line "only to pick it up later and lovingly remove the creases, to be read again."...I am intrigued yet again. This is a fav! The pain is so vivid, and the understanding is powerful. Rest hopefully will relieve. Always Laura
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 7/15/2015 2:02:00 PM
No problemo, Kim! I completely understand. I' back to read this beautiful piece!! ~Laura
Date: 7/13/2015 5:48:00 PM
the waiting and reliving of one's reflective moment so well defined through this gem of a piece, kim.. huggs
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Date: 7/13/2015 4:06:00 PM
I really like this one and the comparisons you made to other types of waiting at the end of the poem. Very nice one to read today!
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Date: 7/13/2015 2:41:00 PM
Kim, beautifully penned and full of emotion 7 and thanks for visiting pastel reflectons
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Date: 7/13/2015 8:30:00 AM
Oh!!!! A beautiful and lovely write, sad but intrigue.......A.M.
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Date: 7/13/2015 6:58:00 AM
Hi Kim, They say half the people in the world are lonely. Some of the people I see that live by themselves is quite remarkable, one never knows why. A sensitive write Kim. I might add, I live by myself. Ah, one never knows why-------------John
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Date: 7/13/2015 3:18:00 AM
The heart cannot rest without that which it lives for my beautiful Poetess...that second verse is so lucid with feeling and nostalgia, it is painful beauty...J.A.B.
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Date: 7/13/2015 3:10:00 AM
A very captivating write, Kim. Well said of the emotions and feelings. It is a feeling been put in unexpected place, time and space. In why are we vulnerable in the presence of another is one thing that pushes us to become a better version of ourselves. (^_^) Noel.
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Date: 7/13/2015 12:56:00 AM
I like the way you gently touch the pools of the sorrow of lonliness allowing us to feel the depth. Love it. Kind regards, Ian
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