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Vodka and Lime Andaree For Contest

VODKA AND LIME light and heavenly distilled to silence night personal dark secret delight drifting thoughts spinning time on substance abuse sublime brain freeze back lime Vodka smack another filtered climb every poem clothed in rhyme pure imagination takes to flight light and heavenly distilled to silence night

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Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 10/19/2015 4:12:00 PM

as andrea said a few lines off on syllable count, but i really like the poem itself - this is why i'm not keen on restricted syllable form, it can push a very good poem far lower than it should be...congrats on your placement anyway :)

Kim Van Breda
Date: 10/19/2015 4:30:00 PM

Thanks Charlotte and Andrea for comments and encouragement :) .. my first attempt at Andrea's format, and not as easy as I thought. I think I got it right in the second one I tried.. called "LAMPS" ( about backstreet abortion).. but I had already submitted this one ~~X~~

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/17/2015 9:09:00 PM

at least one line was off on syllable count. Great poem though! Congrats.

Kim Van Breda
Date: 10/19/2015 4:28:00 PM

Thanks Charlotte and Andrea for comments and encouragement :) .. my first attempt at your format, and not as easy as I thought. I think I got it right in the second one I tried.. called "LAMPS" ( about backstreet abortion).. but I had already submitted this one ~~X~~

James Fraser

Date: 10/9/2015 2:15:00 PM

Crafted beautifully Kim, love it. Way to go - wishing you a lovely weekend, James :)