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Veil of Despair

The crying of a lonely night, pine's branches drooping moonlit white as sighing winds touch heaven’s gate, without the need to stand and wait for every roaming rainclouds' stare, she needs to ask the why or where in moments when pain veils her face so sullen, yet so full of grace; as her swan wings clutch twilight's hues dripping tears from November's dues yet, eyes open their crystal plumes with hopes of flowers' newborn blooms © ------------ Contest: Joyce Johnson's The Rhyming Game By: nette onclaud

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 5/21/2012 4:10:00 PM
Nette, I'm liking the rhyming game Joyce cooked up herself! Congratulations with your awesome poem, take care :-) * PD
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Date: 5/19/2012 8:07:00 AM
Congrats on your win, nette. Awesome write. Great job. Nice going, my friend. Kudos. hugs, Ralph
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Date: 5/19/2012 6:34:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Joyce's "Rhyming Game" contest Nette. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/19/2012 3:00:00 AM
What a delight... and congrats... Terry
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Date: 5/19/2012 2:02:00 AM
Nette congrats on your win..David
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Date: 9/3/2011 1:50:00 AM
I love youyr quote and write hun. Many warm congrats for this wonderful write and win.
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Date: 9/2/2011 9:09:00 AM
CONGRATULATIONS my friend~~~another win~~~hehehe~~~smile for we've shared the highest placement in the contest together with Carrie and Linda....~~~so proud....*-*really~*~ jun-jun
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Date: 9/1/2011 10:29:00 PM
Nette, Great to see a top win in your corner, Congratulations on first place. Agape, Moses
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Date: 8/31/2011 4:21:00 PM
Well written nette. Congratulations on this very feeling piece.
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Date: 8/31/2011 12:10:00 AM
Beautiful poem Nette, well done. You have such a skill to use great imagery. Congratulations on your well deserved win. Lee
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Date: 8/30/2011 7:19:00 PM
What a fantastic poem your have written. I loved each second I was reading it! Good luck in the contest!!
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Date: 8/30/2011 7:05:00 PM
A beauty as always nette, congrats on your well deserved first place win.
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Date: 8/30/2011 6:53:00 PM
they tumble through her mist- filled night, as evening’s jaws begin to bite. Great use of the words here i see your placement, on tree of poetry...well done babe.
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Date: 8/30/2011 5:59:00 PM
WOW! Awesome poem!!!!!!!Congratulations on your win!!!!!---Lori
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Date: 8/30/2011 5:46:00 PM
Oh nette this had so much meaning I loved those words in there.Congrats on this beautiful poem and thanks for the congrats on my win friend.~LOTS OF LUV~Teresa
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Date: 8/30/2011 4:59:00 PM
You leave me breathless...so many of your poems do that!! Here is the example of pure poetry! :)
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Date: 8/30/2011 4:30:00 PM
What an absolutely superb verse. Excellent rite and a sure win. Greaat stuff, God Bless, JB
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Date: 8/30/2011 4:15:00 PM
Congrats Nette luv on first place win with magnificent poetry my friend.. honored to share first with u ...
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Date: 8/30/2011 3:28:00 PM
Congratulations nette, on your first place win in my contest, with this beautiful poem, and I am sending you a soupymail, in a moment~~
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Date: 8/30/2011 2:09:00 PM
Congrats bl for you fantastic win. You have pictured exceptionally something with which my sense go with that. You have done well. Thanks for sharing. bl
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Date: 8/30/2011 1:41:00 PM
Awesome Nette, congratulations on your great win in the contest *hugs*
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Date: 8/30/2011 12:29:00 PM
What a beautiful Poem you have painted on the canvas of Poetry Soup. It is more than beautiful. Great and outstanding write my friend. It is going to be my fav. Poem. "The emptiness of Autumn’s sky, when leaves and flowers slowly die speaks mainly of a sense of grief~ a blossom dead ~ a wilting leaf' Amazing lines and wonderful flow which moves the mind and heart. I have placed a new Poem ' Take me away but I will come to sing a song' Hope you would read it. Love and best wishes Netto...Ravindra...n onclaud
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Date: 8/30/2011 11:40:00 AM
Congratulations Nette on your first place win this wonderful write. I enjoyed the read~ Caryl
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Date: 8/30/2011 11:34:00 AM
Congrats on 1st Place, nette. Outstanding piece. Enjoyed. Nice going. luv Ralph
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Date: 8/30/2011 11:00:00 AM
you make every word count, worthy of a modern shakespeare. you should teach english. a great write as usual may i add.
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