Visitor Finale - A collaboration with July Morning

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The Story so far…
Makani (The Rising Wind), a beautiful extra-terrestrial researcher is sent to a remote island to observe earth. She finds Sam, a shipwrecked earthling near death owing to drowning. Sam (Ka ‘Lo - ‘A Mighty Eagle’), was despatched to identify the location and investigate unusual signal activity monitored to be emanating from a remote group of island atolls. 

Makani breaches her Mother Planet’s charter which is for observation only and specifically forbids contact.  She and Sam inevitably fall in love - a wonderful new experience to her for which she has to bear the consequences…


Makani (The Rising Wind) Surrealistic sensations immortalize as our lips seek and lock Interchange of strange, new emotions flow as our tongues entwine On my fevered skin your caressing fingers script my Rhapsody in Blue A thrilling euphoric state of bliss unfamiliar to this body ‘o mine Yet to construe your oeuvre - I am Makani, the Venus of your every verse I ~ the dew that cumulates dusk to dawn on my awakening rose I ~ the aromatic rapture floating me through your every page I ~ the ink that elicits from your quill that no entity dare oppose Transported through time and space, orbiting in an interstellar kiss- But wait... Though this rapturous music flutes a mellifluous purr A discordant humming infiltrates these harmonious chords Do you hear? Hark at the sky - Oh earthling, hear that humming sound A shuttle sent from the mothership with my Commander - He is here My people are benign - worry not, you have naught to fear Observe how he leaps off the hovering craft before it has grounded His expression reflects disappointment - and with me, frustration Fear not my love, for it is for me and me alone that he has come I have disregarded a sacred command, in his pained eyes - a violation My law and duty bids me that violence is forbidden Our planet has for centuries lived in a harmonious system So why has he taken my arm in this forceful grip? O omnipresent Ancestral Immortals hear my plea, I need your wisdom Speak, O wise ones, for your words I will heed On earthly ears your voices are choral music in an evanescent breeze
Ancestral Guardian Spirits “Makani, it is your obligation, you must return Struggle not and bid your farewell, suppress this unnatural desire”
Makani (The Rising Wind) O omniscient ones though I am heavy with grief I call my sensations to order - I will comply As for you my worthy comrade, this violence toward me is anathema I must say my farewell - I will be brief Lest I return pain for pain and orders defy
Ancestral Guardian Spirits "Makani, struggle not - you must acquiesce to his command Dry your tears - Though we understand not your obsession with this alien We deny your pain not - motion your sentiment to him from afar - Alas, your struggle has created such woe! Your commander has fallen, his breath of life has become Contiguous with this planet's wind song - it is forbidden It is forbidden... it will be viewed as a violation We fear - My dear - We fear Heed our words - depart now you must To your Mother Planet you are now unable to return Set forth now in your craft, be patient, We will instruct you on the course you will need to set” Sam (Ka ‘Lo –‘A Mighty Eagle’) I am human, a man of flesh and blood, nothing more Yet I have beheld things which no man should behold I was near death, washed upon some ethereal shore From whence I have arisen; my mates presumably dead Why was I chosen to suffer this bliss and torment? Why did I not perish along with the others? This creature before me appears to be heaven sent Her touch, her touch, like nothing I have experienced Or is she a demon sent to carry me away to some lonely void Bereft of all humanity and corporeal comforts? And yet, these past few days I have thoroughly enjoyed Her sweet society, her comfort, her tender kiss Her tears upon my tongue are salty like my own The blood which runs upon the rock red, like mine I see the sorrow in her eyes for what's been sown- The death of her comrade troubles her so She softly takes my hand and leads me to her ship, Imploring me to come, to take me... somewhere, Far from here on some fantastical journey, a trip Into the great unknown, into the blackness of space. She places my hand over her heart and hers upon mine Images and thoughts merge into a coherent pattern I understand - she cannot go home, we must search for A world to call our own, an Eden from which to start anew...
Makani
(The Rising Wind) Sam, my earthly love - I name you Ka ‘Lo - A mighty eagle I ~ the Rising Wind beneath your Wings in synchrony we will soar On Avian wings we shall embark on an adventure of interstellar travel Colour my life as I will yours as a technicolour journey we explore Sam (Ka ‘Lo –‘A Mighty Eagle’) As I look through the tempered glass I see earth, my earth Topaz blue and angel white, a sparkling jewel in the ebon expanse I'm going to miss my home, and, for what it's worth - The girl I once loved and must now leave behind Acknowledgements : I trust you enjoyed the Finale of ‘Visitor’. My appreciation and thanks go out to July Morning for his co-writing ‘Visitor’, to bring you this exciting three part series. JM is not only a superb Poet but an impressive story teller as well. Our styles worked effortless from the very beginning of this series when coincidently we were thinking of the plot with similar ideas. Who knows, this could be happening on a parallel universe as we write!
A Maria Williams and July Morning collaboration
Video: Mirage – Music Kitaro Published on Jan 27, 2018

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Date: 6/29/2018 7:28:00 AM
Exceptional!
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Date: 4/18/2018 7:55:00 AM
Whatta dynamic duo!!!! Fabulous youse guys... cheers, Happy Jack XOX
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Date: 4/18/2018 9:03:00 PM
Thanks so much Jack my friend, how sweet of you to visit....Maria :)
Date: 4/1/2018 2:31:00 PM
JUST NOW FOUND THIS WONDROUS CREATION. Truly a jewel and one that has great depth, flow and power! You two make a powerful team! A fav....
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Date: 4/18/2018 9:04:00 PM
Sorry I'm so late in acknowledging this Robert, I'm just now trying to catch up with all the backlog. Thank you both for the visit and support , you know I do appreciate it my friend....Maria Hugs
Date: 2/19/2018 1:38:00 PM
An entertaining and enthralling story, throughout! I am still on a break from posting poems here, but I came back for a few reads, including the culmination of this tale. Much enjoyed!
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Date: 2/25/2018 1:10:00 AM
Thank you so much Robert, I really appreciate that. Welcome back from your lunch break.Hope to see you back and posting my friend....Maria
Date: 2/18/2018 8:43:00 AM
You have explained the whole series really beautifully and I m glad that it has a happy ending, he has to leave behind his past life yet both of them were happy and have each other in the end, a nice end to a very nice series, good luck
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Date: 2/19/2018 4:51:00 AM
Thank you so much Faraz for taking the time to read the whole of the series.I am so glad that you enjoyed the galactic journey, Will see you on your page....Maria
Date: 2/14/2018 1:53:00 AM
Oh, I am an "Avatar" freak, and love the pics and prallels, (my email is "tsahaylu" but I also use pamtseotu and other Na'vi words) ... also a major Trekkie, as JM knows! :-)
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Date: 2/16/2018 9:02:00 PM
Lost count of the many times I watched "Avatar". Well you have another major trekkie here. All aboard for some Galaxy Travel?...Maria
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Date: 2/16/2018 8:58:00 PM
I'm so glad that you enjoyed this Greg. It wasn't all smooth sailing though, I knew the story line, what I wanted to convey, but you know its easier said then done.I did have a very good poet and story teller to co write with and in the end imagination took over and we soared. Thanks for the encouragement and support Greg, I really appreciate it and so does JM...Maria
Date: 2/14/2018 1:50:00 AM
(continued) ... the fact that it was a collab astounds me, as I just could never give way so freely as you two have here ... I truly admire that, (as I am too much of a control freak). This is going into my favs for sure, and I will be reading again. Be very proud of this one, you two, this is great penning all the way around, and I just plain had FUN! Blessings, Friends! :-)
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Date: 2/14/2018 1:48:00 AM
Ah, a tasty sci-fi sandwich with so many layers - meat, veggies, condiments! Oh, but way beyond those basic comparisons ... just wonderful writing on multiple levels, but brought together quite well ... the first two parts just a tad more fluid than the last, but I like the switching of gears. This is a bit fantasy, a bit "hard" sci-fi, and much creativity and thought ...
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Date: 2/12/2018 8:41:00 PM
Wow! Maria what an enthralling, enticing, sensual and thrilling finale to your wonderful series of sci-fi love. Congratulations to you and July for creating a seamless collaboration in this fantastic, out-of-this-world love story. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan
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Date: 2/13/2018 5:07:00 AM
thank you so much Susan, so glad that we delivered and that it met with your approval. I'm really happy about that my dear friend. See you on your page soon....Maria xxx
Date: 2/12/2018 12:20:00 AM
I thoroughly enjoyed this story. Truly fantastical and absorbing. Loved it. Now I'm even looking forward to your next story. Great video too by-the-way. Thumbs up!
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Date: 2/12/2018 2:14:00 AM
Thanks so much Carole. I'm so glad that you did. As always I so appreciate your visit and excellent comments my friend. Thanks for the support....Maria xxx
Date: 2/11/2018 7:26:00 PM
The video is also incredible.
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Date: 2/11/2018 9:37:00 PM
Thanks, it was "beamed" to me....Maria
Date: 2/11/2018 7:24:00 PM
You both finished in fine style, a piece/series to be proud of. Thanks for letting me know you posted it. Hugs Rick.
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Date: 2/11/2018 9:36:00 PM
Thanks Rick, so glad that you liked it. I really appreciate your visit and fine comment....Maria
Date: 2/11/2018 4:36:00 PM
Excellent collaboration. The first two parts of the story were the best. I kind of got a bit lost in the third part, but I do like the concept of the character names and the coming together of the two lovers who are worlds apart (but then again not really worlds apart) - symbolically and through image of "wind beneath the eagle's wings".
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Date: 2/11/2018 9:30:00 PM
Thanks Leanne, I kind of got lost in the third part too. In fact it was quite hard to tear myself away from this fantastical journey, a trip to the great unknown, into the blackness of space. Hard coming back to earth sometimes.Thank you for the visit and excellent comments, I really appreciate it....Maria
Date: 2/11/2018 11:22:00 AM
Colossal AWESOMENESS!!!...Maria & JM...love the video toooo...stay in the light my friends...^WW^
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Date: 2/11/2018 9:25:00 PM
Hey, I'm kind of getting hooked on this word AWESOMENESS. Could see myself using it. Lol. WW so glad to see you my dear friend. Thank you for the love and support always....Maria
Date: 2/11/2018 9:25:00 AM
I agree with Martin.. As I commented on July morning poem, not really my cup of team this fantasy stuff, but you two did a great three part write.. You both compliment each other very well.. I do like the sensual part of this chapter..
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Date: 2/11/2018 9:22:00 PM
So glad you liked it Si, It was great working with this very talented poet. We did a great job of reading each others mind.Lol Thanks for the support as always....Maria
Date: 2/11/2018 4:03:00 AM
AWESOMENESS!! Science fiction eat you heart out!! Maria takes a bow!!! What an excellent mix of great minds. The Icemann has spoken!!
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Date: 2/11/2018 9:17:00 PM
So glad you liked it Martin, Wow, I think you really did like this Lol....Maria
Date: 2/11/2018 3:18:00 AM
Wow, brilliantly done,I can see a book looming . Regards Tom
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Date: 2/11/2018 9:15:00 PM
So glad you liked it Tom, always appreciate your brilliant words and support. Lol a book, we will have to see, thanks for the vote of confidence though.....Maria
Date: 2/10/2018 2:14:00 PM
A hearty round of applause for both collaborators! Having followed this narrative from beginning to end I must say that I have been impressed by the seamless flow. You travel on the same wavelength. Regards // paul
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Date: 2/11/2018 9:12:00 PM
So glad you liked it Paul, always appreciate your brilliant words and support my friend.....Maria x
Date: 2/10/2018 2:06:00 PM
Good gosh where do you find these cool vids? Great working wit ya!
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Date: 2/11/2018 12:46:00 AM
Thanks JM, it was great working with you too. This video was Heaven Sent or should I say it was 'beamed' to me?
Date: 2/10/2018 1:36:00 PM
Culmination of a marvelous story that deserves to be made known outside the perimeter of PS! You deserve every honor available here my friends, Maria and J.M.!
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Date: 2/11/2018 9:12:00 PM
So glad you liked it Demetrios my dearest friend always appreciate your brilliant words and support my friend.....Maria xxx
Date: 2/10/2018 12:50:00 PM
- Well, I have to congratulate with this wonderful story to both of you - I have been waiting for the conclusion ... a first class finale - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/11/2018 9:10:00 PM
So glad you liked it Anne-Lise always appreciate your brilliant words and support my friend.....Maria xxx
Date: 2/10/2018 12:08:00 PM
You two are great story tellers, Maria and JM. Your imagination reaches far beyond earth, as well illustrated in this final episode. Kudos to both!
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Date: 2/11/2018 9:09:00 PM
Thanks Vijay, always appreciate your brilliant words and support my friend.....Maria
Date: 2/10/2018 10:07:00 AM
I like what you wrote...I'm amazed that you wrote about this topic... A good take on the subject...Very creative, if not real...All the best Maria
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Date: 2/11/2018 9:08:00 PM
Yes one never knows does one? Thanks Arturo, I really appreciate your visit and comments always....Maria
Date: 2/10/2018 9:25:00 AM
An exquisite poem from two writers who can write in such a sublimal way. It was a poem I thoroughly enjoyed reading. Well done to both of you.
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Date: 2/11/2018 9:04:00 PM
Thank you my dear friend Victor. You know as always I appreciate your valuable opinion, and I'm so glad that you liked this. Thanks from both of us.