Vampire

Pleiades 6 Contest Sponsored by Joseph May 9-21-2023 Venom spreads throughout my Veins as he sucked and sucked. Vague eyes taunted my soul, Void of feelings… cold lips. Visions of death mocked me. Vivid dreams become dark, Vampires aren't just a myth.

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Valsa George

Date: 9/30/2023 10:24:00 PM

This is exactly how a victim sucked by a vampire feels. A horrifying experience sending chills down the spine. Congratulations Alexis on your well deserved win.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 9/29/2023 10:04:00 PM

Congratulations on your well deserved win, Alexis. Wonderful writing! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/29/2023 9:36:00 AM

You did great with the vampire theme. Congrats

Sam Kauffman

Date: 9/28/2023 11:03:00 AM

Terrifying, Alexis. I love your point of view from the victim's standpoint - very clever and original! Congratulations on your win. Blessings of autumn joy!

Joseph May

Date: 9/27/2023 6:14:00 AM

Very nicely done Alexis, Congrats on your win

Jan Allison

Date: 9/25/2023 12:00:00 PM

you paint such a vivid picture of a vampire, I especially love that last line! hugs jan xx

Ink Empress

Date: 9/24/2023 11:17:00 PM

Vampires arent just a myth! Whoa so haunting and brilliant your use of V in your Pleiades and how you’ve described vampires so effortlessly! I love every line and how you’ve phrased them so seamlessly! Especially “ vague eyes taunted my soul” whoa! “Vivid dreams become dark” ah love that!! Goodluck for the contest

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 9/23/2023 9:44:00 PM

This poetic gem is vividly portrayed, and also thrilling and chilling, Alexis. Nicely written. Best wishes for the contest. Evelyn

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/23/2023 7:45:00 AM

Alexis, your Pleiades poem is magnificent, with haunting and spine-chilling imagery. The darkness and drama that pervade each line are impeccably crafted, leaving the reader captivated and enthralled.

Bill Baker

Date: 9/22/2023 1:39:00 PM

You're scarring me, Alexis. I didn't know they were real. Good Pleiades though. :-) Have a great week, my friend. Bill

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/22/2023 12:58:00 PM

Whoa!! Very effective in the scary department. If for a contest, it reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara

Christina Bowring

Date: 9/22/2023 9:22:00 AM

This is a great Pleiades poem Alexis full of dark, dramatic horror. So, so well written. I especially love the line,’Visions of death mocked me’. Good luck in the contest :)

Janice Canerdy

Date: 9/22/2023 6:22:00 AM

Alexis, this is EXCELLENT--descriptive, flowing smoothly along to that last line! Janice

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/22/2023 2:26:00 AM

- Deep and dark that's for sure ... well done and good luck in the contest, Alexis :) - hugs

Joanna Daniel

Date: 9/22/2023 2:18:00 AM

Missed you, Alexis, this pleiades is very well done:) horror byte or should I say 'bite':)

Lin Lane

Date: 9/22/2023 1:30:00 AM

Nicely written, Alexis. I’d been wondering why you hadn’t been posting. I hope everything is good in your world. Hugs.

Lin Lane
Date: 9/22/2023 2:04:00 AM

It’s 4 am here. I don’t sleep more than 4 hours at a time. A bane, but it’s been this way for years. Off to bed with you. Lol

Alexis Y.
Date: 9/22/2023 2:00:00 AM

Sorry to hear you had Covid, but elated to hear you evicted him. You are up late( or is it late where you are) I can't sleep, but I need to get some. Once again thanks for visiting my page:-)Alexis

Lin Lane
Date: 9/22/2023 1:44:00 AM

It’s always my pleasure to read you. I’m just getting over a two week visit from the new strain of Covid. He was not a nice house guest but I finally managed to evict him! Other than that, everything is hunky dory. And thank YOU for asking.

Alexis Y.
Date: 9/22/2023 1:38:00 AM

Hi Lin, All is well in my world. I appreciate you asking. How are you? Thanks for visiting me this fine morning:-)Alexis

Silent One

Date: 9/22/2023 12:02:00 AM

Hey you... I hope you are well. Great from for a vampire.. I can feel theirs blood sucking nature in your poem.. Great use of the letter V and selection of words..

Alexis Y.
Date: 9/22/2023 12:13:00 AM

Hey Silent, I am well, thanks for asking. How are you? Are you back here for good now? Thanks for your kind comment. It's always a pleasure to get a visit from you-Alexis