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A quick scribble for Dilly Dally's Vanishing Point poetry contest

 

Vanishing Point

In my portrait of life   the
    palette began in pigments
of blue, red and yellow,
         but with each stroke,
my horizons slowly dissolved   into
  mustard, muddy brown 
and burnt orange.

Not everything you portray 
    upon a canvas is mutually accepted,
so my soul remained subjective
and my heart   abstract.

As I collect dust upon my shoulders,
     I wish I was a painting  never painted.
Visibility has turned into a veil,
    resulting in stubborn invisibility,
so everything is an illusion
     lingering in a black hole       absorbing
the conspicuous.

I know I will regret not expressing   one day
  but bitter roots remain rooted deep   into the earth.
  
I don't want to hide
  but  protect what breeds inside.
I'm afraid someone may look deeper 
   into this façade    where time forgets the truth. 

My hands resemble a box of nothingness,
     as hues fade from indigo     into charcoal,
with pastels infusing with the darkness.
     My heart is an ocean 
       beneath a motionless surface.

Not everyone can view the world 
   like Van Gogh's eyes,
where the longer you stare 
   the more you become aware.
In blind visions    a 'driftwood' mind    wanders 
    between mental blankness and
the angst of actuality,
               all that survives is blackness.

        If fate was fair 
then we would all view   and be viewed
        in soft pastels of peach,
 sapphire and lilac.

The harder I attempt   to find myself,
  I lose more  than I thought I would gain.

At the end  upon the edge
  in the last exhale    all that is left 
will be the silence after an echo.
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Goldsmith Avatar
September 26, 2024 at 12:38 PM
Congratulations on your win. Some paint with paint on canvas. You as a true writer paint words on paper for us to read. Love reading your words. Enjoy your win as you write away............
mysore Avatar
September 23, 2024 at 7:44 AM
excel write. congratulations dear poet on your win.
Proxenos Avatar
September 16, 2024 at 3:05 AM
At the end dear SO, in your last exhale, your talent and love for poetry will be left as a legacy to your so loved daughter, in whose heart you will remain forever. Therefore you would one day leave behind a lot more than silence after an echo. BLESSINGS, your poems always enjoyable and creative, Jennifer.
Woods Avatar
September 14, 2024 at 11:25 AM
Such drama and angst delivered with blunt language... depressing yet beautiful in the way you paint with your words. Xo
Hind Avatar
September 11, 2024 at 10:13 AM
"The harder I attempt to find myself, I lose more than I thought I would gain." That is a very deep line. A very powerful work, "horizons slowly dissolved into mustard, muddy brown and burnt orange." ....
Narain Avatar
September 11, 2024 at 10:11 AM
Nice poem with excellent metaphors.
Buhagiar Avatar
September 11, 2024 at 2:42 AM
What can you expect more from such a poet like you? Great metaphors. Great arguments. Sure it's a winner.
Manley Avatar
September 11, 2024 at 1:53 AM
The ever expanding bucket of "you". I was talking to someone in a chat the other day about what it was like to be a polymath. And I said, you know that bucketlist? I have a cargo ship. So many things I can do, capable of them all. Navigating the choices can be a really painful thing. We only have one life. And accepting what we did do, and are doing is part of it. Here is to pastels!!! I pick lavender.
Peranteau Avatar
September 11, 2024 at 1:27 AM
ya know dear poet, i felt like i were reading an excerpt from, "the phantom uv the opera"'z diary ;)...here comes autumn....muses muses muses...enjoy...much love
Mo Avatar
September 11, 2024 at 12:53 AM
There is a factory of metaphors and versos somewhere in your psyche coz you bring out banger after banger. I want/need this to score very highly in the contest. Enjoyed!
George Avatar
September 10, 2024 at 9:43 PM
Dear Silent One, I often feel, life is a paradox. What we wish intensely, we never get. We search for meaning, but we find meaninglessness. We drift 'between mental blankness and the angst of actuality,' The reference to Van Gogh adds to the poignancy of the poem. In the grand tapestry of life, we are just a thread. "The harder I attempt to find myself, I lose more than I thought I would gain." This is the absurdity of life. This is true not only in your case, but in the case of most of us. "At the end upon the edge in the last exhale all that is left will be the silence after an echo." What a powerful conclusion. The colors you chose, 'grey and dark' add so much to the mood of the poem. . Simply EXCELLENT.
Leach Avatar
September 10, 2024 at 4:04 PM
You paint a beautiful scribble. We are all priceless masterpieces.
Rodrigues Avatar
September 10, 2024 at 2:52 PM
The muddiness of your portrait at the beginning… love the contrasts of the 2nd verse… I wish I was a painting never painted (if this is truly about you, I am glad you have been painted) stiil we grow and change…I am the whole of yet different… where time forgets the truth…very thoughtful imagery through and through. A fave, Silent!
May Avatar
September 10, 2024 at 1:32 PM
A work of art 'where colors blur, and fade leaving only echoes of silence', Very nicely penned
Onclaud Avatar
September 10, 2024 at 12:52 PM
you paint a wordscape that is both ethereal and ephemeral as man's search for meaning...darkly beautiful-- a duality much like this superb work, S...
Empress Avatar
September 10, 2024 at 12:32 PM
The silence after an echo, what a line to end this profound write with, in the midst of finding ones true self, and surviving the mundane, and not expressing what is suppressed, we feel like we lose alot, this poem gives a very introspective energy and it flows so seamlessly with such brilliant metaphors and use of colors and reference to Van Gogh does enhance the beauty of innermost turmoil, as he too did go through angst and was eventually left with a box of nothingness despite his heart
Empress Avatar
September 10, 2024 at 12:37 PM
being as vast as the ocean, and as deep beneath the motionless surface. The depth of this poem and the way youv woven words in such eloquence truly left me awe inspired and impressed! If i say this is one of my most fave poems written by you again, it may seem like, i say this always, but truly this is impeccable! “I wish I was a painting never painted. Visibility has turned into a veil,” sometimes we all do feel this way, and i felt those lines! Sometimes fate isnt fair and life just takes us through a journey, where all thats left is just an understanding between whats said and whats not and whats seen and whats not. Brilliant! I wish i can quote them all but just this is truly a fave! Best wishes for the contest! Nailed it! Sending you light always
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