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Vines Of Winter

Crystallized dew drops scatter across vines in winter, while I can feel the harsh grip of the season reaching for my throat, slithering ever closer, bitter air sweeping across crackling skin. Loneliness weighs heavy beneath ashen clouds that coat the skies. The scent of dry ozone fills my nostrils as I struggle to breathe. A step upon the gelid ground makes my feet shake, trying not to fall. I look out in every direction, seeing nothing but the barren carcass of what was once summer~ when the warmth of days seemed to stretch on forever. The scent of fresh pine once wafted through the breeze; those days are now just a bygone memory, shattered , lost in the frozen mist. I rub my hands together, desperate to feel something beyond the numbness. I continue onward with my journey~ there is no time for rest now. The sun begins to set upon alabaster fields below, and the wolves begin their search at dusk. I must find your burial shrouds before they do, for they are the only way to bring us back together again.

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Date: 3/5/2025 9:12:00 AM
I like your great descriptive, and bleak view of Winter.
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Sara Jama
Date: 3/5/2025 2:13:00 PM
Thank you so much.
Date: 3/4/2025 2:51:00 AM
Oh unique. congratulations on your win dear poet. cheers!!!
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Sara Jama
Date: 3/5/2025 2:14:00 PM
Thank you so much.
Date: 3/4/2025 1:34:00 AM
Fantastic write, congratulations
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Sara Jama
Date: 3/5/2025 2:14:00 PM
Thank you very much.
Date: 3/3/2025 8:38:00 PM
Omg grumpy im so happy to see you win! Congratulations!!! Well deserved! I had a feeling craigsz will see the talent in you.
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Sara Jama
Date: 3/5/2025 2:15:00 PM
Thank you so much Ink. You deserved the win too.
Date: 3/3/2025 12:48:00 PM
Where have you been? - This is gifted writing and a powerfully poignant read. Your skills have gone far beyond this venue! I do wish, however, that (please) it would help presentation to format the poems in a more equal line length and play with that, because it would also help with your phrasing (phrasing being subtle presentation)--anyhow - wish I had written this!
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Sara Jama
Date: 3/3/2025 2:34:00 PM
Thank you so much for placing me in your contest. I absolutely loved your prompt. I will keep in mind your constructive feedback. I always try to work on my line length but my emotions get the better of my writing unfortunately.
Date: 2/25/2025 8:12:00 AM
imagery in words such as “ashen clouds” “dry ozone” “crackling skin” winter is apparent, moods me so and what’s intriguing are the portioned seasons back to back. Winter vs summer, “barren carcass” Love wild life metaphors for a touch of dark. Pure gold! A fave as well~
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Sara Jama
Date: 3/3/2025 2:31:00 PM
Thank you so much for taking the time to read my work. I appreciate the kind words and thoughtful feedback.
Date: 2/25/2025 7:19:00 AM
Oh and a fave! Altho you never fave my poems! (Eye rolls)
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Sara Jama
Date: 3/3/2025 2:30:00 PM
Sorry. I don't think I fave much to be honest.
Date: 2/25/2025 7:18:00 AM
Ah grumpy! Look at you! Writing for contests and stuff too now on soup! Im so happy to see you write for a Craig contest: he is an amazing poet and judge ! And as for your poem must i compliment you? You know you are an amazing poet without any accolades! I absolutely love the flow and depth and how different your take is! I resonate most with "Loneliness weighs heavy beneath ashen clouds that coat the skies." Such raw emotions youv woven while painting imagery with such descriptive language! Pleasure reading this gem! Best wishes! Always
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Sara Jama
Date: 3/3/2025 2:32:00 PM
Thank you Ink so much for always being so supportive. You are an amazing friend and wonderful poet.

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