Venus Courts Mars On Valentine's Day

A single red, heart-shaped balloon isn’t enough
So I splurge and buy fourteen adorned by cupid
I tie them to the chair of my beloved “Hot Stuff”
To think mere balloons might please him would be stupid

So I search and search for the grandest tea roses
His favorite warm colors are all blended in each 
His desk they decorate in striking poses
Hope these will do the trick and his passion beseech

But then I remember his strong chocolate craving
Godiva treats I purchase and spare no expense
Set beside roses, surely he’ll be raving
He’ll be home in an hour; I can’t bear the suspense

When the door opens, I am wearing a teddy
The Valentine card he takes with a gloomy look
When he sees his desk, he wails, “Enough already!”
And he doesn’t even try my straps to unhook

How puzzled I feel when he says, “We have to talk”
No, he hadn’t forgotten this lovers’ holiday
Into his small closet he suggests we should walk
He seems so depressed; I’d expected a hooray

Piled high in the closet are all occasion gifts
Gaudy Christmas sweaters and tons of chocolate hearts
He can’t find his clothes and between us grows a rift
To sort through this maze, he would need a detailed chart

“Take all this stuff with you and please just leave my home
In fact, I’ll pay your expenses to relocate
And be sure to take that hideous garden gnome
Make it snappy, will you?  I have a date at eight!”



*For Joyce’s “Emotional Response” contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Romios Avatar
December 21, 2019 at 8:40 PM
Quite an outstanding write! Panagiota
Maverick Avatar
April 1, 2015 at 11:34 AM
A cruel man I see here Carolyn, just as well he is only a bit part player..' L O L))) hope things are going O K there, Joe..'
Brown Avatar
February 25, 2011 at 10:14 AM
Congratulations Carolyn,on your win in Joyce Johnson's contest "Emotional Response". Love, Carol
Guzzi Avatar
February 23, 2011 at 4:51 PM
Holey moley!!! I do hope this wasn't real??? Good write. Congrad's Light & Love
Richards Avatar
February 23, 2011 at 8:15 AM
Wow, Carolyn....such a story, with a snappy ending!! Great job, and well deserved win!! Congratulations!
Righting Riley - Shauna Riley Avatar
February 23, 2011 at 6:15 AM
quite the ending....congrats on your win!!!
Beck Avatar
February 23, 2011 at 12:31 AM
well done Carolyn...its kinda reversed from the African mask/boomerang poem........very funny - cupboard filled with emotio-junk....my emo-cupboard was always a bit empty....but it never bothered me L O L....best wishes ...Syd
Taylor Avatar
February 22, 2011 at 8:43 PM
Congrats on a well deserved win, Carolyn. Nice going. xxxRalph
Mannan Avatar
February 22, 2011 at 8:20 PM
Beautiful write with a twist. Many warm congrats for this win.
Pettit Avatar
February 22, 2011 at 8:19 PM
Carolyn, I knew this one would win the first time I saw it. Congratulations on winning in Joyce's contest.
Onclaud Avatar
February 22, 2011 at 7:47 PM
enchanting and engrossing, carols... 3 big cheers to you on the wow win! :) ..more godivas here for you! huggs, nette
Johnson Avatar
February 22, 2011 at 7:25 PM
I loved your poem Carolyn. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
Freeman Avatar
February 17, 2011 at 12:04 PM
Oh my! What a valentine response. This should be enought emotion Carolyn. Agape, Moses
Taiwo Avatar
February 16, 2011 at 6:25 PM
Hi once again, i so much appreciate your comment, that bloke will soon rule world you know, he deserves all the respect in the world. Hey! while talking about it an idea just came in now. Why don't you write a female frankin or fronkunstein, it will be interesting you know, think about it.
Taiwo Avatar
February 16, 2011 at 4:29 PM
For any man not to recognize all the effort that go into showing how much love have gone behind and into those little symbols of affection it means the love have have pack up a long time ago it is unfortunate that we men at the beginning of relationship professed our undying love to win such ladies, but men being adventurous after a period start looking outside the home for more ladies to conquer. It is animal in us that is pushing to commit the sin of unfaithfulness.
Knop Avatar
February 14, 2011 at 5:00 AM
Great poem for Valentine's, dear friend! And I always appreciate your kind comments! Have a HAPPY VALENTINE'S and best of luck for the contest!...Love, Gert
Dufresne Avatar
February 14, 2011 at 4:53 AM
CRUSHING ! OUCH! I hope this is just imagination working, Carolyn. Whew! but you know, every break up must feel much the same way in diverse circumstances. Well done
Song Avatar
February 14, 2011 at 2:26 AM
A perfect score for striking such an emotional chord with me on Valentine's Day. The female in this poem is very giving and expecting reciprocal love..... The man in your poem is a hoarder, sneaky, unappreciative, and won't find anything on "his date at eight" except the realization that YOU were the best thing he ever had! P.s. I wonder what else he was hiding in his closet?
Dietrich Avatar
February 12, 2011 at 10:55 PM
Aha, after reading this, the title makes perfect sense. Very clever, Carolyn. And good luck in the contest. (this is the contest I am having the most difficulty with) LUv, Andrea
Rhinem Avatar
February 12, 2011 at 10:09 AM
Smile ~ "My Love & Warmth to 'You Always' &, All You Love, 'Forever,'" John! ~ Smile, "Have A Very 'Blessed & Beautiful' Day My Dear, Amid Such 'Valentines Moments' As, 'Eternities Beautiful Red Heart Love;' Bye, 'My Dear Lovely, Carolyn Devonshire!'":) ~
Austin Avatar
February 12, 2011 at 10:09 AM
Breathes there a man with heart so cold. Surely he is Mars incarnate. He should be put in that closet and then you should chuck in a hand grenade. Love, Dave
Rhinem Avatar
February 12, 2011 at 10:04 AM
Smile ~ This Amazing verse painted amid such wonderful hues is one of the most sweetened creations of, "Your Beauties," which my eyes have beheld although, "Countless 'Treasures' Has 'Your Many Splendours 'Poetic Stories, Gloriously Painted' & Thus So Told; 'A Beautiful Fave!!!'" ~ I hope that, "Your Radiance," is doing perfectly my dear and, "Thank You," for again blessing myself within such kind coms; very lovely ~ Cont:)
Rhinem Avatar
February 12, 2011 at 9:52 AM
Smile ~ "Your Beauty," had my humbled self laughing aloud all the way through this magnificent creation of "Poetic Sweetness 'My Dear, Precious & Priceless, Beyond Lovely, Carolyn Devonshire!!!'" ~ I could envision it All and was thinking unto myself, what a lame for, how could Anyone ever resist such "A Beautiful Lady As This, 'Your Majestic Self!!!'" ~ Cont:)
Falotico Avatar
February 11, 2011 at 2:58 PM
I have to echo Constance, there is a man out there looking to sweep you off your feet m sure.. a great entry my dear.. and thank you for your sweet comment on "Small Voices".. we lost our child but remain positive there was a reason.. thanks for your love...luv Michael
Locksley Avatar
February 11, 2011 at 1:18 PM
How dare he! Asking you to take the garden gnome with you was the last straw. I hope his date turns out to be Vampira. That's what he deserves. I'm pretty sure this is all in fun but there are men like this. Insensitive to say the least. Best to you in the contest!
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