Views of You

Now, when the day is cool and new
While fragile light is still allowed
My paper captures views of you
Your eyes, the shape of shifting clouds

While fragile light is still allowed
I sketch your hair as blooming trees
Your eyes, the shape of shifting clouds
As rain replenishes the seas

I sketch your hair as blooming trees
Noting beauty by star's contrast
As rain replenishes the seas
Like amulets from journeys past

Noting beauty by star's contrast
Where mirrors stand, fractured and bent
Like amulets from journeys past
With all the futures you present

Where mirrors stand, fractured and bent
My paper captures views of you
With all the futures you present
Now, when the day is cool and new.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2022

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La France Avatar
December 7, 2024 at 5:49 PM
Michelle, congratulations on having your poem selected for the Variant Verses Anthology, it is a beautiful poem, love it, so wonderfully penned, a FAV, blessings Constance
Anaya Avatar
July 28, 2022 at 11:04 AM
The imagery is delightful. The way you put words together, a nice idyllic remembrance, Michelle. I would love to see the sketch. a fave, I'll have to try this form. Congratulations! ~Anaya
Faulkner Avatar
July 29, 2022 at 8:25 AM
Actually I don't have the gift for drawing or sketching, this is more of a fictional imagining, but am very pleased you enjoyed it, thank you so much Anaya
Faulkner Avatar
July 24, 2022 at 10:25 PM
Thanks for your support John. hope you're staying cool down in San Diego-
Watt Avatar
July 24, 2022 at 10:20 PM
Lovely to read this again and see it on the winners' list. Enjoy your week, my friend
Goldsmith Avatar
July 23, 2022 at 8:59 AM
Back with Congratulations again on this "New" win. A wonderful write. Your pen was working overtime on this one. Have a great/blessed~~day/weekend................
Faulkner Avatar
July 24, 2022 at 10:08 AM
You also Paula, thank you kindly
Alex Avatar
July 23, 2022 at 6:27 AM
"As rain replenishes the seas", "Like souvenirs from journeys past" - Beautiful. Congratulations!
Faulkner Avatar
July 23, 2022 at 7:34 AM
Thank you for your kind comment~
Seeker Avatar
July 23, 2022 at 5:17 AM
Warmest congratulations on your top win with the superb poem, Michelle
Faulkner Avatar
July 23, 2022 at 7:34 AM
Appreciate it, thank you very much
Agustin Avatar
July 23, 2022 at 3:39 AM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this. God bless you.
Faulkner Avatar
July 23, 2022 at 7:34 AM
Thank you Beata
Ward Avatar
July 23, 2022 at 2:45 AM
Thank you for sending this into my contest, "Your Favourite Poem from the first half of 2022". It was a sure winner.
Faulkner Avatar
July 23, 2022 at 7:26 AM
I am flattered for the placement, thank you very much, Julia
Peck Avatar
June 16, 2022 at 2:47 PM
Back to read this wonder again. I'm faving it to read often. I love "I sketch your hair as blooming trees..." Also, I wasn't familiar with Pantoum, but now think it's a beautiful form.
Proxenos Avatar
June 11, 2022 at 3:31 AM
this write was destined to win Michelle clever and creative from start to finish - a superb Pantoum - congratulations my friend! Hugs and blessings, Jennifer,
Kauffman Avatar
June 7, 2022 at 9:16 AM
Congratulations Michelle. Wonderfully penned. I especially like "scar...like souvenirs of the past." You have such a delightful way of making words paint pictures in imagery. So happy to see this on the winners list! Blessings to you my friend. Understand you are dusting off the ark in the great north woods.
Meadows Avatar
June 7, 2022 at 4:12 AM
A good poem. Well done.
Calasibetta Avatar
June 6, 2022 at 7:52 AM
Congratulations on your winning entry in the contest. The imagery you paint is a perfect story unfolding. :)Paulette
Venkataraman Avatar
June 6, 2022 at 5:22 AM
This poem is novel and the lines are made in such a way, we feel a puzzle present in the structure. The poet has rhymed technically to mesmerize us magically!
Y. Avatar
June 5, 2022 at 10:52 AM
Hi Michelle, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your winning write. Enjoy the rest of your weekend;-)Alexis
Hankins Avatar
June 4, 2022 at 1:29 PM
Michelle, I was so pleased to see your name on my placement list. All of the poems, including yours, were winners. Congratulations!
Goldsmith Avatar
June 4, 2022 at 12:17 PM
Back with Congratulations on this New win. "Wonderful" Have a great/blessed~~day/weekend writing away.................
Reese Avatar
May 28, 2022 at 11:46 PM
I've written quite a few Pantoums and this one is as perfect as they come. The imagery is delightful as well. The words flow so gracefully, a job well done.
Watt Avatar
May 21, 2022 at 4:39 PM
My artistry sibling, I am in agreement with Connie that this poem belongs in a pantoum textbook to study when one is courageous enough to pursue writing in this challenging form. I've tried only a few and know that a line that works well in one stanza doesn't necessarily mesh with the next. The pairing of "Your eyes, the shape of shifting clouds / As rain replenishes the seas" is nature, artistry, and romance coalesced into a stunning poetic statement. Again, "Like souvenirs from journeys past / With all the futures you present", is a delightful expression of committed love and the future arc it enables. Beautiful, a poem to be revisited and re-enjoyed. Hearty congrats for the deserving POTD ~ John
Watt Avatar
May 22, 2022 at 3:31 PM
...and I forgot to mention - going in my faves
Faulkner Avatar
May 21, 2022 at 6:22 PM
It sometimes takes fine tuning with a word or two to make it flow evenly from one stanza to the next, but I am sure you have done some great ones, I will have to search them out! Thank you as always, artistry bro :)
Ligon Avatar
May 21, 2022 at 4:31 PM
You pieced this together so nicely. Sometimes it's hard for these to flow, but this is so natural. I love the vision you gave of sketching their hair as blooming trees.
Faulkner Avatar
May 21, 2022 at 6:20 PM
Yes, this came together pretty quickly, after one or two false starts! Thank you for your kind comment, Juliet~
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 19, 2022 at 6:35 PM
Wow Michelle, you could give lessons in how to write a proper Pantoum! The flow of your repeating lines exquisitely blend together. I see why this wonderful poem was honored with POTD! Very deserving my friend. I am Faving this beauty in case I ever get the courage to write one! Congratulations! Blessings xxoo
Faulkner Avatar
May 20, 2022 at 10:58 AM
I am humbled by your generous compliment, it means a lot from a fellow poet I admire so much! (soupmail)
Nicole Avatar
May 18, 2022 at 7:26 PM
Painting with words in this way, is so beautiful and creative. Your thoughts leave me in complete awe. You have captured the essence of your subject, in such a wonderful way. Congratulations Michelle, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. :) Brandy
Faulkner Avatar
May 20, 2022 at 5:48 PM
Thank you for your kind words, Brandy, I appreciate it
May Avatar
May 18, 2022 at 5:53 PM
Beautiful write Michelle, Congrats on POTD
Faulkner Avatar
May 20, 2022 at 5:48 PM
Thank you Joseph
La France Avatar
May 18, 2022 at 5:23 PM
Michelle, beautiful Pantoum and congratulations on receiving the POEM OF THE DAY honor, blessings ~Constance
Faulkner Avatar
May 20, 2022 at 5:48 PM
Blessing to you also, thank you Constance
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