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This is an example for the contest (06/2024) Same Poem, Different Form. Good luck everyone and happy writing! <3;)
Vulnerable: free verse: Vulnerability The only flower blooms in a field of withered weeds. The wind howls in a strong, and violent breeze. A single drop of water drips onto the desert sands. So lost and so alone, just like I am. New life is exposed to zero below, A snowflake falling through sun beams. In this place that is oh, so cold, The last leaf hangs on winters bare trees. I am exposed, like I have no skin. I've just been born, I am naked again. A thousand eyes behold, there's nothing they can't see. Nowhere to hide in this vast, stormy sea. You've torn down my only refuge... Stolen all of my pride... Given every hand a stone... that they sling with their eyes... And now, here I stand, Since you left me alone, Since you left me, Alone... With who I am. Vulnerable: iambic pentameter: Vulnerability The only flower In a field of weeds. The wind is how'ling, strong, violent breeze. A drop of water on the desert sand; So lost and so alone, just like I am. I am so exposed, like I have no skin, I've just been reborn, I'm naked again. A thousand eyes look, nothing they can't see, Nowhere to hide in this vast, stormy sea. You have torn my refuge, stolen my pride, Given all hands stones, they sling with their eyes. And now, here I stand, ever since you left, Since you left me, alone, with who I am.

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Date: 6/12/2024 5:55:00 AM
Awesome use of metaphor and like SO said below, hoping your contest is better supported than the last one. I think it will be since people are getting to know you better. Soupmail
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Crystol Woods
Date: 6/12/2024 9:23:00 AM
You're being kind too! I appreciate that Tom! I'm growing and gaining everyday though and even if it's not just right I enjoy the heck out of poetry lol! I was happy with the support in the last contest, there were so many great patter sayings! Thanks again my friend!xoxo
Date: 6/12/2024 4:35:00 AM
Dear Crystol, I really loved the vulnerability which is utterly breathtaking. You have shown a lot of raw emotion, and exquisitely shown the artistry in the crafting of the words. Chef's kiss! You laid your soul bare and allowed us to feel that profound exposure. What a courageous, beautiful piece - bravo! - Blessings, MY Friend, Daniel
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Crystol Woods
Date: 6/12/2024 9:21:00 AM
You're so kind,thank you. Perhaps the iambic pentameter isn't quite right but I'll keep trying! Ty for your comments Daniel! Xo
Date: 6/11/2024 3:01:00 PM
Hello, Crystrol, trees are bare in winter. Only when the snow comes they feel clothes. or decorated in ice. Hugs. /Darlene/
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 6/13/2024 11:12:00 AM
Hello Crystrol, I will write about it in the winter season. en joy your day my friend. Hugs. /Darlene/
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Crystol Woods
Date: 6/11/2024 7:43:00 PM
Mk...;) <3... thanks for chiming in sweet Darlene! Very poetic, thinking of the ice and snow as clothing! You should write about it! Hugs bk at u! Xo
Date: 6/11/2024 11:34:00 AM
Great example.. Your poems is full of emotions and written very well.. Interesting contest, I hope you get plenty of entries..
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Crystol Woods
Date: 6/13/2024 1:28:00 AM
Oh gosh... was that a joke and it just flew right over my head?! Cause the photo is just a indistinguishable silhouette? I'm just going to quit now... everything I say shoves my foot deeper and deeper in my mouth lol!
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Crystol Woods
Date: 6/13/2024 1:24:00 AM
Okay I'll have to trust my instincts more lol...I can't make it the photo, too small... I'm on a phone not computer maybe that's why. But as I said it matters not in the context of Good poetry!! ;) <3 A bloke...smh Tom...:)
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Silent One
Date: 6/12/2024 10:24:00 AM
thank you for your kind words and yes.. I am male.. as you can probably make out in my photo lol.. No offence taken.
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Tom Woody
Date: 6/12/2024 5:51:00 AM
'es deffo a bloke!
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Crystol Woods
Date: 6/11/2024 7:47:00 PM
Awe so sweet, thank you, Silent One. You know what is strange? I've labeled you as male although I have no idea if that's correct or not lol! I wonder what causes us to arbitrarily appoint gender? Anyway, male or female, not important for you ARE an ubber-talented poet! ( I mean no offense with this btw) ty for your sweet comment! Xo

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