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Views of You

Now, when the day is cool and new While fragile light is still allowed My paper captures views of you Your eyes, the shape of shifting clouds While fragile light is still allowed I sketch your hair as blooming trees Your eyes, the shape of shifting clouds As rain replenishes the seas I sketch your hair as blooming trees Noting beauty by scars contrast As rain replenishes the seas Like souvenirs from journeys past Noting beauty by scars contrast Where mirrors stand, fractured and bent Like souvenirs from journeys past With all the futures you present Where mirrors stand, fractured and bent My paper captures views of you With all the futures you present Now, when the day is cool and new. 5/16/22 Rhyming Pantoum of Five Stanzas contest Sponsor: L. Milton Hankins Placed 8th Poem of the Day 05/18/2022

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Ann Peck

Date: 6/16/2022 2:47:00 PM

Back to read this wonder again. I'm faving it to read often. I love "I sketch your hair as blooming trees..." Also, I wasn't familiar with Pantoum, but now think it's a beautiful form.

JENNIFER PROXENOS

Date: 6/11/2022 3:31:00 AM

this write was destined to win Michelle clever and creative from start to finish - a superb Pantoum - congratulations my friend! Hugs and blessings, Jennifer,

Sam Kauffman

Date: 6/7/2022 9:16:00 AM

Congratulations Michelle. Wonderfully penned. I especially like "scar...like souvenirs of the past." You have such a delightful way of making words paint pictures in imagery. So happy to see this on the winners list! Blessings to you my friend. Understand you are dusting off the ark in the great north woods.

Jeanette Brewin

Date: 6/7/2022 4:12:00 AM

A good poem. Well done.

Paulette Calasibetta

Date: 6/6/2022 7:52:00 AM

Congratulations on your winning entry in the contest. The imagery you paint is a perfect story unfolding. :)Paulette

mv venkataraman

Date: 6/6/2022 5:22:00 AM

This poem is novel and the lines are made in such a way, we feel a puzzle present in the structure. The poet has rhymed technically to mesmerize us magically!

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/5/2022 10:52:00 AM

Hi Michelle, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your winning write. Enjoy the rest of your weekend;-)Alexis

L MILTON HANKINS

Date: 6/4/2022 1:29:00 PM

Michelle, I was so pleased to see your name on my placement list. All of the poems, including yours, were winners. Congratulations!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/4/2022 12:17:00 PM

Back with Congratulations on this New win. "Wonderful" Have a great/blessed~~day/weekend writing away.................

Charles Reese

Date: 5/28/2022 11:46:00 PM

I've written quite a few Pantoums and this one is as perfect as they come. The imagery is delightful as well. The words flow so gracefully, a job well done.

John Watt

Date: 5/21/2022 4:39:00 PM

My artistry sibling, I am in agreement with Connie that this poem belongs in a pantoum textbook to study when one is courageous enough to pursue writing in this challenging form. I've tried only a few and know that a line that works well in one stanza doesn't necessarily mesh with the next. The pairing of "Your eyes, the shape of shifting clouds / As rain replenishes the seas" is nature, artistry, and romance coalesced into a stunning poetic statement. Again, "Like souvenirs from journeys past / With all the futures you present", is a delightful expression of committed love and the future arc it enables. Beautiful, a poem to be revisited and re-enjoyed. Hearty congrats for the deserving POTD ~ John

John Watt
Date: 5/22/2022 3:31:00 PM

...and I forgot to mention - going in my faves

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/21/2022 6:22:00 PM

It sometimes takes fine tuning with a word or two to make it flow evenly from one stanza to the next, but I am sure you have done some great ones, I will have to search them out! Thank you as always, artistry bro :)

Juliet Ligon

Date: 5/21/2022 4:31:00 PM

You pieced this together so nicely. Sometimes it's hard for these to flow, but this is so natural. I love the vision you gave of sketching their hair as blooming trees.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/21/2022 6:20:00 PM

Yes, this came together pretty quickly, after one or two false starts! Thank you for your kind comment, Juliet~

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/19/2022 6:35:00 PM

Wow Michelle, you could give lessons in how to write a proper Pantoum! The flow of your repeating lines exquisitely blend together. I see why this wonderful poem was honored with POTD! Very deserving my friend. I am Faving this beauty in case I ever get the courage to write one! Congratulations! Blessings xxoo

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 10:58:00 AM

I am humbled by your generous compliment, it means a lot from a fellow poet I admire so much! (soupmail)

Brandy Nicole

Date: 5/18/2022 7:26:00 PM

Painting with words in this way, is so beautiful and creative. Your thoughts leave me in complete awe. You have captured the essence of your subject, in such a wonderful way. Congratulations Michelle, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. :) Brandy

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:48:00 PM

Thank you for your kind words, Brandy, I appreciate it

Joseph May

Date: 5/18/2022 5:53:00 PM

Beautiful write Michelle, Congrats on POTD

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:48:00 PM

Thank you Joseph

Constance La France

Date: 5/18/2022 5:23:00 PM

Michelle, beautiful Pantoum and congratulations on receiving the POEM OF THE DAY honor, blessings ~Constance

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:48:00 PM

Blessing to you also, thank you Constance

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/18/2022 3:26:00 PM

Congratulations on your POTD, Michelle, you have created incredible poetry. The imagery you use and the way you express yourself are both breathtakingly lovely. Kindest regards

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:49:00 PM

Thank you for your comment, I appreciate it

Ann Peck

Date: 5/18/2022 2:27:00 PM

Dear Michelle ~ Another exquisitely lovely poem. It flows magically. I love this line: when fragile light is still allowed. So descriptive.5B Congratulations on POTD!

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:49:00 PM

I am so glad you enjoyed it, thank you very much, Ann

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 5/18/2022 2:02:00 PM

Congratulations on your POTD honour, Michelle. You have created such an outstanding Pantoum - enjoyed every line of this exquisite creation by a master poet. Love and blessings ~ Mala

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:50:00 PM

I am very flattered, thank you so much for such a wonderful compliment~

Sam Kauffman

Date: 5/18/2022 10:20:00 AM

Your poetic grace shines out from every line in this romantic pantoum! A beautiful and serenely crafted poem of agape love! You have gathered your immense skills for this exquisite poem of love underpinned by your romantic passion. The work of a master poet indeed! Congratulations on your win POTD dear friend.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:51:00 PM

You are so kind, I am very touched by your lovely comment, thank you Sam

Alexis Y.

Date: 5/18/2022 9:47:00 AM

WoW! Michelle, You have composed such a well-written Pantoum. It’s just beautiful; it has good content and imagery. Who did you write this for? Whomever it is, I know that they appreciated it very much. Best wishes in the contest.Congratulations on a well-deserved poem of the day. Enjoy the honor. Have a nice day:-) Alexis

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:52:00 PM

I didn't write this with a specific person in mind, it just grew from the feeling of a new day, I am so pleased you liked it, thank you for your gracious comment~