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Now, when the day is cool and new While fragile light is still allowed My paper captures views of you Your eyes, the shape of shifting clouds While fragile light is still allowed I sketch your hair as blooming trees Your eyes, the shape of shifting clouds As rain replenishes the seas I sketch your hair as blooming trees Noting beauty by scars contrast As rain replenishes the seas Like souvenirs from journeys past Noting beauty by scars contrast Where mirrors stand, fractured and bent Like souvenirs from journeys past With all the futures you present Where mirrors stand, fractured and bent My paper captures views of you With all the futures you present Now, when the day is cool and new. 5/16/22 Rhyming Pantoum of Five Stanzas contest Sponsor: L. Milton Hankins Placed 8th Poem of the Day 05/18/2022

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Date: 6/16/2022 2:47:00 PM
Back to read this wonder again. I'm faving it to read often. I love "I sketch your hair as blooming trees..." Also, I wasn't familiar with Pantoum, but now think it's a beautiful form.
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Date: 6/11/2022 3:31:00 AM
this write was destined to win Michelle clever and creative from start to finish - a superb Pantoum - congratulations my friend! Hugs and blessings, Jennifer,
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Date: 6/7/2022 9:16:00 AM
Congratulations Michelle. Wonderfully penned. I especially like "scar...like souvenirs of the past." You have such a delightful way of making words paint pictures in imagery. So happy to see this on the winners list! Blessings to you my friend. Understand you are dusting off the ark in the great north woods.
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Date: 6/7/2022 4:12:00 AM
A good poem. Well done.
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Date: 6/6/2022 7:52:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning entry in the contest. The imagery you paint is a perfect story unfolding. :)Paulette
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Date: 6/6/2022 5:22:00 AM
This poem is novel and the lines are made in such a way, we feel a puzzle present in the structure. The poet has rhymed technically to mesmerize us magically!
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Date: 6/5/2022 10:52:00 AM
Hi Michelle, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your winning write. Enjoy the rest of your weekend;-)Alexis
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Date: 6/4/2022 1:29:00 PM
Michelle, I was so pleased to see your name on my placement list. All of the poems, including yours, were winners. Congratulations!
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Date: 6/4/2022 12:17:00 PM
Back with Congratulations on this New win. "Wonderful" Have a great/blessed~~day/weekend writing away.................
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Date: 5/28/2022 11:46:00 PM
I've written quite a few Pantoums and this one is as perfect as they come. The imagery is delightful as well. The words flow so gracefully, a job well done.
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Date: 5/21/2022 4:39:00 PM
My artistry sibling, I am in agreement with Connie that this poem belongs in a pantoum textbook to study when one is courageous enough to pursue writing in this challenging form. I've tried only a few and know that a line that works well in one stanza doesn't necessarily mesh with the next. The pairing of "Your eyes, the shape of shifting clouds / As rain replenishes the seas" is nature, artistry, and romance coalesced into a stunning poetic statement. Again, "Like souvenirs from journeys past / With all the futures you present", is a delightful expression of committed love and the future arc it enables. Beautiful, a poem to be revisited and re-enjoyed. Hearty congrats for the deserving POTD ~ John
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John Watt
Date: 5/22/2022 3:31:00 PM
...and I forgot to mention - going in my faves
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/21/2022 6:22:00 PM
It sometimes takes fine tuning with a word or two to make it flow evenly from one stanza to the next, but I am sure you have done some great ones, I will have to search them out! Thank you as always, artistry bro :)
Date: 5/21/2022 4:31:00 PM
You pieced this together so nicely. Sometimes it's hard for these to flow, but this is so natural. I love the vision you gave of sketching their hair as blooming trees.
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/21/2022 6:20:00 PM
Yes, this came together pretty quickly, after one or two false starts! Thank you for your kind comment, Juliet~
Date: 5/19/2022 6:35:00 PM
Wow Michelle, you could give lessons in how to write a proper Pantoum! The flow of your repeating lines exquisitely blend together. I see why this wonderful poem was honored with POTD! Very deserving my friend. I am Faving this beauty in case I ever get the courage to write one! Congratulations! Blessings xxoo
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 10:58:00 AM
I am humbled by your generous compliment, it means a lot from a fellow poet I admire so much! (soupmail)
Date: 5/18/2022 7:26:00 PM
Painting with words in this way, is so beautiful and creative. Your thoughts leave me in complete awe. You have captured the essence of your subject, in such a wonderful way. Congratulations Michelle, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. :) Brandy
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:48:00 PM
Thank you for your kind words, Brandy, I appreciate it
Date: 5/18/2022 5:53:00 PM
Beautiful write Michelle, Congrats on POTD
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:48:00 PM
Thank you Joseph
Date: 5/18/2022 5:23:00 PM
Michelle, beautiful Pantoum and congratulations on receiving the POEM OF THE DAY honor, blessings ~Constance
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:48:00 PM
Blessing to you also, thank you Constance
Date: 5/18/2022 3:26:00 PM
Congratulations on your POTD, Michelle, you have created incredible poetry. The imagery you use and the way you express yourself are both breathtakingly lovely. Kindest regards
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:49:00 PM
Thank you for your comment, I appreciate it
Date: 5/18/2022 2:27:00 PM
Dear Michelle ~ Another exquisitely lovely poem. It flows magically. I love this line: when fragile light is still allowed. So descriptive.5B Congratulations on POTD!
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:49:00 PM
I am so glad you enjoyed it, thank you very much, Ann
Date: 5/18/2022 2:02:00 PM
Congratulations on your POTD honour, Michelle. You have created such an outstanding Pantoum - enjoyed every line of this exquisite creation by a master poet. Love and blessings ~ Mala
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:50:00 PM
I am very flattered, thank you so much for such a wonderful compliment~
Date: 5/18/2022 10:20:00 AM
Your poetic grace shines out from every line in this romantic pantoum! A beautiful and serenely crafted poem of agape love! You have gathered your immense skills for this exquisite poem of love underpinned by your romantic passion. The work of a master poet indeed! Congratulations on your win POTD dear friend.
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:51:00 PM
You are so kind, I am very touched by your lovely comment, thank you Sam
Date: 5/18/2022 9:47:00 AM
WoW! Michelle, You have composed such a well-written Pantoum. It’s just beautiful; it has good content and imagery. Who did you write this for? Whomever it is, I know that they appreciated it very much. Best wishes in the contest.Congratulations on a well-deserved poem of the day. Enjoy the honor. Have a nice day:-) Alexis
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:52:00 PM
I didn't write this with a specific person in mind, it just grew from the feeling of a new day, I am so pleased you liked it, thank you for your gracious comment~
Date: 5/18/2022 7:56:00 AM
Once again, 'your poetic strains replenish my feeble brains.' Just love this write, Michelle. Congrats on POTD! Best always, Gershon
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:53:00 PM
I don't think your brains are at all feeble, actually quite the opposite! Thanks as always for your warm comments, gw!
Date: 5/18/2022 7:56:00 AM
Congratulations for this beautiful POTD Michelle :)
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:53:00 PM
Thank you, Heidi
Date: 5/18/2022 7:31:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTD win. A "Wonderful" Write. Have a great/blessed day writing away.................
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:53:00 PM
And you as well, thank you for your comment, Paula
Date: 5/18/2022 6:45:00 AM
Eloquently written, Michelle, with beautiful imagery. Congratulations on your POTD honor, Bill
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/20/2022 5:54:00 PM
Thank you kindly, Bill, appreciate it
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