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Views of You

Now, when the day is cool and new
While fragile light is still allowed
My paper captures views of you
Your eyes, the shape of shifting clouds

While fragile light is still allowed
I sketch your hair as blooming trees
Your eyes, the shape of shifting clouds
As rain replenishes the seas

I sketch your hair as blooming trees
Noting beauty by star's contrast
As rain replenishes the seas
Like amulets from journeys past

Noting beauty by star's contrast
Where mirrors stand, fractured and bent
Like amulets from journeys past
With all the futures you present

Where mirrors stand, fractured and bent
My paper captures views of you
With all the futures you present
Now, when the day is cool and new.

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Constance La France

Date: 12/7/2024 5:49:00 PM

Michelle, congratulations on having your poem selected for the Variant Verses Anthology, it is a beautiful poem, love it, so wonderfully penned, a FAV, blessings Constance

I Am Anaya

Date: 7/28/2022 11:04:00 AM

The imagery is delightful. The way you put words together, a nice idyllic remembrance, Michelle. I would love to see the sketch. a fave, I'll have to try this form. Congratulations! ~Anaya

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 7/29/2022 8:25:00 AM

Actually I don't have the gift for drawing or sketching, this is more of a fictional imagining, but am very pleased you enjoyed it, thank you so much Anaya

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 7/24/2022 10:25:00 PM

Thanks for your support John. hope you're staying cool down in San Diego-

John Watt

Date: 7/24/2022 10:20:00 PM

Lovely to read this again and see it on the winners' list. Enjoy your week, my friend

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/23/2022 8:59:00 AM

Back with Congratulations again on this "New" win. A wonderful write. Your pen was working overtime on this one. Have a great/blessed~~day/weekend................

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 7/24/2022 10:08:00 AM

You also Paula, thank you kindly

Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/23/2022 6:27:00 AM

"As rain replenishes the seas", "Like souvenirs from journeys past" - Beautiful. Congratulations!

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 7/23/2022 7:34:00 AM

Thank you for your kind comment~

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 7/23/2022 5:17:00 AM

Warmest congratulations on your top win with the superb poem, Michelle

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 7/23/2022 7:34:00 AM

Appreciate it, thank you very much

Beata Agustin

Date: 7/23/2022 3:39:00 AM

Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this. God bless you.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 7/23/2022 7:34:00 AM

Thank you Beata

Julia Ward

Date: 7/23/2022 2:45:00 AM

Thank you for sending this into my contest, "Your Favourite Poem from the first half of 2022". It was a sure winner.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 7/23/2022 7:26:00 AM

I am flattered for the placement, thank you very much, Julia

Ann Peck

Date: 6/16/2022 2:47:00 PM

Back to read this wonder again. I'm faving it to read often. I love "I sketch your hair as blooming trees..." Also, I wasn't familiar with Pantoum, but now think it's a beautiful form.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/11/2022 3:31:00 AM

this write was destined to win Michelle clever and creative from start to finish - a superb Pantoum - congratulations my friend! Hugs and blessings, Jennifer,

Sam Kauffman

Date: 6/7/2022 9:16:00 AM

Congratulations Michelle. Wonderfully penned. I especially like "scar...like souvenirs of the past." You have such a delightful way of making words paint pictures in imagery. So happy to see this on the winners list! Blessings to you my friend. Understand you are dusting off the ark in the great north woods.

Daisy Meadows

Date: 6/7/2022 4:12:00 AM

A good poem. Well done.

Paulette Calasibetta

Date: 6/6/2022 7:52:00 AM

Congratulations on your winning entry in the contest. The imagery you paint is a perfect story unfolding. :)Paulette

Mv Venkataraman

Date: 6/6/2022 5:22:00 AM

This poem is novel and the lines are made in such a way, we feel a puzzle present in the structure. The poet has rhymed technically to mesmerize us magically!

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/5/2022 10:52:00 AM

Hi Michelle, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your winning write. Enjoy the rest of your weekend;-)Alexis

L Milton Hankins

Date: 6/4/2022 1:29:00 PM

Michelle, I was so pleased to see your name on my placement list. All of the poems, including yours, were winners. Congratulations!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/4/2022 12:17:00 PM

Back with Congratulations on this New win. "Wonderful" Have a great/blessed~~day/weekend writing away.................

Charles Reese

Date: 5/28/2022 11:46:00 PM

I've written quite a few Pantoums and this one is as perfect as they come. The imagery is delightful as well. The words flow so gracefully, a job well done.

John Watt

Date: 5/21/2022 4:39:00 PM

My artistry sibling, I am in agreement with Connie that this poem belongs in a pantoum textbook to study when one is courageous enough to pursue writing in this challenging form. I've tried only a few and know that a line that works well in one stanza doesn't necessarily mesh with the next. The pairing of "Your eyes, the shape of shifting clouds / As rain replenishes the seas" is nature, artistry, and romance coalesced into a stunning poetic statement. Again, "Like souvenirs from journeys past / With all the futures you present", is a delightful expression of committed love and the future arc it enables. Beautiful, a poem to be revisited and re-enjoyed. Hearty congrats for the deserving POTD ~ John

John Watt
Date: 5/22/2022 3:31:00 PM

...and I forgot to mention - going in my faves

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/21/2022 6:22:00 PM

It sometimes takes fine tuning with a word or two to make it flow evenly from one stanza to the next, but I am sure you have done some great ones, I will have to search them out! Thank you as always, artistry bro :)

Juliet Ligon

Date: 5/21/2022 4:31:00 PM

You pieced this together so nicely. Sometimes it's hard for these to flow, but this is so natural. I love the vision you gave of sketching their hair as blooming trees.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/21/2022 6:20:00 PM

Yes, this came together pretty quickly, after one or two false starts! Thank you for your kind comment, Juliet~

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/19/2022 6:35:00 PM

Wow Michelle, you could give lessons in how to write a proper Pantoum! The flow of your repeating lines exquisitely blend together. I see why this wonderful poem was honored with POTD! Very deserving my friend. I am Faving this beauty in case I ever get the courage to write one! Congratulations! Blessings xxoo

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 10:58:00 AM

I am humbled by your generous compliment, it means a lot from a fellow poet I admire so much! (soupmail)

Brandy Nicole

Date: 5/18/2022 7:26:00 PM

Painting with words in this way, is so beautiful and creative. Your thoughts leave me in complete awe. You have captured the essence of your subject, in such a wonderful way. Congratulations Michelle, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. :) Brandy

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:48:00 PM

Thank you for your kind words, Brandy, I appreciate it